I stayed up past my 8 o’clock bed time laboring endlessly
with my mom crafting these one of a kind pieces of art. Constructing a love bug
takes quite a lot of work. First, my mommy is the one to draw out the heart
shaped body. Then pulling my favorite pair of safety scissors, my first job was
to cut these heart bodies “very carefully” said my mommy. Next, remembering
what my second grade teacher, Mrs. Jones taught me last week, I chanted in my
head “dot, dot, not a lot” as tiny, sticky glue specks spotted the red hearts I
cut out. After that I quickly pasted pink, red, and white pom-poms all over the
love bug’s body and my mom finally put the finishing body parts of the love bug
which were its six legs and its two antennas. My last job was to go down the
list of my classmates and fill out the “To:” and “From:” When I got to the
name, Nick, my heart leaped a little. I always liked how his hair curled around
itself and how he always high fived me every day after class. I quickly scribbled
a heart after his name in the “From:” section and stuffed it in the pile of
other love bugs, went to bed, and dreamed of how great of day I was going to
have tomorrow.
The next morning, I woke up shouting, “Today is Valentine’s
Day!” This is the day I’ve been waiting ever since Christmas passed. My
classroom gleamed with shades of red and pink. All my classmates had something
delicious on their desk eagerly wanting to pass them out already. After Mrs.
Jones took attendance, we began our sweet celebration. I placed my love bug on April’s desk then
after April’s desk was Nick’s desk. I carefully placed my love bug with the
written part facing downwards so no one but him would see the heart next to his
name. I smiled at myself and felt my cheeks getting a little hotter than normal
after placing my treat on his desk. As I turned around I found Nick coming back
from distributing his goodies and I darted back to my seat, scared that he
might’ve saw how red my face was getting. A few minutes later I hear April and
Nick laughing while Nick holding my love bug in his hand. My cheeks got an even
darker shade of red and I put my head down on my desk with embarrassment. April
came over and whispered in my ear that Nick thinks I have cooties. When the
last bell rang to go home, usually Nick would give me a high five, but this
time he didn’t.
Cutest story I have read on the blog ! Love how you incorporated Valentine's Day in your story being that we are in February. This story gave me a little laugh and giggle till I got to the end ! Forget Nick !!
ReplyDeleteChristel, this piece is so cute. I loved how it was thematic with the time of February. I was so sad at the end, when Nick started laughing. I would have like to see more dialogue, but nonetheless Great job.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness! This Flash Fiction piece is adorable.
ReplyDeleteWhen we (seniors) were in second grade Valentines Day was amazing! I was able to picture this so well. The diction you used to reflect the way a second grader would think is spot on.
Aww, sad part at the end, but otherwise the story was little cute.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is so cute. I really enjoyed reading this especially because you made the narrator a second grader. it was very entertaining to read from a second graders perspective and be able to see how they feel emotionally at that age.
ReplyDeleteThis story is sentimental and cute because not only did it seem like you were having a daughter-mother bonding day crafting these love bugs, but you also showed that you were having fun and I can just feel the excitement you had when passing out your goodies, lol. I enjoyed reading this piece because it was descriptive and it makes me have a flashback on how much enjoyment I would get back in elementary school when everyone would pass out their candies and just hang out. Even though Nick didn't high five you, just know that you're still boss!<3
ReplyDelete- Tino V (:
Love bugs? Love bugs. You did a really nice job describing the classroom, it created this sentimental, lovey dovey atmosphere that coincided perfectly with your story. Good job Christel :)
ReplyDeletethe ending is sad but i like it great piece
ReplyDeleteThis work made me think about how we see the feelings of elementary school children as insignificant the way that old people see the feelings of high school students. I think it's important to realize how important emotions are, no matter what age we are, because they can make an impact on you for decades! Good writing ^_^
ReplyDeleteAww bringing it back to elementary school where we passed out candy for Valentine's Day. It was a very entertaining and super cute until the end.. forget Nick!
ReplyDeleteAwwww this is really cute lol i enjoyed reading it good job! :)
ReplyDeleteNice use of imagery and detail, and I thought the ending with Nick was both funny and sad, better luck next time eh? Well done!
ReplyDeleteThe innocence of a child is both sad and funny at the same time. The story escalated with emotion like a roller-coaster, which eventually had a drop. I agree with Kiona, "Forget Nick!"
ReplyDelete-Bernadine Uzeta
Very good story! Your use of imagery really made the story easy to relate too in real life.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very descriptive piece. The part that I like is when you start to get red whenever you go next to Nick. Excellent story.
ReplyDelete-Jerico M. G. Franco
Really cute story, I enjoyed reading this. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteA great story to read in the month of February, the month of love. Focusing on the innocence of Valentine's day, definitely gives me flashbacks of my childhood. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteoh my god.That is a really cute one.I love the story.That us real and you can describe it so well,good job
ReplyDeleteThis is so cute! Gave me a flash back to my elementary days! Geeat usage of detail, really captured the whole meaning of Valentines from a kids perspective.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this! Your use of imagery is great and brings back memories! good job!
ReplyDeleteI used to love Valentine's Day because people were forced to give you candy! I like the imagery and the first person point of view where we visualize what is going on.
ReplyDeleteAwww, it's adorable that you used it from a little kid's point of view! It's creative and sweet. And if anybody has cooties, it's Nick.
ReplyDeletethe story was cute. the emotional details were really good. sorry about nick ,hopefully he gets back to you. -savannah.v
ReplyDeleteI really love this piece! Very cute! Your use of detail was spot on. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteSad ending but very good descriptive.
ReplyDeleteAw! This was such a cute story. It was so realistic because we all know what it was like to have an elementary school crush and be so excited to finally give them a cute little Valentine on Valentine's Day! This story made me have a huge smile spread across my face. Good job. :)
ReplyDeleteThis was such an adorable story, it reminded me when all my classmates in elementary would get nervous and yet excited to make or buy valentine cards for someone they liked. Nicely written :)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your story because this story reminded me of how I used to celebrate Valentines Day when I was in elementary school.
ReplyDeleteNIce work. I enjoyed reading this! Makes me feel a little nostalgic.
ReplyDeleteWhat a cute way to take me back to third grade and my first crush. You certainly made me feel like a child with all of your imagery,
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely adorable! It's so lighthearted, and it really makes me reminisce about the simplicity of childhood. I love it!
ReplyDeleteChristel, at first I didn't know what to think, because all I saw was, "that my mommy cut out," but then I realized it was a flashback :) It's an adorable story, and I can totally imagine your tragically sad face at Nick's response. You did a great job of creating a nostalgic, "oh I remember when I was like that" mood while still managing to hold your audience's focus. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this piece because it was like a flashback to previous years in elementary with insignificant crushes. It kept me curious and smilling.
ReplyDeletegreat imagery and description! it was pretty funny and sad
ReplyDeleteAw, I find this cute even though Im not happy with nick. Then again I can't really blame him for thinking that way at his age. Anyways, I liked your piece a lot. You made it cute and easy to read, and it gave me a sense of nostalgia being their age. :)
ReplyDeleteI loved reading this! The speaker was the perfect interpretation of me in elementary school. I love how you portrayed the speaker's feelings. It made the read so enticing! It's also extremely relateable. #friendzone. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI love this story. This made me giggle a little towards the end. Love how you incorporated Valentine's Day in it. Great job
ReplyDeleteawww this is such a cute story, it reminds me of elementary school! The ending was pretty sad though. But i love how you used Valentine's Day since it was the month February! It's a great piece and really enjoyed how you described the classroom and her expressions.
ReplyDeleteAw man this was so adorable. I really like how you were able to write it in a young perspective
ReplyDeleteAw that's so sad. A case of unrequited love. Good writing, kept me interested until the end. I was hoping it would turn out well, but I just had a sneaky suspicion otherwise.
ReplyDeleteThis story was sentimental but cute at the same time.Also great use of imagery.
ReplyDeleteAh yes..... Elementary School Valentines Day, aka most awkward day of the year. I can totally relate to your story. Good Job.
ReplyDeleteSad at the end, thought it was going to have a happy ending but great story Good job (:
ReplyDelete- Ian Mendoza
I found it so sad that all your hard work was thrown away and laughed at. Your use of imagery when describing your classroom was nice and brought me back to when my elementary school made us do a bunch of things for velentines day.
ReplyDeleteNice job I was very entertained throughout it all. I love Valentine's Day it brings back many memories!
ReplyDeleteChristel:
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AWWWW!! Like Fother like son! Haha, this really took me back to elementary and think about how far time has flown. Things like this are so small to us now, but back then, they were the most we can do in a romantic way. I really loved the way you made this so relatable to everyone and those first feeling jitters, but also the way things are now. We put so much love and effort into one thing, to only have it fall on your face and change everything. Great job on this and don’t worry! There’ll be more Nick’s in the sea!
I enjoyed this piece. Good use of details and imagery. I could imagine every love bug and the valentine day classroom. I found myself holdin my breath good job!
ReplyDeleteI liked the enthusiasm felt for this holiday which you established through a tone of excitement. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job showing how emotion is universal and isn't affected by factors like maturity or age. I found the ending sad but easily connected to by many of the readers. Great job!
ReplyDeleteReally liked the tools you use and how i felt the emotions come to lfe with you imagery i really loved this high
ReplyDeleteThat's a really cute story. Good use conveying such a realistic background for the story.
ReplyDeletenice imagery cute story:)
ReplyDeleteThis so such a cute story!
ReplyDeleteTHIS STORY IS SOOO ADORBS DUDE !! it's funny cause i was justthinking about that glue method the other day. You did a good job &the imagery was great.
ReplyDeleteThis was the cutest thing! Even though you didn't state a time or period you can still sense it's elementary with the use of detail
ReplyDeleteAww Cristel. I love your story. You incorporated it to Valentines Day and wrote a very memorable experience. You made me think of all the old elementary experiences. You used a great deal of imagery and tone and I loved it. Great Job:)
ReplyDeletethis was really well written! it was super cute and really interesting :) good job!
ReplyDeleteWow! I can't even! That was so adorable till the end. I love how you didn't write about the typical love story and changed it to the reality of things in the real world.
ReplyDeleteThis story is AMAZING!!!! it was described so well and had so much detail I loved reading every word great job!!! ~ Isabella Torres
ReplyDeletereally liked the description you used
ReplyDeletethis was very amazing i loved it keep up the great work
ReplyDelete-Diamend De Silva
Awesome work dude, this story was great to read. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDelete-Jordan Battle