It’s hard to find the words to
explain what is going, but everyone is telling me just to get over it and to
forget about everything. As if I have not tried. I wish there was magical way
just to feel better and move on but nothing is ever that simple. I know I will
get through it but one thing after the next keeps happening as if it will never
end. People keep getting taken from me one after the next. I want know why? I
am scared to let people close in fear of losing them or then leaving me.
When people
leave me I question everything around me. If it was my fault or if I could done
something to fix it? I keep telling myself I did everything right, which I feel
like I did but maybe it wasn’t good enough. I feel that what we had isn’t over
or maybe I am just crazy. This is so hard for me but it’s easy for you all I
want is the truth, he truth of how you feel and what you are thinking. I wish
you would tell me so this wound can heal. Every day it gets bigger and deeper.
I want you to stop holding everything back and lay it all out and not be afraid
of what is going to happen. I want to know if this is worth fighting for if I
just leave it all behind and act like nothing ever happened. I want to figure
this out and continue where we left off. I know if we try we can get through
this and share our beautiful love with the world. I do not want to doubt that
you don’t love me and care about me because it hurts. It is as if reality and
fantasy are playing tug of war with my heart and every day neither wins. Wish
there was someone with the answers to solve this problem, but the only people
that can fix this is us. If you do not want to try all you have to do is tell
me. I will figure the rest out on my own and if you can’t figure it out then
obviously it is not going to be worth it. If you could just tell me what you
want then I would not be in this pain and searching for answer and assuming
things. You know that I would anything and anything for you. All I want you to
do is tell me the answer to my questions for stop this endless pain. You said
you don’t want to hurt me which we both knew was impossible but what you are
doing now does not help. The answer will not stop the pain completely but it
will start to heal my wound. The memories will never go away and will stay with
me forever and every little thing that made it special and different. The days
we spent together I will hold on to and never replace. Our love was special and
will never be forgotten.
Tricia, your use of diction to depict the emotion is very strong. I could tell that you were going through a swindle of emotions and that comes with the use of language. I would have like to see a little more dialogue with characters, but nevertheless great job.
ReplyDeleteI have a feeling I know who your talking about and its going to be okay. Great story,you really dug deep. Good job fam
ReplyDeleteIt feels like your saying this to your love, which makes the story more real.
ReplyDeleteThe way you expressed your thoughts really triggered me to think. I believe every one else who reads this will do so as well. Great diction and syntax, good job overall.
ReplyDeleteI just want to say that I commend you for having the courage to pour your heart out in this piece. It adds more than just the feeling of sadness. I can almost feel the pain you're going through when reading this and what I like about this piece is that you show that you're not the type to give up and that you genuinely care. Just by reading this, I can tell that you're a loyal person. Great job
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This gets the emotion across well.
ReplyDeleteyour essay was pretty ruthless good job
ReplyDeletethis piece is very emotional , its okay hun everything will be ok and time will heal :)
ReplyDeleteYour piece was very deep. Your use of diction and detail made it evident to the audience how you were feeling, your emotion became the reader's emotion and it flowed very nicely. Good work.
ReplyDeleteHere is your answer: they are not good enough for you. That's it. One day you will find your place in the world and it will all be worth it. Great job on making known what so many others are going through. You will be okay:)
ReplyDeleteTricia, I have a feeing I know exactly what this is about. I really loved your wording and vocabulary used in this piece and how you dug deep into your emotions and I know your genuine feelings and how much of them you put into this. You're an amazing person, and I'm so sorry you had to go through that experience, great job Tricia
ReplyDeleteThis piece was very emotional so great job on that. Make sure to double check to make sure everything makes sense in your piece
ReplyDeleteI absolutely love this piece and the emotion to this!! It's like I can feel the pain and the feeling of emotions. It seems like you do genuinely care and don't give up easily. I know someone who exactly feels like people are being taken away from him and fears that someone close to him will be taken away. I love reading this, thank you for this wonderful piece!
ReplyDeleteWow. This one was great. I could really feel where your heart was, which is a bold yet enticing thing to do in writing. I felt like I was inside your head, feeling everything you felt. Your word choice helped make this piece extremely relateable for this audience and despite the struggles you faced, the experience you described invoked meaningful thought. Well done!
ReplyDeleteVery emotional Good job TRICIA!!!!!!!!!!!!! lol (:
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I also commend you on being so courageous to write this piece for the blog. I like the amount of detail you included as well as the first person point of view which allows readers like myself to experience your emotions on a more personal level. Great job on this piece and stay strong, Tricia!
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ReplyDeleteWow, the way you described each emotion in detail. It really took me back and helped me feel the same in which this piece has portrayed. I really like the way you make every thought have a question along with it, helps make it relatable. Especially on a topic like this, you really did a great job.
Tricia, your emotions were expressed tremendously through your diction, and I admire your courage to tap into the emotions that many of us are hesitant to share. I hope that everything works out in the end. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI remember feeling the same thing at some point in high school. Very relatable and good use of description, the writing had me feeling exactly how you felt and brought back old emotions.
ReplyDeleteI can honestly say this is a true story, but whatever it may look like now it will get better. It's not easy to pour personal thoughts/expereiences out on paper, especially when it will be shared, but in saying that; you did a great job !!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job with expressing your emotions. If he can't appreciate you, you don't need him.
ReplyDeleteYour feelings and emotions brought out my past and I could relate to you. By the end of this story I was in tears because every word said brought back a memory of the past that I cant ever let go of and you shouldn't either. Stay strong and who ever this person is doesn't deserve you and this took me a while to learn.
ReplyDeleteThis piece nearly led me to tears!! it was described so well and had so much emotion great job!! ~Isabella Torres
ReplyDeletethis was amazing i was tuched by it keep up the great work
ReplyDelete-Diamend De Silva