Tuesday, February 21, 2017
Love at First Bite--Mereva
It is a cold February night. This wintry weather doesn’t prevent me from attending the
street festival near my neighborhood. A cool breeze pierces my face as I peacefully stroll on the
sidewalk. Walking alongside the crowd, I caught a glimpse of you amidst the bustling throng.
Your magnificence and beauty shone with the light of the vendor fixated on your entire
existence. It was as if God is beckoning me to behold upon this holy entity. The moment I laid
my eyes on you, everything around me seems nonexistent. There were others just like you, but
you are the one who caught all of my attention with your alluring elegance. You carried with you
an aura full of enticement and lust. Being a considerable distance away from you, you were
shrouded by fog and steam. To get a closer look at your exquisite existence, I began walking
towards you and pushing past the crowd, easily ignoring their presence. I had one goal in mind
and that was to get closer to you and meet you. As I soon reached the booth where you stood, I
culminated feelings of nervousness due to being so close to you; however, this radiant light that
we shared, assuaged my fears. The light brings me closer to you, spiritually and physically. This
vendor light made it seem like we are the only ones in the entire festival. Back to my senses, I
showed courtesy to the vendor and paid my respects and offering to him, even though my mind
was set on you. I sat down with you right in front of me and I began to admire your presence.
Your beauty is unmatched by others and you are special to me. Being impatient, I then picked
you up and consumed your chewy noodles. Engulfing your soup gave a burst of flavor and filled
me with warmth within this cold weather. My longing for this ramen is finally fulfilled. I came to
this street festival in hopes of finding you, and now my love is satiated.
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SPOILER ALERT!!!That was the biggest plot twist ever!!!! I was expecting you to actually find your true love but nope. I mean, I guess you found your true love, it just turned out to be noodles and not an actual person. I also the liked the diction you used to describe your true love because it shows how compassionate you are about noodles
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My passion for noodles is off the charts, nothing else can compare. I'm glad you liked and enjoyed my piece!!
DeleteHAHAHAHAHAHA I LOVED THIS. I was totally thinking that the adjectives in which you described some guy was too much or too corny and I almost clicked to the next story but I kept reading and I saw that it was about noodles and it just caught me off guard I just really love this description of food because I love food. -Rachel Smith
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you kept reading aha, I didn't know that my descriptions would make someone uncomfortable. Food is always in everyone's hearts.
DeleteRamen will have that affect on people :p. I really enjoyed the scene you created as a food lover myself. My mind and body would react the same way if I saw a dim sum cart anytime soon.
ReplyDeleteOh my Mereva. Knowing you, I'm not surprised. I totally neglected the title and at first i was shocked that you were writing about love. Then as I read on and reached the plot twist I understand the title now. Well written, good job(:
ReplyDeleteI was not expecting that plot twist!!! I loved this piece because I am a food lover myself but I did not think this was going to be about noodles lol
ReplyDelete-Jeyovana Griffith
Mereva, You totally caught me off guard. I was not expecting you to describing your feelings for noodles. I love your use of detail in your description of the ramen. It like you were describing a cute guy you had seen...but no it was a bowl of noodles!!!!
ReplyDeleteThis was absolutely hilarious! The expressive diction had me thinking at first you were talking about a person. Then I thought that you were talking about a price in the vending station. I would have never thought that you would be talking about food. But hey it's totally understandable. Food is my all, my everything, especially ramen. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI'm pretty sure anyone that has ever had a craving for a type of food can relate to this piece. Didn't expect the switch up from a person to food but I guess the title gives it away if you think about it enough.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a cute little story! The love we have for food is uncontrollable haha... after all, it is the main components to life!
ReplyDeleteMereva, I died laughing at the end! Your detailed description of the experience creates an even more shocking and hilarious ending. Great job!
ReplyDeleteFOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD!!!!! I can definitely relate to this piece because this is exactly how I feel about so many different kinds of food, because food is the best. I loved how you didn't give it away in the beginning and had a plot twist at the end for the food. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWOW!!!! I'm speechless haha this was so funny, you really had me believing that you were actually trying to find your true love, but they ended up being noodles. This was a great piece, well done.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh hahaha. This is so relatable because everyone has a food that they crave, and personally, I will go through any means to get mine. You honestly described the situation so accurately. Good job, but... now I'm hungry...
ReplyDeleteBAHAHA this had an amazing plot twist! As a noodle lover, this piece had me very intrigued at the comical way of describing them as a person you caught your attention. Great work Merev!
ReplyDeleteI thought this was going to be some type of vampire love story haha i was pleasantry surprised with the plot twist! I was intrigued the whole time. Good job!!
ReplyDeleteI didn't even realize that my title would indicate vampires! I was making a pun on "love at first sight" so when I changed sight to bite I thought that my title would give my ending away, but I guess people were still surprised aha.
DeleteI was definitely not expecting that. But that twist just makes this story even better in my eyes. Whoever says money can't buy happiness clearly doesn't know that you can buy ramen. :p It was so descriptive and I love how it completely seemed like it was going to be a person until the very end. Good job!!
ReplyDeletehahaha that was a twist I was not expecting. I really liked the words you used to describe your love of ramen, I can tell you really appreciate food.
ReplyDeleteWhen I started reading I was a bit confused because of the title and almost expected something to do with vampires. You did a great job with personification of noodles.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh this is like my life! You did a great shop with the description and a good lead up to describe some bomb food!
ReplyDeleteSAAAAME!!!! I have never been in a relationship before, but I imagine that it would not compare to how I look at food. That level of admiration that I hold for food is in a whole new level, and I honestly believe that I can't love anything as much as I love food. -Martina Panganiban
ReplyDeleteThis was a total plot twist haha. I loved your use of diction and imagery to make it feel like you were actually admiring a person in the crowd, but its nice to know you feel this way about ramen because I do as well. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis was so cute I was not expecting the plot twist at all! I love how you drew a parallel between a possible lover and noodles, very funny!
ReplyDeleteI decided to comment on this because I love food and well, every time there is a good looking meal near me, I'm pretty sure this happens to me and I go blind to everything but the amazing mouth watering dish before me. Very relatable.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh… This story you made up is so you! I’m not surprised by this at all, food is obviously better than any person. Because of this, now I have the urge to eat Ramen… anyway good job on making this piece!
ReplyDeleteAt first I assumed that your piece was going to be about vampires ha!! Your descriptions were great! I was really excited to get to the end and find out what really was catching the speakers attention.
ReplyDelete-Alison Bohorquez
I totally thought you were talking about a person! But who doesn't love ramen? This was very well written and now I am craving noodles haha. Amazing work!
ReplyDelete-Farheen Ansari
This is great! I loved how you used sophisticated diction to really emphasize how much you love noodles haha. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHow funny! Definitely a plot twist! I was expecting it to be about a person! This is too funny, I loved your imagery and description of the senses all leading up to noodles!
ReplyDeleteI like how you made it seem like you we're talking about a person with your use of diction and imagery. I also love your use descriptive words , it made me feel like I could see what you were.
ReplyDelete-sereenah soare
Oh my gosh!! I thought this was going to be some really cute love story about how you met someone, but no it wasn't. LOL. But in a way i guess you could say that it was about something that you love because lets be honest we all love food. Great job on this piece.
ReplyDeleteHahahahahahahaha that escalated quickly! I love how you described this bowl of ramen, having us all think it was a person that you were describing. I was intrigued by your title and I could not help but laugh when I read that this was about ramen! Overall, this is a great piece! Amazing job!
ReplyDelete-Gabbie B.
This was sooo fun to read! I love all the imagery you incorporated and how you could truly be talking about a person you possibly had a crush on or liked. But among this excessive description, I find it necessary because food is great and deserves all the praise in the world. Good Job!
ReplyDeletelol! Your vocabulary made this piece so exquisite! I love the plot twist at the end how creative!! Really made me hungry. -Vanessa Lai
ReplyDeleteImmediately when I read the title, I KNEW THERE WAS GOING TO BE A TWIST! I love how you described the scene as the story progresses and it depicts accurately of how I would think about food. Great Job Mereva!
ReplyDeleteThis story is so you Mereva! I love how it describes your passion for food with such eloquent language. i honestly thought this was going to be about vampires but as soon as you brought up vendors, i immediately thought this is about food. You did a great job Mereva!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you used imagery and detail to show the scene of you meeting "someone " which turned into being something instead . I liked how you made the audience believe it was about an alluring person but it ended up being food hahaha. I loved this as much as I love food , good job!
ReplyDeleteHAHAHAHA THIS WAS AMAZING!! Your use of active voice, really great vocabulary, and the title made me expect this dramatic love story about vampires or something, but your ending was much, much better. So funny Mereva!
ReplyDelete-Vanessa Colt
I laughed way to hard reading this! it was so funny, I expected you to be talking about meeting someone but instead it was food. I mean I obviously can relate because I love food, who doesn't love it though. Overall I think this was an awesome piece, great job!! -Sophia Cordura
ReplyDeleteI really love the fact that this was such a plot twist, the way you used so many detailed words to make me think you were describing a love for someone let alone food! i loved it great job! -Lyndsey Ortega
ReplyDeleteFor a second I thought this was a vampire love story, the way you framed the narrative. Very nice use of language. It's is refreshing to see such a comedic take on a flash fiction. Great job.
ReplyDeleteWow this was great! I loved the passion and seriousness in this piece.
ReplyDelete-Andy Burgos
Man, this one got me. I failed to pay attention to the title, and thought you were talking about a person the entire time! Loved the plot twist! Who needs love when you have soup right? Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow..Lol I really thought you were talking about a girl or somebody fine as wine but all along it was food. I feel you though..I like my noodles too, the chicken or beef flavor specifically.
ReplyDeleteThis is incredibly funny, as soon as I read that pun of a title I knew this story was going to be full of wit and humor! I honestly thought it was going to involve something with zombies or vampires, something along those lines, and I'm very happy that it took a different route to talk about food instead! Really awesome job!
ReplyDeleteThis was amazing! It was the best plot twist I have ever read. I really enjoyed it and ramen has that effect on me sometimes too but I mostly have that effect when it comes to pizza.
ReplyDelete-Victoria Heredia
I did not expect that to happen. The humor behind this is excellent. I did not expect that twist. The imageries you used was a good touch for this. Nice job
ReplyDelete- Benjamin Chong
OMG this is sooo hilarious! Your vocabulary is so advanced and you created the clearest images in my head. I was not expecting you to talk about food. I think that is so creative and you did really well with this piece!
ReplyDeletei can relate to this so much oh my goodness. I loved this! I was intrigued and got caught up in the moment. Then you go with that twist and curve us so much. This was great and was a really fun read!
ReplyDeleteI hate you. You really played me. Your use of imagery was good enough to trick me into thinking a bowl of noodles was a person. At first I thought it was about vampires because of the title, but it was just ramen. Anyway good job! -Ethan To
ReplyDeleteThe imagery was so amazing at first I thought it was a glimpse of a guy until you plot twisted it into noodles which I love as well!
ReplyDeleteI had this romantic image in my head of two people in love...then I got to "consumed your chewy noodles" and was a little scared. It was a very surprising twist and very great imagery displayed. I loved it so much and the descriptions in this story made me really want noodles. Great story! :)
ReplyDeleteBRO you played us so hard ahaha I love this! Hilarious and detailed :) -Mackenzie G
ReplyDeleteExpecting a twist once I read the title, not disappointed. Had me smiling all the way through with great descriptions for a great dish, good job.
ReplyDeleteOne of my favorite pieces by far!!!!!! I love the way you described everything I felt like I was falling in love with the ramen at first sight myself. Being a huge foodie I could definitely relate to this piece.
ReplyDeleteI have never related to a blog post more! I loved the surprising plot twist as well as how well written this is. The vivid imagery is what really made this piece enjoyable great work!
ReplyDeleteI can definitely relate to this piece in that i have the same feeling for food! I loved the imagery you used to set the setting and it really helped me envision exactly what you saw. great job!
ReplyDelete-Austin Gomez
Your title is what really motivated me to read your piece. Anything about food is bound to be good and I was not disappointed. I really enjoyed reading the very vivid descriptions of this beautiful soup whom I also share this love for too.
ReplyDeleteWHAT?!??? I did not expect that to happen, wow, you rally had me fooled. At first I clicked on your piece because I was expecting you to write about a dessert but when I started reading I then thought you met someone the night you were describing. Your piece was incredibly well written and your diction was spectacular. I really understood your love for noodles after reading this. You really had the reader wanting to run and get some ramen, amazing job!
ReplyDelete-Bryanna Torres
I was drawn into your piece by the title, and I can definitely say I was not expecting that plot twist lol. It's very well written. Great job!!
ReplyDelete-Jade B.
I didn't expect anything except how much i knew i'd enjoy this piece just by the title and seeing that you were writing. Always never fail to disappoint.
ReplyDelete- Francis Talla
Beautiful! I love the way you used many literary devices to effectively describe your love for ramen. Although it's quite humorous, I truly understand your for noodles because I too share the same amount of love for food in general.
ReplyDeleteThis was hilarious! The switch from a supposed interest to just a bowl of noodles was done beautifully. Overall, very well written! Good job!
ReplyDeleteWoww I thought this was about to be a vampire story but of course its food. It was so funny because thats a lot of love for ramen. Great piece!
ReplyDeleteI love the twist at the end. For ramen to replace a lover is perfectly reasonable to many of us, as we love it so much. Thanks for adding a comical ending to this well written piece!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was so funny and cute I loved the twist at the end! Really enjoyed the piece, nice use of imagery and diction, also very well written!
ReplyDeleteThis is really hilarious! After reading the title--which was really clever by the way--I read the story with a smile on the entire time knowing that some sort of food was being addressed. The language you used, for example, "enticement" and lust" to describe the noodle bowl's aura, and the imagery that your words evoked, like the steaminess around the bowl, were really fantastic and made the piece that much funnier! Thanks for making me smile!
ReplyDelete-Christopher Kerwin
YES MEREVA YESSSSS I loved it. Knowing you, of course it would be ramen. But everything was so detailed to the point where you re consider is it really a "lover" or not. Loved it
ReplyDelete-Vivian Chiang
WELL NOW IM HUNGRY. Me and my girlfriend in fact love Japanese cuisine and we often bond through eating, so to me this was quite sentimental. But your great use of visual imagery and diction was very interesting and overall helped magnify piece.
ReplyDeletei could easily relate to this because i LOVE food ahah. Such a really surprising twist at the end and really cool title!
ReplyDeleteYou really had me fooled. I really thought you were going to talk about a person but it ended up food. Funny piece! - karina l.
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