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Thursday, February 22, 2018

A Pirate's Life for Me--Jenna


A long time ago I followed him. We all did. He was my idol. He said it was for our sake that he took us, he did it to protect us. We all believed him. He could do anything, everyone on the island loved him, how could we not? At the beginning I believed it was for the better. My parents were always fighting, I was going to be starting school in a few weeks and Neverland didn’t have parents or school. It was an endless summer without rules. What kid wouldn’t want that?
I was one of Pan’s favorites from the beginning. I soon raised in the rankings and in no time I outranked everyone and was Pan’s second hand boy. I helped him with everything. I would even go back to the mainland and spend a few days there searching for the child most in need of our help.
I love Neverland. Whenever I wasn’t with the other boys or Pan, I was out exploring the island. I spent long afternoons with the Indian Tribe. I wanted to learn more about the island, why didn’t we age, why was Pan the only one that could fly, and why did the fairy follow him? The Tribe told me that, until recently, the legends of the island didn’t include Pan. The island had its own source of power and magic that Pan had figured out how to harness. The tribe leader said the mermaids were the ones to discover the island and that they would know more about it than him. So my quest for knowledge led me there.
The mermaids were very informative. They said that the island’s magic was more of a curse than a blessing. When the island was first discovered, it was uninhabitable by humans. The mermaids believed it was because humans had destroyed any magic they had come in contact with. However a fairy had a debt to be paid to Pan, he used her magic to make the island habitable, but the fairy tried to preserve the islands magic source by only making it habitable to children. An adult who spent too much time on the island would begin to go insane. Pan however didn’t want to live here alone so he found the islands magic source and harnessed it to steal children’s childhood, freeze them where they were, never let them age. All so he could have company. The mermaids told me that Pan was stealing the magic from the island. He used it when he flew, he had however figured out the the future life he stole from the lost boys could be used to generate magic. So that's what he did. Whenever the magic on the island was running low, Pan made a trip to the main land to ‘recruit’ another boy.
When I returned to the treehouse that night, I told Pan that I was just playing pirate with the mermaids. He didn’t question me and still let me tag along on his trips to the mainland. However now I was more aware of the trips. I noticed before the trips, leaves began to change from lush and green to dry and brown, flowers stopped blooming, the sun wasn’t as bright and the days were shorter. Then we went to get a new boy and the island returned to it’s lush greenery and long summer days.
As the time went by, the island soon began to change faster and our trips more frequent. Pan spent less time searching for the boy living in a bad home and just looking for an open window so we could return quick.
It was on one of these trips that Pan’s shadow tried to escape. He let it leave not thinking much of it, but he soon realized that he couldn’t enter Neverland without it. It took us a week to find the dang thing, and when we finally did we barely had enough magic to get home. The island didn’t change back right away this time. The days stayed short, the weather turned cold and the leaves changed color. Pan left for the main land a few days later, he left me behind and took the fairy with him. This time he returned with twins.
Once he got back, the fairy and him seemed to be fighting. I asked him what had happened and why he took the fairy this time, and he confided in me. He confirmed what I had learned and told me that he used the fairy’s magic to make the trip, the islands magic was too low. He was gloating. Pan was proud that he could work around his issues, use others for his gain.
It was then that I decided he was taking advantage of Neverland and everyone who lives here. I confronted him and vowed to stop him. His personality changed in an instant, he laughed in my face, said I would never be able to. Our verbal fight soon turned physical. Pan had the upper hand, and as a result I lost mine. He let me live but banished me from neverland to the sea.
I have been unable to set foot on the island for fear of going mad and forgetting who I am and what I’m fighting for. Pan is brainwashing boys, making them his lost boys, his army to fight against me. I have created my own army, other lost boys to fight with me. I am no longer a lost boy, and neither are they. We have found each other and share one common cause: to stop Peter Pan. Before I came to this island I had a name, but I can’t remember that now. Everyone just calls me Hook.

40 comments:

  1. I like the creativity of your story. I also like how you put a twist on the classic Peter Pan story. Good work!
    - Alana Robinson, P4

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  2. The imagination and the creativity you incorporated into the peter pan story made the story more interesting and giving it a plot twist. Plus i do enjoy the ending as well, call me Hook, clever!!

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  3. Well that twist was something I did not expect. I really liked the dark spin on a classic, timeless story of Peter Pan and made it creepy and uncomfortable. The twist with Hook at the end really sealed it all together. Great job! -Behrouz K. P5

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  4. I really like how you took on Hook's perspective to make him seem like the good guy. Really puts a twist on the original story and make it more interesting. Really good.

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  5. I loooooove fairy tale type stories, so twists are always even better. I seriously loved this piece, thank you for it.

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  6. I love your story. It was captivating and entertaining. I always love stories that make the villains more human. Great job!

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  7. WOAH that plot twist at the end omg!!! This was a wonderful spin of the story!!! How everything tied together was awesome!! I really enjoyed this story

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  8. I personally love twisted fairy tales and Peter Pan so this is definitely a favorite of mine. I loved reading this so much the twist was very unexpected. It was very imaginative and creative.

    Sarah Skibby
    Per. 2

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  9. Your story was so fascinating. The imagery and detail you used was fantastic and the characterization of Pan was spectacular! - Brandon Porter

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  10. The creativity and sense of imagination you had to write this was amazing!
    -Michael Prado

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  11. From the first few sentences I was hoping this piece would be about Peter Pan and I'm so glad it was. I love the way you gave depth to the characters we already knew like the twins and the mermaids and explained Hook's perspective. It was very well done.

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  12. Tristin GreensteinMarch 4, 2018 at 10:41 PM

    Wow! Amazing twist. I had no clue how this would end up and when I finally reached the end, I was very impressed. This is the type of writing id love to be seen with all the current tales of the old. It would make a fantastic read to be able to see more or this type of writing in a book.

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  13. I enjoyed your entire story from the beginning to the end and I liked how you actually used Peter Pan and changed it up ,it’s original!

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  14. I absolutely adore your twist of the Peter Pan/Hook story. There has been many versions that made Pan out to be a bad guy and even the original book supports Pan as a not so nice young boy, but this makes Hook a not so bad pirate that is fighting for a cause. Lovely idea and keep the imagination flowing.
    Lelani

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  15. Wow. This was a really good fan theory of the origin of Captain Hook. If this story were true it would change the context of everything. Good Job. - Jonathan Castillo

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  16. This piece was great, It was very creative and descriptive and I like how there was a plot twist! GREAT JOB!! - Lexy M.

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  17. wow... I love this. the ending had me in complete shock, originally I thought you had change the story of peter pan and I was so intrigued with your twist on the story but then I got to the end and I was blown away. You did an amazing job.

    -lizzie griffin

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  18. I honestly can only describe this story in one word, dope. Reading it at first i wasn't too sure of where this story was going to be honest but it was really good so i read on. By the end i was struck in awe at the creativity that this story had to put such a fresh twist on an already well known tale. Awesome job!

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  19. Wow, what a twist! I really like how you played your words just right to catch my attention. How you described Hook losing his hand was really nice. Good work! -Jon-Vincent Castro

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  20. I love the fact that you put your own twist on the classic Peter Pan and Hook story. A great read!

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  21. I really enjoyed your story on how Captain hook came to be. At first, I thought it was going to be one of the lost boys story, but turned into Captain Hooks. I don't know if you ever watched the show Once Upon a Time(I love that show by the way), but this story reminds me of the episode with Peter Pan and the lost boys.

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  22. Telling the classic Pan story and adding a different take on another character's perspective of Neverland seemed like an intriguing idea to work with. Great job. -Timothy Miraflores

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  23. This is an interesting twist on the Peter Pan story. The way it is written from the antagonist's point of view completely transforms the narrative.

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  24. This was just true imagination and use of language with a great plot twist, I actually really enjoyed this piece.

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  25. That was one damn good twist. I honestly wasn't sure where this was going until the final few sentences and then the lightbulb went off and I read the last sentence and it all made sense. A great change of tale, lead up and reveal. You did a great job.

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  26. Such a cool twist on the original Peter Pan! Great Job! - Altierre Paris

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  27. i really like the twist on an old classic and i think u did a great job with your creativity and style. it was really captivating!

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  28. I really love your creativity behind this story. You took something classic, something that everyone is familiar with, and made it into something new with a great twist. After reading this I really want to believe that this is the true version behind Peter Pan.
    - Brendan Sweeney

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  29. I like how you flipped the original narrative made Captain Hook the protagonist. I loved the twist and alternate fairy tale you created in this piece and it is honestly one of my all time favorites.

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  30. This was fun to read so thank you for that! I admire your creativity and the thought it's noticeable that went into this piece :)

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  31. Jenna,
    Your story was such a delightful read! I particularly enjoyed the twist on the classic "Peter Pan" story. I am always impressed when an author can make a well known story fresh. Great job!

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  32. I have always adored Peter Pan and I've seen just about every version of his story and have read the actual book by JM Barrie and because of that I loved reading your piece. I love that it was written in the perspective of Hook because the story behind what happened between the two of them has always been twisted, and reading this made me feel like a kid again ,which was always the purpose of Peter Pan, I really enjoyed it.

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  33. I love this new take on Pan. This was truly creative and original. I like the different perspective and the detailed background of Hook because every child sees Hook as the villain, but your flash fiction changes how people see him.
    -Unity Montalvo, Period 4

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  34. I deeply enjoyed the amount of creativity that was put into this piece, very astounding. - Alex Thao

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  35. I absolutely loved your twist on Peter Pan! I love it when writers put their spin on classic tales. This reminded me of the show Once Upon a Time and how the creators put spins on all the classic fairytales. I really love how you also created this as a back story for hook. Absolutely amazing!
    -Ricky Gomez p.5

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  36. Wow!! This story left me speechless, your creativity was awesome at the beginning I thought it was one of the lost boys but I would have never thought that it was hook. GREAT WORK!!
    -Briana Santana

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  37. This was off the chain. This story gets re hashed all the time and yet you still managed to make it unique and your own. Nice!-Jaden Dawson

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  38. I loved that you brought to light and added aspects of the original Peter Pan story!!! This is such a great piece and I loved the detail and first person narration even though I didn't find out who he was till the end! I also loved that you wrote the character of Hook in his perspective and how he's the "hero" or the one that's doing what's right in the story. This is amazing, loved it!

    - Tyger Ghodossi

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  39. The Peter Pan and Captain Hook story really made me feel nostalgic. I absolutely loved it! Thank you for bringing back some of my childhood.

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  40. I absolutely loved this piece. the imagery and the story line was amazing. peter pan has always been one of my favorite stories and i have definetly always loved the villians so this peice was just awesome -charis webber

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