Travel
Traveling, I loved every bit of it, experiencing all the
nooks and crannies of different locations it always gave me this feeling of
exhilaration. But you see my traveling was different from the norm. Since I was
thirteen I had this unique ability to leave to places in my sleep, instead of
dreams my soul somehow transported into an abyss of darkness. I knew the whole
process and was no longer scared of this forever expanse of darkness, I knew
all I had to do was think, think of a place I wanted to be. Conjure up the
location and imagine every detail I could create. There, there I was in Paris, New
York, Tokyo, Egypt, London, Switzerland anything you could think of and I was
there. The moment I realized these weren’t dreams was when I decided to take
something from one of the places and as I woke up the object was still there. I
questioned everything from that point on but never got anywhere. Today was
another day, I was eighteen now and still got excited about my nights, thinking
in class where I should go, what I should see. It was ten when I finally dozed
off, it happened fast I was standing in the darkness. This time was different
there was no control, it felt as if I was spiraling and getting sucked into a
black hole different from other times when I felt tingly sensations.
I was in another world, a whole other universe. I slowly
blinked my eyes, adjusting them to these bright lights in the sky. I got up or
mostly stumbled, it felt weird my body felt light almost as if I could float
and fly away. I’m not exactly sure how I got here I just knew I wasn’t on earth.
I stared across, everything was fluorescent, the grass glowed green, the
flowers a different array of colors and the sky, the bright lights were stars.
How big they were almost as if I could reach out and touch them. I took a step
and nearly glided off the ground. It looked like I was in a forest, and
although I was excited about this new place it made me nervous and on edge
especially when I heard a movement in the bushes. I ran and stumbled, fell a
couple of times as well but didn’t care I needed to get out of this place and
fast. The exits through these destinations were natural, sometimes I would have
to pinch myself or go into deep concentration to go back to my bed. I tried and
tried but nothing happened, I was stuck. I didn’t even realize where I had
reached until I saw a city. It was grand, there were little domes situated
everywhere, these clear tubes floating in the sky and in the middle of It all
was a palace. I was brought out of my daze when I heard that noise again. I
looked behind and noticed something green standing, staring.
That's my favorite part about dreams: you can go anywhere & anything can happen. They're great! This was a great depiction. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI loved how imaginative this piece was, I could imagine you being swept away by your ability to travel where you want.
ReplyDeleteMan your imagery was intense. I like how you described every place your character went to. I'm curious to how it ends though. Like w hat was the green thing/creature and does your character ever make it back to earth? Nice Job :)
ReplyDeleteThis was amazing! I love it when we dream or rather when we control them instead of just sleeping. I would always dream about so many random things that at one point i was in this place and to the next like as if i was transported to a different world in a different situation as a dream, which is very odd. The ending was interesting, i wonder what that creature was? Was it an alien? Great Job Guneet!
ReplyDeleteI loved your imagery because I felt like I could picture everything you saw! Great Job
ReplyDeleteI loved the details in this piece! Vey nicely written!(:
ReplyDeleteThis piece had an incredibly amount of colorful imagery, and I truly appreciated that!
ReplyDeleteThis reminds me of a mix of the movies The Lovely Bones and Insidious. You were in such a pretty place but couldn't escape when trouble was following you. Totally cool.
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Wow, I want to live in your head. Seriously, how much does rent cost??
ReplyDeleteGuneeeeet, i totally fell in love with this piece, everything caught me off guard at first i was like ok this is a traveling and experience piece... and then i was like "ooooh is this a lucid type dreaming experience" and then the whole bringing something back from the world in your dream thats what got me hooked i was totally drawn from that point forward, i totally can envision the fluorescence, the glowing green grass, the different and bright colors of the flowers, and the stars it totally seems like a cool dream land. Well you see im already rambling i should stop, you should totally write a book about this (just saying) loved it great job kid!!!!!
ReplyDeleteahhh dang now that I read your piece I am simply ready for an adveture, a time to travel! I am dreaming for the day when I will next enter an airport ready to depart for the next foreign land. WHo knows when this will next be but as u said I can always dream! Great topic and wonderful writing!
ReplyDeleteThat ending Guneet... that was pretty fantastic...I really loved how you went from you physically traveling to your psycological/soul traveling :D I though that was pretty cool man! Great job!
ReplyDeleteYour details were great. I was literally picturing the setting of everything as the story was going along. I also like how the character was unique, but still easy to identify with because of the personality.
ReplyDeleteI loved the imagery in this, it was so detailed. Very well written!!
ReplyDeletethe imagery you used was amazing! i loved this piece! great job(:
ReplyDeleteWhat a fun idea. You should continue to expand on such a mystery. What if she isn't the only one and now that shes 18 and of age she was taken back to her real world, or like half human half that species which is why she was given the ability to..maybe this is gettin' a little wild i dunno. Great. Thank you for sharing:)
ReplyDeleteI admire your imagination and your views on adventures! Nice piece :)
ReplyDeleteYou used so much imagery to express your surroundings and it helped to imagine where you were in that new universe. I wonder if someone or something was following you..
ReplyDeleteThis is the result of pure imagination. Well done
ReplyDeleteThis is really uplifting for anyone with dreams. It will surve as motivation to me.
ReplyDeleteWow I really enjoyed this! I felt as if I was in Dreamland along with the character. I also love the idea of traveling for real to ll of the places you named. Good job girl!
ReplyDeleteWoah this is really great, the imagery and the detail definitely took me on a journey. Love it. Well done! :)
ReplyDeletethe imagery in this is so imaginative. Great work!
ReplyDeleteThis is fantastic! Dreams are just crazy sometimes, I like how you made it so relative to everyone!
ReplyDeleteThe imagery that was in this piece Was great it felt very dreamy like I was in the piece itself I could picture everything that was going on
ReplyDeletei want to tell you something. you know what i see in you? its the youth of the spirit of adventure. cuz yknow what they say adventure is out there. but for me dont like traveling lol
ReplyDeleteTravelling in any sense is something that i personally love and the way that you managed to make it even more awesome that it already is just baffles me.
ReplyDeleteLoved your use of imagery!!! very descriptive
ReplyDeleteThe details you used made me believe as i was actually there! Great Job!
ReplyDeleteWhat a trip, Your use of imagery is magnificent. Real loopy and cool.
ReplyDeleteWow, okay. Great job! I loved it
ReplyDeleteThat was really cool, man. At first you take us to locations popular with tourists, but then the dislocation to a different corner of the universe was beautiful cause it showed the travelers infinite boundaries to exploration.
ReplyDeletei'll take two of whatever she's having.
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