The structure looked intriguing. Almost inviting. Perhaps it would hold some exquisite or exotic flowers I’d never seen before. So I flew in. The others had warned me before that places of humans did not like our kind. That they would try to kill us because they didn’t have the capacity to understand what we do.
“Pah!” I had scoffed in their faces. “That can’t be true. We are the reason their kind isn’t extinct already!”
So I flew in, my mighty wins carrying me on the soft breeze that wafted into the structure through a small opening. My wildest dreams could not have envisioned something so extravagant. It was not like any hive I’d ever seen before. The walls were the color of roses and things that hung on the walls for display. There was a bed with the covers thrown about and a separate room filled with clothes (so many clothes).
I scanned the room. Items of various colors, shapes, and sizes were strewn about the floor haphazardly. Why did the humans need all of these things? How can a group of humans even accumulate that many things in one lifetime? In the far corner sat a large desk and chair. Slumped over in the chair was a girl. Her back shook with each breath she took and a feeble whimper escaped her with each sign. Crying. Isn’t that what they called it? When human’s eyes leak water?
As I studied her, my eyes drifted past her I saw the motherload, flowers. A whole vase was full of more colorful flowers than I’d ever seen before. The others had always warned me never to get too close to humans, so I flew in as quietly as possible, landing on the table before the girl. Whines of pain slipped out of her, though there didn’t seem to be any physical harm done to her as far as I could see.
I flew up to the tall flowers and landed on a bright blue flower. Interesting, I thought, I’ve never seen a blue flower before. But the more I examined the petal I was standing on, I noticed stitches in the blue and a plastic middle holding it all together. Wait... These were fake flowers! I glided to a second flower, this one was a bright pink daisy. Woven petals, plastic center.
Who would do that? Fake flowers are the reason my kind was dying out. Okay, maybe that’s not entirely true but humans are destroying my kind. And plastic flowers?! That was just cruel.
Another sob escaped the girl that startled me so much that when I jumped, I fell off the flower. What was this girl’s problem? Why was she just sitting here? Didn’t she have work to do for her queen? Maybe humans don’t work the same as bees.
What a pathetic existence, just sitting here in a puddle of tears consumed with your problems. H umans are always swatting us away, screaming at the sight of us. Do they realize we are the only reason their kind is alive? They kill us for frightening them and say our existence is pointless and insignificant. And yet they mope around all day with their problems and cry constantly. And they call us insignificant? What a pitiful existence humans have. Not like me. I have a purpose. I have a reason, a job. I was created to supply my hive with pollen. I was created so that our queen would be protected from predators like humans. Bees have a divine purpose in
life. We bring life to humans by foraging for our own food, we protect our royalty, and we have children that repeat. There is no room for tears and whining. There is always a job to be done.
But what are humans good for? They leak water from their eyes, it seems like poor craftsmanship. What are their pathetic feelings for anyway? They could be building or gardening or foraging for food but instead, this girl is sitting here crying. And for what?
Suddenly she jerks her head up in a quick motion, eyes darting all around her room. I froze, hoping she wouldn’t notice. I scold myself for not listening to the others. This is how some go out and never come back. Her red puffy eyes land on me. The look of hopelessness in her eyes quickly fades to disgust.
“EW!” she shouts, hand flying faster than I had anticipated. I sprang up, flying around her and dodging her blows. “Get away from me!”
One of her swats catches my wings and a start to fall, her other hand catches up and pushes me against the desk. Out of instinct, I bare my stinger.
“Ow!” she howls and immediately releases me. Eyes wide with surprise as she glances down at her hand and sees a tiny stinger embedded in her flesh. I lay on the desk immobile in stinging pain. I should’ve listened to the others. I glance at the girl and noticed that the leaking water stopped. She just stared at the palm of her hand, mesmerized. I began to lose feeling in my body and saw spots form in my vision. It was a foolish way to go, but the human had stopped crying. It seems she too had realized the insignificance of her problems. As he drifted into darkness, he felt content with the effect he’s had in her life.
I loveddd your piece!! I loved how much detail you put into it, and how whimsical it felt overall. I especially liked seeing the human existence from the bee's perspective because we tend to take insects, plants, etc for granted when they spend their whole lives creating things that allow us to live.
ReplyDelete-Diana Quintanilla
I really enjoyed your story Devyn! It's both entertaining and well written. I like that you didn't reveal whose perspective the story was from until the middle, and instead you gave hints like calling the house a "hive" and the character's obsession with the flowers. The different perspective on humans is interesting to think about and I enjoyed the irony of humans and bees both seeing each other as insignificant. Great job! -Maia vonHempel
ReplyDeleteWow! I really enjoyed your piece. I liked how us readers did not know who was speaking and how you gave small "hints" at the beginning. I also like the message of the story and how you taught us the importance of bees. Keep it up!
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I absolutely loved your piece! It was very different from the other pieces published and I think that is why I enjoyed even more. The tone you use greatly goes with your piece and helped bring out the use of diction you also used. The diction used helped illuminate the imagery in your piece that was greatly incorporated.- Valerie Rivera
ReplyDeleteThe amount of detail you were able to fit in is a talent. Your word choice is strong and precise to give as much imagery to a scene. The feelings you conveyed in this piece were very heartfelt and shows your experience in writing and life. - Luke Phillips
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story as it was entertaining an filled with so much detail. I really enjoyed that you wrote from the perspective of a bee and definitely stands out from the other great pieces published. Great job!- mireya c.
ReplyDeleteyour writing is amazing! the perspective definitely took me by surprise. It was super enjoyable to read, great job! :)
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story, I like how the story is from a bees point of view. This piece really shows that bees are very important to the world.
ReplyDeleteDevyn!! This piece was amazing!! I love how you subtly hinted that the story was being told by a bee, and how clueless the bee was, like how crying was referred to as leaking water and how disgusted he was about the fake flowers. I like how you conveyed a serious message about humans being "pathetic" and unappreciative of nature, but you did it lightheartedly and with a sense of humor, which made it enjoyable to read. - Kendra Rolff
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