Oct.
12th 20—
The survivors are few. I am one of
them. I can’t truly pinpoint the origin. My hope has been slowly deteriorating. I wish we would have taken the warnings seriously.
I did not think times would be this desperate. People running back and forth, wild
civilians raiding grocery stores trying to stock up, but, most of all, trying
to protect themselves. The disease is pandemic all over the world. According to
the government, it’s known as Ebola, which is an infectious and fatal disease.
The symptoms are somewhat like the flu involving a severe headache but the
disease can be passed through bodily fluids. To sum it up, you rot from inside
out because your organs fail. I have been extremely careful to stay away from all
types of strangers, especially those who ask about my supplies such as my
precious water. I don’t carry much which is why I’ve been migrating for the
past week. In my backpack I carry bottled water, a flashlight, some canned food
and the clothes on my back.
Did I mention yesterday I witnessed an
infected rise from the floor? As I was passing through a deserted, dimmed,
subway station, I gazed upon a rotting black corpse lying on the floor
appearing to be lifeless. I began to slowly make my way around the corpse but I
noticed it does not appear as lifeless as I believed it to be. Before I make it
to the staircase to leave the barren subway station, the infected began to
gurgle, shout, and slowly rise from the ground running towards me. I recall
dashing towards a fire escape attached to a red-bricked dusty apartment
building with the infected on my tail. As I scrambled to the top, the infected
swiftly lurched itself toward me. I avoided the attack by jumping towards the
left almost falling off the roof and the infected flailing off the roof with a
splat! Recollecting on yesterday’s events, it still gives me the chills.
Currently, I am about to arrive at a beautiful iron-barred sanctuary created
for survivors of the deadly disease. They welcome all healthy and turn away the
infected. It’s a bit disheartening for the infected but for people like me,
it’s a good sign.
ahahaha i loved this piece so much. it was so well written and it was very interesting. it was very funny too! lol good job! this was perfect for halloween :p
ReplyDeleteYour first paragraph made me feel like I was reading something that was out of the "Purge." Like all crime is legal and every man is for himself. I like your take on a modern crisis. I think it is very unique that you created a fictional experience where you examined the affects of the very scary Ebola Virus. You took what many people around our campus joke about and made it known that this issue is serious and should not be ignored. Unfortunately, many people are suffering from this condition in West Africa and the rest of the globe is in paranoia of this infectious disease. The best thing we can do right now, is hope that those people get better and donate to the force, which focuses on assisting individuals in need, so the CDC can attempt to eliminate it and contain it. I am glad that you did not take this issue as a joke, rather you showed us the perspective of one living in an area of disaster. This piece is very commendable.
ReplyDeleteThis leaves the reader wondering what happens after where the story ends.
ReplyDeleteEbola has been a very popular topic, but not in the way it should be. The majority of the comments made about Ebola have been jokes, and some fail to see that we should take this disease seriously. I really enjoyed your approach to this topic and I hope that others begin to view this disease in the same way you do. Great job on this piece.
ReplyDeleteI feel like this piece just is how media over exaggerates things, with this peice being perfect example of fear. Overall, very good story.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was very captivating and the fact that you didn't conclude the end of the year in the title leads to a lot of mystery, Good job!
ReplyDeleteYour title is so clever! I love how you left the ending up to the reader's imagination. For all we know it could be 2015, or 2016, which is completely terrifying. Also your solemn approach to such a serious topic shows a great deal of maturity. Magnificent.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I loved how you incorporated Ebola as the cause of a zombie apocalypse.
ReplyDeleteEbola is a huge topic, this piece is very interesting and enthralling overall great work!
ReplyDeleteGreat story. At one point I was disgusted because of the detail that you put where fell off the roof and splat. I really saw that image in my head. This writing shows that you as the writer took it to the topic of Ebola to the next level. Great, great job
ReplyDeleteI WANT READ MORE!!!lol. This is a very descriptive piece. Your details made me feel like I was there. Overall this is a very good Piece if writing.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting topic, good job
ReplyDeleteEBOLA ZOMBIES! :P By only reading the first few sentences, As I read the first few sentences I was hooked! I'm such a nerd when it comes to zombies so this narrative really stuck out to me! By far, one of my favorite entries I've read on this blog :)
ReplyDeleteI love how you were able to take something current, happening now, and turn it into a great piece of fiction. That takes a lot of creativity. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat way in incorporating current events into a mini fictional story. I thought it was very enjoyable to read, lets just hope people know that people can't rise after passing away from Ebola. Sort of reminded me of The Walking Dead.
ReplyDeleteGood job! I like how you connected whats going on today and made it into a story
ReplyDeleteI like how you informed the readers how serious Ebola could be while simultaneously not making it too crazy and had some light-hearted diction to ease the seriousness. Great piece and definitely an enjoyable read
ReplyDeleteReads like a futuristic novel combined with current events. The dry humor was enjoyable! Made me want to watch "Contagion" again.
ReplyDeleteI love it, you made Ebola an global zombie pandemic. WHAT COULD YOU NOT LOVE! You perfectly made a story that has action and leaves no questions in only 500 words. I am impressed. A truly amazing piece. You should try to continue it, make it a little series like the walking dead comics in a sense. That would be cool, and hey maybe Solano would give you extra credit too.
ReplyDeleteWow! It's lovely to see someone exploring a different perspective. This piece shows that you are up to date on current global issues, which is wonderful! (and such a rarity)
ReplyDeleteGreat job I love anything that you have to survive in like the walking dead and etc good job
ReplyDeleteWe could all relate to how people are panicking about this ebola virus. The imagery in this poem was spot on imagining a pandemic good job
ReplyDeleteI loved the story and the setting of this post-apocalyptic world was very well developed and it added to the story amazingly. I loved the concept of it and it's execution was beautiful. You were amazingly descriptive. This is really one of the better stories. But you named it Ebola...
ReplyDeleteThis was really good, before I got to the sentence about Ebola I started to think of Quarantine. Good job in summing up some potential reality events and adding fiction.
ReplyDeleteI thoroughly enjoyed this story! It scares me how the flu and other viruses can so easily turn into an epidemic! I loved the creativity of the premise of the piece. Keep it up :D
ReplyDeleteI like the portrayal of the ebola epidemic, great job! It reminds me of the video game "The Last of Us."
ReplyDeleteI like how you personally connected to this and made it clear that this disease isn't something to joke around about. It was very interesting. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was great.I loved the dark humor. You really could make this a mini series.
ReplyDeleteYou created a multi-faceted story by depicting the main character's thoughts while illustrating a struggle that leaves the reader wondering. Good job!
ReplyDeleteAlmost everyday I have a conversation about zombies and Ebola. You made my conversations come to life! I want more from your story as to what happens after but well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is very creative and it was an interesting read. This is actually one of my fears! Overall, this was a fun piece! The imagery and detail made it seem realistic; good job!
ReplyDeleteReally good story..i want to read more..great job.!!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was captivating! I liked how you were descriptive! I also liked how you involved Ebola in this piece! This piece has great imagery also. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis reminds me of the show Walking Dead! This story is very creative and I would love to read more. It would be a really good book! This piece is also relatable since Ebola is talked about all the time on the news. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow. Wow wow wow. This was fantastic. I felt like I was reading an excerpt out of The Walking Dead if it was a book. Your word choice was so haunting and spot on. I loved reading every enticing word and each sentence left me wondering what was going to happen next. This is a truly captivating piece, and you should be very proud of yourself. Well done.
ReplyDeleteit kept me interested throughout the whole piece. everything tied together. great job
ReplyDeleteIt had to be October 12? That's my birthday... hahaha, regardless it was comical and very vivid, a good entry
ReplyDeleteI loved how you took something that everybody is talking about and actually made it in to a scenario that I and a lot of other people talk and joke about and I know when people said they haven't thought about this their lying.
ReplyDeleteThis was so captivating to read! I felt as though I was reading your journal entry and just wanted to read the next! Cool idea!
ReplyDeleteTalk about IMAGERY! I loved the sense of suspicion and anticipation for what was going to happen next. By connecting the Ebola outbreak with an apocalypse shows your true humor. The title was also very creative and unique, much like the piece itself! Good job, Steph :)
ReplyDeleteHoly cow!! I honestly love this piece because it's so descriptive and very enjoyable. I love how I was reading it that it made me think about The Walking Dead which is one of my favorite t.v shows! But it's impressive how you made it about Ebola since it's the new and biggest news today. You should continue on writing more of this.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely loved this story! It's so unique and just wow, awesome!
ReplyDeleteI like how you made Ebola into something comedic. My first thought was the walking dead because of the zombie factor. The beginning was intense and it ended up quite humorous. Great piece!
ReplyDeleteI love this, it was so funny and in the beginning it was dramatic. Your imagery was amazing and this is one of my favorite writings this month! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteI really like this a lot. To be honest this is my favorite piece because i really like to investigate the whole Ebola thing and I really love the show The Walking Dead and this whole thing reminded me of that so I thought it was really cool and well written piece.
ReplyDeleteGreat topic i love the vocabulary, the story, and the conclusion. Nice Work!!! :)
ReplyDeleteFreaked me out a bit with the Ebola topic, but it was really intriguing that I kept on reading to see how it would end. Great Job
ReplyDeleteI loved this story! I wanted to keep reading i loved your descriptive vocabulary you used! :) great job
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