Are school uniforms really necessary?
School uniforms are an extremely debatable
topic. Some students love it, while others despise it. Statistics show that 400
voters in the American Southwest voted no for school uniforms and only 64 voted
yes. When I was put into a charter school all through middle school, I always
thought school uniforms should only be enforced for high school students, and
not in middle school. High school is usually the place kids get bullied the
most whether it is for their clothes not being too expensive or not wearing
designer clothes. Wearing uniforms would prevent gangs or cliques from forming.
It would also limit the school rules on dress code. Parents wouldn’t need to
keep up with the prices that come with the trends. Modesty and respect will
become important in the eyes of teenagers a lot more because they won’t be so
worried about what to wear the next day. Now that I’m a freshman in high school
I still agree with my statement about school uniforms but at the same time I
disagree. When I was in the charter school I had to wear a uniform and I
personally did not like it. It was plain and just not me. Although I was forced
to wear it I feel like it made everyone’s lives so much easier.
Some of the pros of school uniforms are less
students will be bullied for the clothes they wear. Another pro is some people
aren’t as fortunate as others to constantly buy clothes. Students are harassed
for the clothes they wear or the designer shoes they have on verbally,
physically, and socially but when wearing a uniform all of that would stop.
Every child would feel equal. School uniforms also show your school spirit. A
lot of students who wear uniforms say that they feel more proud of their
school. Wearing school colors or even the logo gives students a feeling of
being more connected to their school and classmates.
Following the pros are some cons
about school uniforms. Designer clothes are generally expensive, but so are uniforms.
Some students stated that they are scratchy and either too cold or too hot. As
students grow they have to replace the uniforms. Some people think if their child wears the
same thing as everyone else their individuality will be suppressed. In some schools
that’s not the case. Accessories like hair clips, bracelets, and necklaces can
make the uniforms look better. Some schools don’t allow it. Some parents also
say that by wearing school uniforms their child can’t express themselves
through clothing. I disagree. Students have after school, weekends, and
holidays to express themselves.
Teachers think if there students
wear uniforms it would focus on learning with the removal of unnecessary
distractions. They also think that students won’t be bullied as much; students
will find any reason to make fun of the person they don’t seem to like. The
researcher, Virginia Draa of Youngstown State University, reported that the
graduation rates have gone up 11 % in schools that require a uniform.
Non-uniform school’s graduations rates have gone down 4.6%.There are some pros
and some cons to wearing school uniforms. In other words students are far more
likely to succeed when wearing a uniform. Wearing a uniform for 3 years definitely
opened my eyes to the bigger things in life and not just the clothes you wear.
I had to wear a school uniform when I was in elementary school and sometimes it was nice because I wouldn't have to pick out what to wear, but wearing what I choose to is a lot more fun.
ReplyDeleteThis would be a good response if you had to write a paper on this topic. I totally see where you are coming from about uniforms being less of a distraction and allowing people to think about things other than clothes. I can sense that you lowkey want uniforms right now. Lol I feel you!! I have always wanted to wear one for a while, it would be cool. For a lot of people the best way they can express themselves is through what they wear and this is partially what makes it a controversial topic, but you did a great job! :)
ReplyDeleteIt is very good because they are going both ways. It states that people like like having school uniforms and some people. That story was a good topic because of the sides.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you explained what it's like wearing a school uniform and how certain people would react.Very well explained and informative.
ReplyDeleteThis well represents both sides of the argument.
ReplyDeleteI like you topic school should be informed to wear for no bulling could happen good story :)
ReplyDeleteGood job! It was great that you were able to back up your opinion with some statistics. Also great that you were able to discuss the counter argument and rebuttal it. That's what makes a good debator.
ReplyDeleteI can see both sides of the argument as beneficial because it is true about most kids wanting to impress others by showing off what they have. I like how you provide arguments for both sides of this piece because it shows what you learned from wearing a uniform for three years and taking what you learned by voicing out your own opinion on this topic. I really like how you use numerous examples throughout this piece for us readers to get an understanding on your point of view. Good job (:
ReplyDeleteI have a lot of respect for people who develop their arguments using statistics. Using stats and facts validates your argument and encourages readers to continue looking through your passage. Smart. This piece was extremely persuasive, I understand the conformist nature of uniforms and appreciate the fact that you included a counterargument. Great Job! Keep writing like that and you will go far in English.
ReplyDeleteYou have good points in your work, however, to make them stronger maybe cute where you saw the statistics rather than just have "Statistics show that...". Little things like these can make your argument much stronger and more reliable. Thanks for sharing your work with us.
ReplyDeleteYou presented such great arguments! I loved how you incorporated a true fact towards the end to further prove your argument. Good job!
ReplyDeleteFirst o all great, great story. I really don't like school uniform but like you said some people do like school uniform. Nice writing though
ReplyDeletei may disagree with your side because uniforms are bland and don't let people express themselves but this was a great essay that had alot of convincing points
ReplyDeleteI see how someone could be for or against uniforms and you did a good job representing both sides.
ReplyDeleteGood job! I really enjoyed reading on how you disagree and agree on certain things
ReplyDeletei don't like school uniforms but some people like it good writing
ReplyDeleteI think you did a very good job on presenting your arguments. I like how you put in the statistics, and your experience with school uniforms in your middle school. I also like how you put in pros and cons for school uniforms. :) Good job Reema
ReplyDeleteUniforms are always a debatable topic and a very fine one at that. You did a fantastic job of explaining and supporting your topic and I could see that you did a lot of research. Great job!
ReplyDeleteVery good story! You showed lots of good facts that really supported your supported your opinion.
ReplyDeleteWow I never knew what kind of difference uniforms made until now. Really nice use of persuasion used here, I was almost completely convinced to like the idea of school uniforms however, I still desire to wear my own clothing and express who I am. Really great piece though!
ReplyDeleteI agree with you because school uniforms don't represent freedom. Also, if there were uniforms in high school there weren't be any bullying. Great description and nice job!!
ReplyDeleteI like how you included the pros and the cons showing the different sides trying to be as less bias and you possible could. Good job
ReplyDeleteI like the neutral stance on the topic, arguing for both sides. Nicely written :)
ReplyDeletethis is a very debatable topic to write on, but I appreciate that a lot that you had the courage to write on this sort of thing. I very much like that you had brought up the other side's arguments on the situation, although I disagree with you, I can support your side of the argument and see that you can easily persuade many people with this! amazing work!(:
ReplyDeleteI don't agree with the uniforms but your argument does put up a lot of facts which makes it really good!
ReplyDeleteYou had some really good points about wearing school uniforms but im gonna have to disagree but great job
ReplyDeleteGreat job with this piece! You presented your argument extremely well, and presented the counterargument with accurate contradictions. Doing these things is key to being persuasive and getting your point across in essays. Well done, and keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteGreat use of data to support your opinions. Also great topic we can all relate to.
ReplyDeleteGreat argument on school uniforms, it helps a lot that you had data to support your argument.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this post because i agree that we should wear uniforms but i also disagree because wearing normal clothes lets you express who u really are.
ReplyDeleteThis was very well written and something that you can personally relate to through personal experience making it easily relate able to a lot of actual problems.
ReplyDeleteNice use of stats to provide a stronger argument. Good job!!
ReplyDeleteI feel like uniforms are boring but still interesting lol
ReplyDeleteThis was a very thought out argument that brought up many data points i previously did not know about. i had a hard time deciding whether i agreed with you or not as you brought up many good points. Ultimately i will have to side with the decision to not make uniforms mandatory.
ReplyDeleteInteresting topic
ReplyDeleteyou had strong supporting claims, well done! :)
Nice job of including both pros and cons within your argument. It was well suppoted and you made your point clear. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI think your piece is very relatable and you wrote it very well.
ReplyDeleteGood job
great use of writing to try to illustrate your point! keep it up!
ReplyDeleteThis was a very lovely piece to read! I remember having to write about this topic all the time. You did a wonderful job! Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI love the way you present both sides for and against school uniforms. I believe we should wear school uniforms because they would help us focus more on learning. Great piece!
ReplyDeletewell written. you had a good personal connection. I think that school uniforms may help with bullying and other stuff but if you mad a whole school start wearing uniforms in the middle of the year, I think it wold make students rebellious.
ReplyDeleteYou very clearly stated your point, I for one believe in no uniforms.
ReplyDeleteNot big on school uniforms, but this was still a good argument. Good job.
ReplyDeletegreat story
ReplyDeleteIntriguing piece, I remember having to write on school uniforms when I was younger, and it's interesting that it's still a relevant topic.
ReplyDeleteNicely written. Your arguments were very spot on and I like how you used facts to back up your position.
ReplyDeleteThis is a topic that students talk about since they first start school, I like how you showed pros and cons for both sides and you sound profound and informed.
ReplyDeleteI like this topic. It's been a debate in many international schools, which is what I used to go to. I like how you confirmed your information with statistical evidence, and the organization of ideas made it easy for the reader to follow. Great job!
ReplyDeleteIt was well supported for both sides and I think you have really amazing writing skills, everything was clear and easy to understand! Good job.
ReplyDeleteReally relatable. Good job arguing both sides.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting topic but i honestly wouldnt want to wear a school uniform.
ReplyDeleteVery strong arguments for both sides! Great job I found this very interesting.
ReplyDeleteYour piece was very well written and very relatable.Good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat way of writing a persuasive piece! You clearly stated what you thought was right and supported it in a proper way. Including both pros and cons to the concept made your thought stronger.
ReplyDeleteI think school uniforms are fate worse than death, but nice job presenting the argument.
ReplyDeleteI like the details about bullies and all the illustration to make your point valid
ReplyDeleteYou took a controversial stance on this topic and really spoke with conviction and style.
ReplyDeleteI like this piece. It was informative and presented both sides which I think is great because it gives the reader the opportunity to chose for themselves! Good job!
ReplyDeletenice story love the topic :)
ReplyDeleteI feel like your position on wearing uniforms is very reasonable, great job.
ReplyDeleteReema, I like how you chose to write your piece on this debatable topic. I'm glad you were able to learn a valuable lesson from attending a charter school with uniforms. The points you made were well explained and I appreciate how you kept an open mind to this argument instead of being biased. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis brings valid points. The structure and tone contributes to the delivery of your information in a great way.
ReplyDeleteA cliche prompt but still classic, it is good prompt because both sides could be pretty extreme.
ReplyDeleteAlthough we don't have a uniform code at Etiwanda it was still relatable and I agree with what you said.
ReplyDeleteGood job! You have good points and a strong background to build up your arguments because of your experience with school uniforms.
ReplyDeleteThis is totally relevant to today's issues, especially with in our shool, so i applaud you for that. I really enjoyed how you mentioned the pro's and con's of the situation, and truthfully I just really enjoy persuassive/ argumentive writings. So great job!
ReplyDeleteI know a lot of people are against school uniforms so its nice to hear a different view! I think that the support you had for having school uniforms was really good and it helped me realize that school uniforms aren't all that bad! Good job!
ReplyDelete-Lauren Waitman
i have to say that i completely disagree with your perspective. If i wasnt for my clothes, and the expression that comes with it, i wouldnt have become the person i am today. Your piece had a few grammatical errors and read more like an essay but i did enjoy how you tied your own personal experience as support.
ReplyDeleteYou showed both sides very clear and thorough. Well done.
ReplyDeletetrust me school uniforms suck I went to military school but I like it very much well done
ReplyDeleteIt was well written talking about both sides and such! great topic:)
ReplyDeleteI understand both sides of your argument and you had a great point but the fact that they are not flattering is a HUGE deal breaker.
ReplyDeleteyou are very right about the rules and how it would be better but it will also cost more for the suits and ur water bill washing them everday but all in all very good
ReplyDelete-Ian Rendon
this was a well written story. very good argument.
ReplyDelete-GARRETT LACHASE
this was a very good i wish we could get everyone to see this i feel everyone should see and read this keep it up.
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