Freedom is
something some people take for granted.
It is when you can do or think however you want within reason. Many
people saved hundreds from concentration camps and death. Many people in other countries do not have
the freedom like American people do. Many nationalities make up American, many
have pride to be Americans and many take it for granite. Many people come to
America so that they have more freedom in this country then they did in their
home lands. Are own American
constitution talks about the preamble, are the principles of the United States
and Article 1 of the constitution, the setup of the government. The constitution represents the foundation of
America which started with individuals wanting freedom from religious
persecution. Like the Jews, Germans wanted to rule over them. The constitution also goes over how you can
become a citizen, not all Americans were native to the United States. Freedom
is not just about slaves becoming free or people escaping dictatorship, it is
about having the right to vote the way you feel and to make laws that all can
live by. In America you have the right to stand for what you believe in and not
get killed as long as it does not harm others. In our country we have the most
freedom as citizens. In other countries you could get killed for burning your
country flag. Which if you burn a flag you don’t have much pride for that
county. Many people sacrificed their lives to save the Jews from the Germans.
Many Americans thought it was their responsibility. Freedom is not free; it
cost the most, lives. We take for granite in this country, we can stay our
late, we can hang out with any race of people we desire to. We can be
ourselves. There are laws but they are to protect ourselves, because without
laws there are those people who would do wrong. Laws are for peace. Everyone
needs freedom in their lives, millions of Jews died due to the race and
religion, people die today due to their race and religion. Freedom is what
makes up American and makes us human. This applies to me because some of my
family were immigrants from Germany and tried escaping because of the dangers
of being there.
I understood the point you were trying to get across to the reader but some of it was hard to follow. Although, great points stated. -Joshua Kidwell
ReplyDeleteGreat concept to write about. It was interesting, but a little hard to follow along with some of the examples. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDelete-Jerelle Medina period 4
Great topic and you included a good balance of concrete and abstract ideals! Make sure to double check your grammar and word choice, and also play around with syntax a little bit. Nice job, homie!
ReplyDeleteI like the way you took the piece. I think its important to always remember the value of our freedom in this country and never take it for granted. I would've liked to hear a bit more of your family's story also.
ReplyDeletei liked what you talked about and the examples you gave, there were a couple of grammar mistakes but otherwise I liked where you were going
ReplyDeleteThis piece is perfect for the time right now due to the politics. The examples were well thought out. Maybe put the last sentence in another spot so it can flow more. Other then that, it was a well written piece.
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