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Monday, May 2, 2016

The Struggle-Alan

It was the cold and depressing month of December. Nothing but clouds and cold gusts of
wind for weeks without any hope of a sliver of sunshine. Cuffing season was in full effect. The
cold weather and the desire for cuddles and warmth had increased tenfold, leaving lonely, single
people longing for love and affection. A great number of people had participated in this season
of cuffing and Allen was no exception. Allen, however, had to overcome a vast quantity of
obstacles and trials in order to get at the one girl he really wanted for cuffing season, and her
name was Belle. Belle wasn’t like any girl poor little Allen had tried to get at before, however,
because she was by far the hardest and most confusing girl the universe could have possibly
thrown at him and he knew that getting curved by this girl would surely result in a burial of his
body six feet under the earth. But he went for her anyway. Allen knew it would be hard to get her
to be his. Allen was ugly and he thought it would be impossible to get a girl like her to notice a
boy like him. Although seeming impossible, Allen was extremely persistent. Everyday he would
text her, engaging in multiple, random, and most times stupid conversations ranging from the
evolution of clowns to the inevitable death of the universe, all in a 20 minute time frame. Each
time he would text her, spend time with her, and even just think about her, he would fall ever
more rapidly off the cliff of love and by the time Christmas came around, there was no turning
back. Allen was gone. He would wait an hour after he could leave school just to get a glimpse of
Belle and he would buy her anything he could spend his money on, whether that be food after
school because she was hungry or a stuffed animal just because he had $20 and happened to see
one at that exact price. Before long, he spent most all of his time and money on her and her only.
He thought he had reeled her in, but she was confusing after all. Belle wasn’t sure how she felt
about Allen and whether or not she was going to give Allen a shot at a relationship because she
was scared of being hurt and when she told Allen that she was confused about her feelings for
him, he was discouraged from continuing. He thought that he should give up because it would be
easier on both him and Belle. But he had come so far and he wasn’t going to let her slip away
after all the effort he put in. As the days became weeks and the weeks became a month, Allen
was persistent in getting at Belle not because he was lonely and wanted cuddles and warmth
anymore, but because he wanted her for her and couldn’t fathom his life without her by his side.
He spent more money on her. He spent practically every second of Christmas break with her. Her
birthday had come around and Allen felt like this would be the right time to confess his feelings
to her so he took her on a date to see Christmas lights. They spent the whole night together,
acting as if they were already a couple, though they were not and at this point, they both
confirmed their feelings for each other. Belle knew she had feelings for Allen but never really
knew when, where, or how to tell him, for he had been waiting for her for over a month. After
two weeks of holding it in, she came clean to Allen and confessed her feelings for him. He was
unbelievably happy that he did the impossible. He was finally cuffed. She made him happy and
he made her happy. In the end, he knew that his efforts were worth it. He knew it was worth the
struggle.

49 comments:

  1. Proud of you my friend, and I liked how you refer to yourself in the 3rd person. I been in this situation lots of times but I end up getting curved :( well nice story good job.

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  2. A nice well rounded story and I'm glad it all worked out in the end. There was a some slang in this story that someone who lives under a rock might not be able to understand, but luckily for me, urban dictionary is pretty reliable haha. The confessions going around were pretty sweet and the struggle is always worth it. Good work on your writing.

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  3. Perfect and well-detailed story Allen! I knew exactly how you felt when I was reading your piece because I have been in this situation before too. You were successful! Sometimes we fail at it (me lol).
    ~ Gregory Gomez

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  4. Wow this was very interesting to read but I really enjoyed it. Great job!

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  5. It is so funny how you referred to yourself in third person. My relationship with my girlfriend was very similar to this. I am usually not the one to enjoy love stories but this one was enjoyable. Nice job.

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  6. Very well written. Glad it worked out. -Joshua Kidwell

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  7. Just like Malik said, I like that you spoke from a third person point of view, it gave a different perspective. I also like how your story is one most high-schoolers can relate to and the term "cuffing season".

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  8. You go Allen! This was probably one of the most inspiring stories I've ever read! I thoroughly enjoyed your piece from start to finish, not only because it was funny, but also because the detail and overall flow made your character more relateable and real. And plus, happy endings always make for a good read! Job well done!
    -Pavia Omolewa

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  9. I enjoyed it a lot Good Job it was interesting thats why i liked it.
    Ashley Lowman

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  10. :) hoooooow cute. I really liked a lot of your wording because it made the piece playful instead of super serious & I think that fits your writting style & personality ALAN.
    Great Job :)

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  11. This was an interesting and well rounded story. Good Job.

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  12. The detail throughout the piece created the imagery of cold Christmas days, and how that influenced his desire towards her even though he realized at the end that he not only wanted her for the companionship of cold days.

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  13. I enjoyed the fact that you made it so modern with the "cuffing season" and the language. The use of third person is interesting and cool!

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  14. Aww this is really cute lol I'm glad you got what you wanted you deserve it a lot of guys now a days don't really do things like that a lot of the time people are scared of rejection or its just not "cool"

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  15. I personally love this because I've always had a thing for love stores and to me this is kind of one .. I love the fact that you made an effort and put yourself out there and you didn't give up in the end you got your girl -Naeomi R

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  16. A compelling story of a victory, despite the odds, great job!
    -Maddie Alegria

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  17. The character was very relatable and it felt real while I was reading it, I think many high schoolers go through the same thing and it was great that you went out there and ended up getting the girl, great job!
    -Meghan Ustrell

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  18. The part when you said "Allen was ugly [...}" made me laugh very, very hard. This is the greatest romantic comedy ever written, 50% 50 Shades of Gray and 50% The Notebook. You are a real life Ryan Gosling. Bless you and bless your vivid imagery of the bleak winters which propelled you unto your quest for love.
    -Christopher Trevino

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  19. First cuffing season, I'm so dead lmao!!! Second AWWWWWW, that is so cute, I'm glad you continued to pursue her and in effect have your happy ending!!!

    -Oyinda Akinnusi

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  20. Congrats Allen, oh wait Alan* I'm glad you got what you wanted, I'm sure you and Belle will have many fun adventures together. -Damian Echavarria

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  21. I loved this piece it was very cute! Good job!

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  22. Your sentence variety and choice of words literally made me laugh out loud. Clear story telling (I know for a fact due to an experience). I enjoyed your not-subtle-whatsoever ode to love. ;^)

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  23. It is a beautiful love story I am proud of your work alan great job!

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  24. aw :') I really liked how there was a sense of hope throughout and that at the end, you were successful. I really liked the style in which you wrote this and how it was third person. Good job :)

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  25. I really liked this story because of the concept of the story. It had a satisfying ending, so great job!

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  26. This was a cute story, I liked the ending, I always enjoy happy endings when people end up together so that was nice to read.
    -Celeste Martinez

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  27. I thought this was really cute lol, "cuffing season" made me laugh just because it is a real time of the year to us high school kids. Really liked how you developed the story, good job. -Allyssa F

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  28. Love stories are the best.Such a great piece and so inspiring.

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  29. I love the use of third person and it was such a cute story

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  30. Great job my man. Way to make use of the displacement within the story. This really set the tone for the entertainment and storytelling facet within the piece. Your struggle should be on to be proud of, especially because you narrated it so well while hiding the true emotions you had behind the whole process. Great work.

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  31. Aww this so cute, I love this story it wasn't so cheesy at all. At first I just assmused it was going something different but it funny and sweet . Good Job !

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  32. Your usage of slang definitely made this a fun piece to read. I agree with Allen in the sense that consistency and passion are key if you really want to make something happen in your life. Great work.

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  33. Persistence is key, my friend. Look where it got you!
    I definitely loved how you used today's lingo in a sophisticated fashion, for it added a bit of comedy. The timeline affect of your story was really enjoyable to follow. Great job!
    - Sam Nugroho

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  34. Whoa, your name is Alan...this character's name is Allen...trippy coincidence! Realyl digged the writing style of this fiction piece, and the flow of it went really well. I find cuffing season to be a terrifying time, so I'm glad you, er, Allen, were successful.

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  35. Great detail all around, and I loved how you wrapped everything up. Good Job.
    -Nahome Woldearegay

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  36. I hope watching some of my cuffing season videos helped. Haha but anyway nice piece in that it was very entertaining and the point of view gave your story a whole new light. Great job.

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  37. Its a love story, plain and simple. It portrays what everyone that's single wants, to be happy with someone you love and that loves you back. Great idea with the title and with the idea of having the girl confess. -Brian Rojas

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  38. "He was finally cuffed" V funny thanks for the submission

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  39. Really inspiring story and very enjoyable piece

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  40. This is a really cute story. I loved how much detail there was and such great use of imagery!

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  41. This was a really cute story and was very well written. I like the third person perspective and I love the happy ending where you end up getting the girl. Nice job.
    -Kathlyn Juarez

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  42. Cutest little love story!I loved the way he described his persistence even when she seemed unreachable, something guys should definitely think about doing more often. Very inspiring, loved the happy ending. Nice Job! -Aileen Munoz

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  43. i like this because its relatable to everyone on this blog because its a highschool setting.
    -shaniya t.

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  44. Great Narrative, point of view was unique and there are a range of emotions within this piece. Great Work Alan!

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  45. I liked how you wrote this in 3rd person. It was a cute love story! You kept trying and you were persistent and in the end it payed off. Great Job!!
    -karyna g

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  46. Very cute! I wish all relationships could end this way.

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  47. i like how you put your self in third person and still managed to talk about your self, i love it great job. - Janier Ajila

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  48. Nice piece dude. I love the imagery you used here. ^-^

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