Hiking
Why did I have to come was what I thought to myself.
Years ago maybe when I was at the small but annoying age of seven I went on a
hiking trip to Sequoia National Park. The park itself was not what I had
dreaded the thought of. It was the fact that I was going to be away from my
games and toys and that I was going to have to spend all day with my annoying
brothers. On the ride to the national park they were tormenting me as always.
Every minute spent in the car felt like an hour or more as my brothers
continued to be loud. In order to shorten the amount of time in car I decided
to time travel using the amazing powers of sleep. Even this could not happen due
to the obnoxiousness of my brothers just yelling and smacking everything
around. My mother eventually calmed them all down but by then it was too late
to take a nap as we had arrived at our destination.
The first tree I saw when I got there was magnificently enormous.
The trees were about a thousand times taller than any tree I had ever seen
before and as thick as the classroom at the school I was in at the time. They
were bigger in person than they were on the television shows I had seen them
in. They had an unparalleled appearance to them, their red trunks stood out
from the boring dirt that was around everywhere you looked. Some of the trees
roots, or something I thought were roots, protruded out of the ground and zig
zagged its surroundings until eventually touching another one of these giants.
That’s when I realized that were hundreds, thousands if not hundreds of
thousands of these massive trees all around us for miles and miles. All this
awe and wonder I was experiencing was completely shattered by my brothers
beginning to irritate me again.
We began our walk through the forest on a barely visible
path that was left by others who had walked before us. We decided to take a
picture near the entrance of a sort of tree cave thing which is basically a cave
like place made from a tree that is hollowed out at the base for whatever
reason. After the picture everyone went to get a look inside the “tree cave”
while I went to pee. Naturally I didn’t want anyone to see me so I ventured off
pretty far just looking for a good spot. In doing this I unknowingly got myself
lost and was unable to orient myself back onto the direction from which I came
as I had no idea where I came from. “Well at least I’ll be away from my
brothers for a while.” I thought to myself. I began exploring by myself
climbing atop the roots jetting out of the soil. I did this for a while until I
decided I could find my way back to my family. Ofcourse I didn’t know which
direction to start walking in so I began to panic. Fear came over me and I
began to yell for my parents. My oldest brother comes out of nowhere and tells
me to shut it as I was getting annoying. I was reluctant to follow him back at
first because of how irritating he and the others had been earlier. I thought I
was above him and could find my own way back but I eventually gave in and
followed him back to where my parents and other brothers were. I didn’t wander
off again after that and we proceeded to make our way home.
After all that fear had come over me, when I thought I
was going to be lost forever, my lowest point during that trip, I had been
“saved” by my brother. One of which I thought was annoying and was actively
trying to avoid for a time. He had come to help me when I was in dire need of
it. I learned that I can always count on my brothers to be there for me when I
really need them to be whether I want them there or not. This experience left
me with a better appreciation of my family and how despite what you may think, can
help in your hours of need.
this sounds like such a wonderful experience and i'm happy that you got to have this experience. it sounds like you learned and gained a lot from it and you conveyed that well. good job!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like a good family bonding moment and interesting story that youve remembered over the years, well done.
ReplyDeleteI used to think hiking was dumb. Until I tried it. Now I think hiking is a great family bonding experience that everyone should try. Your story was really insightful to the wonderful world of hiking. Great work!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was great when it came to using a lot of imagery in the best way possible. The reader could easliy visualize the environment. It was also great to see that a lesson came out of the experience. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI was thinking you should have tied your brothers to a tree and left them there. Thank goodness they redeemed themselves in your eyes. It;s true siblings are usually the ones that care the most when it comes down to the wire. Wonderful description of the trees and good job interspersing your irritation with your brothers.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Although I don't have brothers, I have cousins who pretty much act like my brothers, and they are always there for me when I need it. I'm glad that you got the chance to experience some sort of a bond to your brother.
ReplyDeleteIt's always good to spend time alone and think introspectively, but sometimes you need to see mother nature in all her glory to do so. I'm glad you go to, and I guess siblings aren't so bad ;)
ReplyDeleteThis seems like a good way to get together with your family and really talk to them. Nice job
ReplyDeleteIm really into hiking, its probably one of my favorite outdoor pass times, and being a Boy Scout, i get to go hiking and camping and backpacking several times and it really is fun and a great experience.. if youre well prepared haha
ReplyDeleteHiking is really fun! I'm glad it got you to appreciate your family more, but I also thought it'd help you appreciate nature. I'm glad this story had something outside of what I thought, because that would have been cliche. I like the detail, and twist, makes it unique and interesting.
ReplyDeleteI liked the shift in tone in the last two paragraphs or so, I didn't expect the story to be as sentimental as it was but the shift was a surprise and tasteful
ReplyDeleteAwesome job! I really enjoyed reading about this awesome experience, and you told it so well! Your imagery was so enticing and it really helped me paint a picture of it all. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI personally love hiking so this caught my eye and it was interesting and somewhat relatable. amazing job
ReplyDeleteThe use of imagery took me right back to my vacation Sequoia National Park! I was able to picture everything so vividly! Good job.
ReplyDeleteYour brothers reminded me of my sister. Some of the sentences needed some editing to help them flow better. But overall, This was fun and easy to read. Thanks for sharing your work!
ReplyDeleteYou used a lot of imagery when you talked about the nature around you which made it easy to visualize. It sounds like you had a nice experience, well done!
ReplyDeleteFrom reading this piece, this experience sounds unforgettable and scary because not only were you a lost child at the time, but you also kept the memory of your brother coming to save you when you were in need of someone to guide you back to where you came from despite the fact that you thought he was obnoxious and annoying. It shows that your brothers care for you more than you could ever know regardless of what you think of them. I love the ending of your piece because it shows that you realized that your brothers do love you and has taught you to love your brothers just as much they love you or even more. Good job Bryan!
ReplyDeleteI could see the nature... now I need to go look at a tree
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