The next morning on his way to school, James backpack begins to
rattle and glow and remembers the belt from the night before and believes it
wants him to follow it. He decides to follow where the device wants him to go,
the device leads him to a small riverbed. The device then left James hands as
it flew to the middle of the riverbed and as if out of nowhere four, what
looked to be switches, flew to the device, and each switch had a different
design and number corresponding to each of the four shapes in the belt. The
four different designs shown were a rocket, launcher, drill, and radar each
numbered respectively. These four switches went into each of the slots as if
they were always meant to be there. The belt then flew back to James as if it
had chosen James as its true owner, he then puts it back into his backpack then
rushes the rest of the way to school.
Once James arrives to school he sees that there is a giant
commotion going on in the middle of the campus. He begins to investigate,
discovering that there is a monster that is terrorizing people on the campus.
James then felt his backpack begin to rumble again and figures this is what
this belt is for. James goes to a corner hidden away from peers and takes the
belt out of his backpack and it puts itself around his waist. He switches on
the switches and a count down begins. once the countdown reached 1 he pulled
the lever on the left side and he transforms into a suit that gave him immense
power. Little did James know that this power would lead him to become the new
hero for the school and would become known as the masked ranger of monsters.
Cool story! This hero should definitely be part of the marvel movies :p. I thought it was interesting how the superhero gained its power from technology. Times have really changed and they're beginning to have less "natural" abilities and more "superhuman" abilities gained from research and development.
ReplyDeleteI see a sequel coming soon. Great story, especially with how the hero got this new technology. It was less of him finding it and more of the technology finding him which was really cool! I love super hero movies so I especially liked this.
ReplyDeleteThis would be cool if this were to become a movie. The story was interesting, considering it was building up from a regular student who stumbled upon a device never knowing it would one day help him become “The Newest Hero.”
ReplyDeleteWow interesting story! Personally, I always loved those parts of superhero movies when the common individual is presented with a task and reason to become the superhero that everyone knows them for. This piece reminded me of that exactly! Overall, great piece; it captivated me from the beginning!
ReplyDeleteI really like the description of the anxiety and excitement James felt when he realized that he had found such a powerful device. My only piece of advice would be to describe how James is treated in school by his peers; he could potentially be the nerd archetype who finally gets acknowledged by others with his powers or maybe he is already the coolest guy in school and with the belt he becomes the villain... Great job nonetheless!
ReplyDeleteI really love how this shows a guy that gets a power through technology and not inheriting it naturally. It makes me think that maybe once technology evolves so much that everybody could basically become like superheroes regardless of if they had any actual ~powers~. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used a different time frame for the story. I am really into super heroes and I think this belt is a pretty cool gadget for a hero. Great description and details of the belt! Goodjob!
ReplyDeleteThis shows how anyone can be a superhero in their own respect. In this story James found a belt and he needed nothing else but himself. We all have our own hero in us like James, we just need to find it.
ReplyDelete-Ruben Becerra
This story can set the roots for what i think could be a very successful story later. The acquisition of power through technology does make the story more modern and plausible and overall more enjoyable then just reading about someone who gained their abilities from some higher power or was just born with them
ReplyDeleteI loved reading your story as I have always had a slight obsession with superheroes! I love how we all can find something to relate ourselves to James. I hope the sequel comes out soon! :)
ReplyDelete-Tyler Kniss