Thursday, May 4, 2017
The boy--Ariege
I remember there was a boy who daringly loved you. This boy who said nothing and
never moved a muscle. I remember this boy watched you be with the wrong guy. He
watched you make some of the biggest mistakes of your life. When your friend asked
him to come near he would, and when he didn't he wouldn’t. He watched you make
multiple life changing decisions but never opened his mouth. He listened to your every
need and call at every moment but never spoke his pain for the love he enamored for
you. Never opened his mouth when he saw you leave his side again. Watched your lust
turn into love but never realized anything was different. He was patient. Never did he
force you to love him, only because he wanted it to be real, genuine love. He stared into
your brown eyes without blinking just so he wouldn't miss a moment not being able to
see you. He took pictures for every moment you could feel pure happiness. He learned
to like what you did, do things the way you wanted and go where you desired. He tried
thinking the way you did, just to understand. He was by your side when others hurt you,
and even when your own family hurt you. It took much time, which is why when the day
you made one right decision, the one day you finally understood everything, he couldn't
believe it. He never pushed. He always kept you in his heart. He was loyal. He was
patient. He waited. He was Ishmam.
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I love this piece! especially the emphasis put on not pushing by the use of repetition. Most guys usually won't just love someone and wait for them to come around, he sounds like an amazing person.
ReplyDeleteOh Ariege this is wonderfully cute!!!! I commend you for highlighting all of Ishmam's amazing attributes. You guys are so lucky to have each other!!!!
ReplyDeleteAWWWWWW Ariege I love this so much it truly melted my heart. I admire how you expressed your emotions and the way in which you described Ishmam. Every word you wrote about Ishmam truly describes him, because he is indeed a patient and calm person and you can't really find a person like him as often because he is one of a kind. You both are so cute and complete each other, I wish you both a bright future together. XOXOXOXOXO <3<3<3
ReplyDeleteThis piece was so fascinating to read. Stating all of the characteristics and gestures Ishmam has done as time passes by is amazing. Any one would be happy to have a person like that in their lives.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was very heart warming and I enjoyed reading this. Your use of detail and description of how "he" was. This piece was very meaningful and that was my favorite part about it. Good Job!!
ReplyDelete- Kaaria Belcher period 5
Aww reading this i tried not thinking of him as my brother, but honestly this was so emotional to read because i watched him do all that. Reading this just makes me so happy that you both found each other because I can't imagine a life without you two together. Beautiful piece!! <3
ReplyDelete-Ishrat Khan
This piece was adorable, how he was always there for you waiting in the shadows. Not everyone gets lucky enough to have a guy like that in their lives. Great job and I love the simplicity of it!! --Megan T.
ReplyDeleteI loved reading this because it is so rare to find loyal individuals these days and reading this gives me hope for the future. It was so pure. -Rachel Smith
ReplyDeleteThis is so sweet! I can tell this came from your heart by the way you were describing him and how much detail you used.
ReplyDeleteAww this is so sweet. Such a great, touching piece! You did an amazing job! -Lisa Ryu
ReplyDeleteAWWWW I loved this! it was so cute. I love the way that it was written, so we are able to see in his perspective how he sees you and how he was so patient with you. and i loved that realization that you had in the end. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is so adorable! Your use of imagery made it seem like I was standing there watching you guys and seeing him go through his immense emotions about you. Amazing Job and congrats on being together!
ReplyDeleteThis was super cute and creative! I really enjoyed reading this piece, Great job!! :D
ReplyDelete-Marlene Gonzalez
This is so cute! I loved this piece it was very well written, great job!
ReplyDeleteAriege!! I really loved this, it's so cute! I loved how you talked about how he waited for you. It's so rare to find guys like that and it's amazing that you have someone who cares about you so much! Great Job! -Sophia Cordura
ReplyDeleteWOW. I love this piece so much! Your writing style was enticing and quickly had me hooked. I wanted to find out who it was from the first line. you did such an amazing job with detail and devices. It looks to me like writing is pretty much in your blood.
ReplyDeleteThis was such a cute story. The progression of his feelings for you was very well written and heartwarming to read.
ReplyDeleteAW this is sosososo cute! I applaud Ishmam for his patience and everlasting love for you. I love how you described pure genuine love because that is something thats pretty rare in our every day society and for you to find one at such a young age, is amazing. Good Job Ariege!
ReplyDeleteThis was such a cute piece! Loved the happy ending because happy endings never really happen. I also like the writing perspective. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteOHH MY GOSH!! This piece was so amazingly cute I had to read it twice. I love how you talked about how he waited and never pushed himself on you, that's great and honestly hard to find not a lot of guys would have done that. Great Job and amazing and cute piece.
ReplyDeleteThis was soo sweet, I loved it! It was really well writtine and makes me feel bad for all the amazing guys who have just been waiting on the sidelines for their efforts to be appreciated. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis piece is very detailed and I love how you conveyed the feelings of when someone is truly enthralled and respects another person. Both patience and loyalty are very hard to find in one person. I enjoyed the repetition and vivid imagery you used.
ReplyDeleteWOW IM IN MY FEELINGS ARIEGE. AW I remember you telling me about the story of how you guys actually met and it makes me so happy seeing your couple posts on social media. This piece is so cute to read because I know you guys care for each other so much and ugh my heart is melting lol. Besides that, this story is well written, Ariege. I enjoyed the end part where you incorporated repetition to emphasize all the positive things about him . Good job!
ReplyDeleteAWWWWWW THIS IS SO CUTE!!! I am so happy for you! Your writing is so descriptive and full of imagery. Amazing job!
ReplyDeleteoh my goodness this was so cute I feel like I'm "metaphorically" crying tears of happiness!! I love how you described his patient love, it was very admirable and something everyone should wait for.
ReplyDeleteThis was such a cute story and I really enjoyed it. I specifically liked your imagery in the phrase,"He stared into your brown eyes without blinking just so he wouldn't miss a moment not being able to see you." Great job.
ReplyDeleteWhat a cute and sad story. Never was he despairing, always kept hope that one day that girl would become his. I like how you made the guy seem so close to the girl but at the same time stood far, great job.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was so cute, I enjoyed reading this!
ReplyDelete-Blanca Landeros
I love this piece! the passion and intensity was great. good job!
ReplyDelete-Brie D.
Aw! This is so cute. I love your writing style and the way you told your story. Great job! - Jade B.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was great. The amount of detail is what makes this piece even better. Amazing job
ReplyDelete-Benjamin Chong
Oh my goodness. This was beautiful, and so well written I might add. I am so happy for you and Ishmam. My favorite part about this piece has to be the diction you used- totally had me hooked the whole time and seeing Ishmam's name I was like YAYYYY. Great job! -Keala Naipo
ReplyDeleteThere is always something special watching two people deeply in love and they way you described it is perfect. It is all about the way two people look at each other and I know that you and Ishmam are deeply in love. Great job! -Ethan To
ReplyDeleteThis story is amazing and to know that it is a true one makes me want to cry. I love how you relayed Ishmam's emotions and how much you care for each other outside of this brief glimpse into the relationship. You two are made for each other and i wish you all the best!
ReplyDeleteThis was such a cute piece about love and friendship. In a world of cheating and lying it's rare that we find a genuine love. I liked your use of repetition of the world he and waited. This was a great piece.
ReplyDeleteWHY am I crying in the club right now? I thought this was a general statement and that was the path it was taking, BUT OH MY GOLLY. FIrst of all you have profound diction that was both understandable and enjoyable. Secondly, I believe the structure was perfect and you repetition to enhance a first person point of view made it more personal. Third, say hi to Ishmam for me thats my homie. AND LASTLY HOW ADORABLE THAT WAS GREAT.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was really sweet and I thought it was nice you wrote about someone special to you. This reminds me a lot of the feeling and relationship I have with my girlfriend.
ReplyDelete- Ruben Becerra
This piece was so sweet! You described what it's like to have true love for someone, so much so that you're willing to wait for it. Amazing use of diction and repetition too. Wonderful job.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is so pure! I loved reading this cute little journey that your relationship endured to become even more passionate! This is such a cute and heartwarming piece! Great job!
ReplyDelete-Gabbie B.
AWWW MY Heart! This piece was so beautifully written and had an amazing end. Everything about this was amazing from the short but powerful sentences, to the description of the boy and the girl, everything just fell into place and it was amazing. The way you described the process of falling in love was intense to say the least. Again awesome job Ariege!
ReplyDelete-Bryanna Torres
This is so cute! Happy endings always make everything better!
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