I woke up in a
room I have never seen before. There was a slight ache in my head and pain in
my chest. I looked around the room, but it was to dark to mark out. The only
light in the room was the one right above me flickering, the light only stayed
on a moment at a time. I noticed the worn down checkered plated floor. On the
floor I assumed was broken glass, ... but the glass gave of a crimson red shine
every time they was roll around. My head aches grew more intense every time I
breathed. Their was a foul pungent sent in the air, in the distance their was a
glimmer of light. As I got from the bed I woke in, I did no realize that the
sheets were a dark burgundy ... looked like they were soaked... I tried not to
think about it for I felt like I was going to puke. When I turned away from the
wretched bed and took s step forward, I stepped on the crimson glass. The pain
stung, I tried to let out a scream, nothing come out. I tried to ignore the
pain and took another step forward. The glass clung to me and every step it cut
deeper. I continued to press on but pain was unbearable, but the light went
out. I heard soft whispering voices, to afraid to turn around I walked towards
the faint shimmer of light. The closer I had gotten the louder the voices
picked up and light would begin to fade. As I approached the light, I feared my
sanity for I felt like it would crack very soon. I was only a few feet away
from the light when I felt something grab my ankle. I turned around almost
instantaneously to find a hand dark as night grabbing me. I tried to shake it
off but I stumbled backwards and hit a wall I assumed. I got up, the hand was
gone but had left behind a dark black splotch on my ankle. I looked in front of
me to find a mirror. I thought to my self wondering if this mirror had given
off that faint light, but it could not for it had no light to shine off it. I
looked in the mirror and nearly collapsed from what I saw. In the mirror I saw
a boy with pitch black hair and its eyes both hollow. I looked at my body, half
was not visible for the black splotch spread it did not stop. Petrified at what
I was has became, I felt nauseous just from the sight of me. I looked at my
reflection again, it grinned, then a had reached out and pulled me into the
mirror. I past out when that happened, and when I woke up I could not do
anything but laugh like a mad man for I had awoken right at the start of all
this madness where i am right now, back in the burgundy bed.
The entire story is ominous - it works well that the reader understands what is going on no more than the character.
ReplyDeleteIf you were going for mystery and suspense you totally nailed it, the ending was good.
ReplyDeleteinteresting, the details used to describe the dark scene is used well especially because you used so many different words to tell your story. I like how this could just loop back to the beginning and be a continuous cycle of grief
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