Awake, a sudden burst of Immediate fear. Fear of
imperfection, mistakes and failure but not without a slight hint of happiness
for making it this far.
Arrive, here it is, the place where an entire season of
practice is put to the test. Suit on ready to go, all while the tension is
building with every agonizing second that goes by.
Warm ups, first up. Dive in, the first mistake is here Dive
again, over. Again,under. Frustration building and building.Warmups over.
Competition begin. First dive "Brian Murarik 103 b
front dive pike" approaching the board. Eyes countless piercing eyes from
every which way. Look down, deep breath and begin. Left foot step, right foot
,left foot jump and high knee then swing
up.Stop, wait a second drop both legs then bring arms back down and jump.
Weightless like the gravatational pull exerted by a black hole I was thrown
towards the sun and was pulled back down in the same manner. Entry, like being
transported to a different world I automatically felt the cold liquid around me,
unwinding the tension from before. Until I heard "5,5.5,6,6.5"
distraught I looked to my mentor and in return with a calming look I knew he
was telling me not to focus on the scores.
Time, moving oh so slow passed with 4 dives in the same
manner all being sub par. Tension mounting again I read the list of continuing
divers. Instant joy, I had made it.
Twisters, these were my worst category and it was time.
"Brian Murarik back 1.5 with a half twist" I stepped up. Up down ,up
down ,up down storing energy then bam! Releasing it in an instant. Too fast and
out of control. Just as I was thinking these things the transportation was
complete I was on a different world and before I knew it I heard the words
"failed dive" . Shock pulsating through me. "No" I thought
, "it can't be" it was over. The culmination of so much practice had
become an utter failure.
Asleep, a mind full of regret dreaming of the future.
Dreaming of redemption and surpassing the limits but not without a slight hint
of happiness for making it this far.
Very good story! It's really cool that you made it to CIF. I thought it was really interesting to read.
ReplyDeleteAwh Brian! I'm glad you wrote about something you're passionate about. I enjoyed the amount of detail you put into describing the entire meet from beginning to end. Great job, and I know you'll be successful in the future. (:
ReplyDeleteYou put so much work into this, to get into CIF, good job.
ReplyDeleteGood Story. This story kept me wanting to read and very interesting
ReplyDeleteI loved your story! it was really interesting to read and descriptive.
ReplyDeletevery cool story especially making it to CIF but I think the paragraphs could of been a little longer but still good job on describing
ReplyDeleteVery amazing story Brian. It shows your internal struggles and relates to everyone who has to compete for their title. congrats on making tit to CIF also. Overall the imagery and the detail that you put into the piece made the piece sound really amazing. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this because the description of your actions intensified the effect of your post. I liked how you both depicted the perspective of what goes through an athletes mind when competing, as well as implemented elements of themes to always prevail.
ReplyDeleteYou had me by the first paragraph.Honestly good job
ReplyDeleteA wonderful story, you really painted a picture by showing what went on instead of just describing it. Good job.
ReplyDeleteYour tone and voice in this piece was very unique. Because your paragraphs were so short and to the point and each one began with one simple word, the audience was able to get a feeling of what you went through and the thoughts that went through your head. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was very interesting and kept me hooked the whole time I was reading it great use of descriptive words nice job!! ~Isabella Torres
ReplyDeleteAwesome story to read and very descriptive! Good use of imagery, and best of luck with CIF this year!
ReplyDeleteCIF seems so scary! As a cheerleader I kinda can relate to this, as if I was about to compete, and you described everything really well. Your story was really interesting and I really enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteGreat story, i like how you explained every detail nice job :)
ReplyDelete-Ian Mendoza
Really enjoyed your choice of words, it made it interesting to read and not a core. Great Job
ReplyDeleteWow, that is a load of stress, all the intricacies that are put into one dive. I'm sure you did your best, and just keep trying harder in the future. Let go of that tension. I liked this narrative, and it was very descriptive. Great job!
ReplyDeleteCongrats for making it to CIF. It was awesome to read this experience.
ReplyDeleteGordon Marbun
This was a god story, really interesting.
ReplyDelete-Garrett Lachase