To a beacon of Hope
I hope
I am not being too forward
When I say that your very presence
Is the epitome of life;
Of a warm light;
Of an explanation for a series of
events
that were meant to occur just for
the sake of seeing you,
standing there,
in front of that window,
making faces in the reflective
surface
of some container.
I hope
I am not being too anxious
When I say that
every moment of pain
inflicted by this house
became soft and tender kisses,
the moment you stepped in and
mentioned
that you liked the vibe.
Your breaths of sleep,
have become my lullaby;
yours steps in the morning,
announce that my sun has risen
And your smile.
Your smile
Makes me wish that the clock would
tick just a little faster,
so you could get just a little
closer,
to smiling at me.
I hope
I am not being too morbid
When I see you trip on the power
cord of your TV
and wish that you would fall two
inches closer to corner of the coffee table
and into my arms.
When you slice your hand cutting
those veggies,
I watch
hoping it’ll slide just a little closer to
your ulnar artery
So that you can slide into my world
And when you leave in your car
I wait
Hoping that you can return here
with me.
I hope
That I am not being too hopeful,
When I say that I want to spend
eternity with you;
Till death do we unite.
OMG patty! you are such an amazing writer! i love listening to you speak and hearing what you have to say! everything that comes out of your brain is so beautiful! I loved your poem! keep on writing!
ReplyDeleteThe repetition of I hope just cemented in my head because I do the same and hope things turn out well for me.
ReplyDeleteOoooo patty. The format of this was wonderful and the idea of "I hope" could be applied to such an array of things but eternal love is a great place to start. I like this as an idea for a series of poems ya know? Maybe , even keeping the love andd the evolution of such. thank you for sharing:)
ReplyDeleteThis is soo cute I love this especially the last part it reminded me of marriage and vows great job
ReplyDeleteI loved his so much Patty. The concept of your poem was perfect. Your hope for what I interpreted it as love was well expressed and very enjoyable to read. Awesome job wittle Patty :)
ReplyDeleteahhhh Patty why is it that when I read this I hear your voice!!! YOu did such an elequent job writing this and excpecially sharing it at Literary moments. Write me a poem puh-leaseeee!! haha just kiding, but you really did do a phenominal job on this piece and Im so glad that I got to read it again! Love the topic love the format I just love it all!
ReplyDeleteThis was too beautiful. I especially love the last stanza, "'till death do we unite." I've actually never heard that before; I thought you were very creative.
ReplyDeleteDude thats crazy stuff! I love the irony and the word play at the end "til death do us unite". Wow! Great job Patty:)
ReplyDeleteUgh. Perfect. I absolutely LOVED this Patty! It started off so breathtaking and beautiful but the mood shift and the intensity that followed was just as perfect! And the play on words at the end, "until death we unite"! You gave me goosebumps!
ReplyDeleteI love reading up lifting poems, because they gave me hope for my own life.
ReplyDeleteWow Patty this is amazing. True poetry right here. I absolutely love this, the last two stanzas caught me by surprise. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAwhh.. This was really sweet! I really like this poem! Good Job Patty!
ReplyDeletei liked this. very touching and deep talking about momma :'). i see the beacon of hope gj :*
ReplyDeleteWOW! Such a beautiful piece, especially the last stanza! Pure beauty!
ReplyDeleteWow this is a really powerful poem. I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteWow Amazing!!! I literally could not stop reading!!!
ReplyDeleteThe organization and imagery of this piece was spectacular! Your writing style is truly unique!
ReplyDeleteI love that your ideas of hope are simple,but make life better and worth living.
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good piece. I like the way you organized it.
ReplyDeleteI really like this piece you did and the way you organized it. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI saw you recite this at the Literary Moments event. I love how fluid this escapade is because it's the little details you put in that makes the poem so believable in the romance for the other person. The part with the veggies is so dark and sweet that it's just interesting how to take it all in.
ReplyDeleteThis was really great! I could really sense the warmth and passion. Good job with the repeating patterns within the stanzas.
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