Its 1990, in Brooklyn, New York. Shana Critchworth is rushed to the hospital as she has gone
into labor. After 5 hours of pain and agony, a young Jamal Critchworth is born. From that
moment Shana knew he was special. Years pass by and Jamal grows. He did well in school but
there were a lot of distractions surrounding him. Around his home and community, the aroma of
violence, drugs, and criminal acts were filled. Jamal was a good kid, but got mixed with the
wrong crowd at a young age. Once he got into middle school, his grades started dropping, he
started ditching school, and started getting in trouble with the law. A couple years pass by and
his mother realizes that she cannot have her child involved in these acts. She knew he was
special and had great potential. She sat him down and talked to him about his future and how he
is a gifted individual. Jamal thought nothing of it, until a year later he got involved in a big drug
deal involving his gang, the Drips and another gang. In the middle of the deal, gun fire came
running down and Jamal got shot in the chest. He was rushed to the hospital. The doctors said
that he came just in time, if he was a minute late, he would have died. After that incident Jamal
knew that he had to turn his life around. Jamal turned to music. He used it as an outlet, to get
away from everything. Instead of being out on the streets, he would go to his room to write bars,
or going to the studio to record. Jamal became known as his stage name Jay Critch “Hood Fav”.
After 2 years of grinding and producing multiple projects, Jay Critch made it big with his first hit
“Did it again”. As the song became bigger and bigger, Critch caught the attention of big record
labels. At the young age of 19, Jay Critch signed to the label “Rich Forever Music”, with CEO
Rich The Kid. Jamal Critchworth, a young boy from Brooklyn, New York, Started from nothing,
and grinded his way to the top, and made “Jay Critch” a household name.
I truly enjoyed reading your piece, I have listened to Jay Critch's song called Sweepstakes and i enjoyed the song, it's also interesting to know and understand Jay's background and how he grew up and grinded to the top.
ReplyDeleteI like how he changed his ways and turned away from all the danger that was around him and he turned to music to solve his problems. I also enjoyed the happy ending where he gets signed to a record label.
ReplyDelete-Andrew Rodriguez
Its interesting to learn about Jay Critch before he made it big. His story is also one of luck, thank god he arrived to the hospital on time, overall I enjoyed his narrative and learning more about Jay Critch.
ReplyDeleteI like this piece. The background of Jay Critch and the come up in is life is inspiring!
ReplyDelete- Tommy LeMelle
not only was it an interesting piece involving jay Critch but provided a concept of a miracle which made the story even more interesting.
ReplyDeleteIt is nice to learn about Jay Critch's history and background. It gives a deeper understanding of how and what influenced his works. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis piece is great! It's always good to hear about people working hard and coming out of tough situations.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you wrote about this, like the source material is interesting alone, just complementing the way you wrote it.
ReplyDelete- Ramsey Perez
Your piece was interesting to read. I liked learning about his background. Good work.
ReplyDelete- Alana Robinson, P4
I really liked this because Jay Critch is very underrated and not a lot of people know about him. I think this piece accurately describes his climb from the bottom.
ReplyDelete- Kenny Abraham
I loved how you wrote this! So much detail and so inspiring. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI’ve heard of Jay Critch prior to reading this piece, having me intrigued and hooked from the beginning. I liked how you took the time to understand and research an up and coming artist’s background. -Timothy Miraflores
ReplyDeleteJay Critch is truly inspiring coming from songs like thousand ways and fashion, two songs that help me get thru my day, his story is miraculous and makes him that much better of an artist, very well written. Mr.Critchworth would love to read this himself.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this piece because it shows how much can happen in 1 second and how it can impact your life. It's a real thing and it can turn out to a struggle but it will pay off towards the end. Good Job! AYYEE!! -Ian Mendoza
ReplyDeleteThe story of Jay Critch is very inspirational and motivating for all people going through issues. Great piece of writing my dude!!!
ReplyDeleteIt's inspiring to know how Jay Critch was brought up. It motivates me to become a future inspiration for the youth as well. - Joshua Dalisay
ReplyDeleteThis is truly a piece of literary genius... The way you crafted the words in order to portray the imagery of the close death experience mr.critchworth went through. Keep writing,you will excel in the literary world.- Elizabeth Griffin
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ReplyDeleteThis piece was a spectacular window into the literary acuity and genius that is your mind. The delicate composition of your piece balanced well with the deeply emotional homage to Critch. There was a lyricism to the diction used, invoking in me a distant, pure connection to Critch's work. This piece is achieves honesty without romanticization, depth without despair, and modernity without irrelevance. What a work!
Another example how no matter how hard of a situation your in, if you work hard enough you can become successful. Great piece and keep it up.
ReplyDelete-Michael Hernandez
What an inspirational story. It really shows what determination can do; provide success. It was spectacular to see how the life of a rapper could be so inuential. Thak you for sharing
ReplyDeleteLoved this piece and how and is inspiring considering what he came from
ReplyDeleteThis piece was very inspiring. I have never heard of Jay Critch but I will definitely look into him after reading this. -Jonathan Castillo
ReplyDeleteI truly enjoyed your piece it was very well written thank you for sharing.- Ladaijah
ReplyDeleteI really like the piece like how you give background for Jay Critch... I was just listening to him too :)
ReplyDeleteI loved this piece because i never knew about Jay Critch like this until i read it this way! This is a very motivating story that at any point in life we have a choice to change things.
ReplyDeleteTo be honest, I had a strong feeling about what this story would be about, however now knowing Jay Critch is an actual person (lol), I understand and appreciate your telling of his story.
ReplyDeleteI liked this piece because I have heard of Jay Critch but I have never been exposed to his background. - Caleb Leyva P.5
ReplyDeleteI love how you compacted the life story of a person into a few words and still manage to say alot about then and tell the story in an inpirational way. -Genesis Mendoza P.3
ReplyDeleteYour piece was very interesting and inspirational. You did a very good job of providing lots of information about his story. Great read! -Daniel Recinos per. 4
ReplyDeleteI loved this piece so much and the message it sends to readers! It was very enjoyable and I loved your use of diction, as well as how descriptive you were!
ReplyDelete- Tyger Ghodossi
That was a great story. I liked how Jamal was able to finally turn his life around. Was this story completely made up, or was this a hint to a story from a close relative or friend? For a short story, it was very complete and satisfing. Good job!
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