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Monday, November 30, 2020

No Man’s Land--Amy

 My dearest Emily,

Just the other day we were given the order to move forward into No Man’s Land. The mission was dangerous, we all knew that, but who are we to disobey orders. The last thing I wanted was to go, you have to understand that. And the only thing I thought about as we prepared was you. I did not expect to be writing you this letter. In fact, I did not expect to be alive at all by the day’s end. However, I readied myself, said my goodbyes to my fellow soldiers, my friends, my brothers, and then it was time to fight.

Immediately, we were hit with a torrent of bullets and bombs. Men fell all around me, but I just kept running. I had to keep running. I felt the wind of the bullets as they passed my face at hundreds of miles per hour. And yet, I still kept running. I saw men, my men being blown into the air left and right, but I still kept running. In fact, I didn't stop running until I found cover. You could hardly call it cover, but in this barren wasteland it was my best friend. This “friend” was simply a measly piece of rock protruding from the ground. Had I been given the chance I would have tried to find something better, if there happened to be anything at all, but I couldn’t take that chance. It was too risky. So, against my better judgement, I set up my gun and began shooting.

There was so much smoke and debris I could not even see what I was firing at. I was shooting blindly. I may have not hit anything at all, but I knew there were men inside that smoke. Most of them just like me, put out into a war they didn't sign up for. They're all innocent men, some of them barely even men at all, but in this war, they are the enemy, as much as I dislike it. I wasn’t there for more than 10 second before I was blown back, the air knocked out of me, and my cover, gone. For a moment I thought maybe that was the end, I might even say I had accepted my inevitable end, but when my eyes opened and the screams of men replaced the ringing in my ears I knew I had lived. Even with my sputtering breaths, I was able to stand and run. I ran toward the trenches with all the strength in my body, although it ached profusely, but I didn’t stop long enough to be certain those aches weren’t something worse. Men continued to fall all around me, but most followed my lead and began running back. Wounded soldiers called out as I passed, their words incoherent and drowned out by blasts that rocked the earth around me and made my ears ring louder and louder with every passing second. Some of their faces I recognized, but most were covered in blood, burns, or dirt. Maybe they were my friends, but friends don’t last long in places like this.

As the trenches came into view I saw them begin to fill with the remaining men. I got to the ledge of the trench, and much to my horror, I noticed how small the group of men was. There were ten of us, maybe twelve but I couldn’t find the time to count. As I looked out upon the horrifying scene I had just been a part of, all I could see was hundreds of bodies littered amongst the craters and wire. Some may have still been alive, but there was no helping any of them, for that would mean certain death for myself. This may have sounded like a loss to you, but to us and more importantly to the government we were fighting for, we had gained some ground. Even if it was just a few feet, that was a win in our book. I suppose it wasn't a win for all of us, maybe it wasn't even a win at all. But that is just war. And war is never fair.


Sincerely, 

George

11 comments:

  1. Wow! This piece was filled with so much details. While I was reading it, I was engrossed in the story and it felt like I was George. It was cool how you made the story into the form of a letter as well. 10/10.
    - Naomi Espiritu Santo

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  2. Your piece was very descriptive and detailed. I felt as if I was in the story with the way you wrote it. I like how you described the scenes that took place around you and what you thought of it, e.g- not being able to have friends in war. Great job.
    -Darren Domond

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  3. Firstly I like the set up of the story being in a letter format, which to me enhanced the story. I like how you depicted so many areas of struggle which made it more interesting. Lastly the attention to detail was amazing.
    - Jaylin Tillman

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  4. I was so invested in this piece wow. I love how creative this was, you really sat down and decided to write a piece about the difficulties soldiers face in the field, I loved the message presented in this piece about how George was killing innocent men on that field but in times of war they are considered enemies, such a powerful line. Very powerful use of imagery and repetition. Great work! -Shannon Thompson

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  5. This was absolutely amazing! The imagery was so real I could see it actually happening. I also loved the format you put your story into, I thought the letter was very unique and creative. Fantastic job!!:)

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  6. I loved that you decided to write this in a letter format. The descriptions were so detailed and drew me into the story more. I was at the edge of my seat when I read this and now I need to know if he survives and makes it home to Emily. I loved your piece, Great Job!!! - Ashita Biju

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  7. I really enjoyed the amount of detail you added to the story and feel it kept the piece easier to read. Along with making it easier to read the description of setting and emotion allowed for the reader to be immersed in the story. -Alec Bobadilla

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  8. Hello, I loved the plot of your story and it's historical aspects. Your writing was detailed and had me engrossed in the story, I wonder what happened next. You also did a great job at writing George's perspective! - Diane Rodriguez

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  9. I really enjoyed your piece. It was very creative. It was not your average story, which really appealed to me. -Kristel Caspe

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  10. I liked how in the first sentence I was able to grasp the context and time period of your writing. The imagery of the smoke, friends, and dangers made me feel that the first person point of view was at risk but had to write to Emily. The letter made me foresee the tone of friendship bonds breaking and how George continued to push through the uneasy war. This was my favorite piece because it was a descriptive letter that clarifies how the war still made George seem like a caring and worthy person. Great piece, Amy! -Laylah Perez

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  11. This piece was amazing with the format and imagery you incorporated in order to depict the scene George is displaying to Emily. It was very thought out and a pleasure to read. -Marissa Rivera

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