I am
sad to inform you this is not a story. I wrote this to stress the importance of
feminism. I realize most will find this uninteresting and stupid. You probably
rolled your eyes just looking at the title, and I apologize. I felt that it is
important that people know the truth and the real meaning and not just assume
that they know what it is from information the gathered from others. Some may
call this a rant. I just call this addressing a problem that has yet to be
fixed.
Where
in the bible does it say Adam was more important than Eve? From what I recall,
men need women to bare children. No, this is not a bible lesson but what im
trying to figure out where men got this funny idea that they’re more important…
that they’re stronger and women are weak. It seems like the people in this
world came to a funny conclusion that women were put on this earth to please
men. Women were not put here to serve. Its weird that women raise their
daughters to cattier to their man. I constantly hear, “No man wants a girl who
doesn’t cook and clean for him.” Can men not do for themselves? It’s quite sad
that society puts this image in a young girl’s mind that she is to grow up,
have children and keep her husband happy. Women deserve to pick and choose how
they should live without someone looking down upon her.
What
is “ladylike”? Since I was a little girl I have refused to be ladylike. My mom
never gave me a real reason to why she said so. I always wondered if that was
her or the rest of society. Society says women should love their body and be
comfortable with it but whenever a girl does so she is constantly body shamed.
If girls don’t dress “appropriately” we’re teasing boys, right? Wrong. I
shouldn’t have to go to school wondering if im going to get dresscoded because
my bra strap is showing. I didn’t know boys were unaware that females wear
bras. But then again ignorance is bliss.
The fact that you wrote about what many consider as a controversial topic shows that you have an immense amount of courage. This piece is very relatable, as I also believe in gender equality and the unfair advantage that usually comes out of traditions. It's time we change those traditions and take action. The current feminist movement has provided a medium of transition. Today, many important women are pushing for equal pay in the workforce, we could only imagine what's to come for tomorrow. With that said, you do a good job in relating the topic of Feminism and Biblical references. My one piece of advice, would be to never apologize for writing anything, for writing is a gateway of venting in itself. Typically when people write, they write to share some occurrence with the general public. And you should not be apologizing for writing about a misconception. Keep up the good work, and push forward. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of my favorite pieces I have ever read on this blog. This is truly an issue but just like racism feminism will never go away
ReplyDeleteThank you, Thank you, Thank you. Hope exists within humanity. I couldn't help but smile to myself as I was being uplifted inside. I love how you connected your opinion to the bible--the oldest piece of literature known to mankind, and transitioned it to modern day society. As a freshman, you are powerful with your words, and that's sadly hard to find nowadays. I only hope that you keep growing more empowered within this male-dominated society.
ReplyDeleteGreat job writing about feminism. I for sure did not roll my eyes or think that this was stupid. I am actually very proud that someone wrote about something that is so important to many people. Equality is something that we should all continue to fight for and by writing this you make it possible.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was so intense and I can just envision how this piece creates such a bold tone on this controversial topic. I like how you're confident throughout the piece and how you clarify what a woman should be like in society by living up to their own expectations and not pleasing their spouse.
ReplyDelete- Tino V
You did an amazing job, not only with the actual writing of the piece but also with the sensitivity to such a controversial topic. It shows great maturity, not just in yourself but also in your writing. You had a few spelling errors here and there (cater not cattier) but overall, amazing job.
ReplyDeleteay i like how you are talking about feminisim . niice job
ReplyDeleteYou have more guts than most people, not only for writing on this topic, but for creating your own view of yourself since you were a child and not blindly following how people told you to act because of your gender. Although I think making quite a few stereotypes against men was a little harsh, I can tell you are very independent. Good work!
ReplyDeleteYES, Thankyou!v This needed to be said i loved how you typed about "Feminism" certainly my favorite piece on this blog. great job Cienna
ReplyDeleteWow you did a great job writing about feminism! The messages were very powerful.
ReplyDeleteInteresting piece, and well written, however there were some grammatical errors, so be sure to proofread. Well done :)
ReplyDeleteFeminism, when people hear about this topic its almost always shamed. People are aware of problems but like the amazing quote you stated, "Ignorance is bliss." I totally Agree with your work, it was great all around and the examples helped to really think about the topic and it's importance.
ReplyDelete-Bernadine Uzeta
Very good story! your powerful messages really made me interested in the story!
ReplyDeleteYou did a very nice job with your piece. I liked the way you addressed the topic by saying you know people won't like it, but you were going to share your thoughts on it anyway. It shows that you will state your opinion and state your reasoning no matter what others think. I admire that. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteWell this was unexpected. You've got guts writing about feminism especially since it's such a controversial subject but it was very interesting because I can tell you're passionate about it.
ReplyDeleteNice piece on feminism it has a powerful message.
ReplyDeleteI like that you have backed up your examples. Overall, well done.
ReplyDelete- Jerico M. G. Franco
With such a controversial topic, you did a great job! Feminism does not have one meaning and you perfectly described that in your piece!
ReplyDeletevery powerful and moving. I almost think you should be a feminist winter in the future
ReplyDeleteActually， i thought it is a great one . you are dare to put your point of view, to tell us your point which is really good.Good job,girl
ReplyDeleteWow, I applaud you for standing up for something you strongly believe in. There were some errors, but you delivered your message very well.
ReplyDeleteI love the message it gave. You did a good job! I love how you wrote about feminism, its so important for people to read.
ReplyDeleteI love the message it had and how you wrote about feminism. you did a great job.
ReplyDeleteI definitely did not roll my eyes and I love how you address the issue on the way society views women. Great job! :)
ReplyDeleteI. LOVE. IT. Dude, that was so amazing, by the end of the first paragraph I was actually screaming, "DUDE. YESSSSSS. PREACH PREACH. BURRRNNNNNN." Although there were some grammatical errors, you know how to write, how to convince people and evoke emotions that causes people to feel moved, And, that my friend, is more important than grammar. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I really enjoyed this piece and I am so glad you wrote about such a controversial topic. You have a lot of courage and I am so proud of you for writing this. Gender equality is something I am very passionate about and this piece gives me so much hope. As a freshman you are a strong, mature writer with a great deal of confidence! There are a few grammatical errors, but they did not take away from the overall message. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteVery good on describing, very powerful message
ReplyDeleteIt was a well written piece even though you went off on a tangent at the end. Try to stick to one topic but good job
ReplyDeletePowerful words, quotes, and messages. Great job proving your point!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting topic. My favorite part of personal narrative is being able to hear the voice with in piece. I love it when the authors actually talk to you and ask questions. Nicely written piece, certainly have a fire in your heart and excellent way to show it
ReplyDeleteThis piece was very refreshing to read. It is a very raw and honest stream of consciousness. Frankly, I think the world needs more people like you. It takes a lot of bravery to speak out about issues that outrage you. Although this is only one piece of writing on a high school English blog, it speaks bounds because it shows initiative to foster change in the world. Thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteTHANK YOU! Very insightful and needed to be said. Already your first sentence had me smiling and interested even though it was so straightforward.
ReplyDeletewow great job about writing your opinions about feminism! very powerful
ReplyDeleteOh wow this is a great topic to writing about and talk about! I actually like this because I want to learn more about Feminism and it's a interesting piece. Feminism is a topic that should be discuss throughout society
ReplyDeleteI agree wholeheartedly when you say women weren't born into this world to cater to men. My parents are traditional and this often times conflict with my opinion which includes the role of women. You wrote about something you felt strongly about. Don't apologize for it. i won't lie and say that this is the first work that I've read about feminism but what I do like about your work is your own experience and how you related this to feminism. It bring out your personality. My one concern is grammar,. Beyoncé that I enjoyed your work. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThis story isn't like any other typical story. I love how you captured the readers attention by assuming that we wouldn't want to read this. Because of that comment, I wanted to read more about what this was about
ReplyDeleteI really like this topic and the points you brought up. It was a little unorganized but other than that, great job!
ReplyDeleteYes! I completely agree with you on this. The purpose for feminism isn't just to prove that females are better than males but to fight for our equality in rights with men!
ReplyDeleteWell, I'm not a girl, but I think you have a really good argument. Even though I see girls at school wearing practically NOTHING. Good job!
ReplyDeleteIt's good that you feel so strongly about a cause. It's particularly applicable to women in countries like Iraq and Syria. Arguments were well thought out, just watch your spelling and tenses.
ReplyDeleteNice piece and it was a good topic to write about "Feminism".Though there were a few spelling errors,but overall this piece was great overall
ReplyDeleteGreat piece representing your own ideals about feminism strong voice i really liked it
ReplyDeleteGreat job writing about feminism! I believe that everyone should be treated equally. Nice job well done.
ReplyDeleteI did not roll my eyes, you don't have to apologize because this was AMAZING. Love that you are talking about feminism Good job (:
ReplyDeleteVery interesting piece very cool
ReplyDeleteImpressive and insightful viewpoint on a controversial issue. I do agree with your arguments such as the comfortable clothing. You shouldn't apologize for the title because Society needs to be enlightened and changed.
ReplyDeleteThis is very brave blog to write simply because everyone has their own opinion on certain topics which are extreme polar with no compromise. I simply feel too old to even say my opinion because those going to agree is going to agree and those going to disagree will disagree.
ReplyDeleteFeminism is a strong topic to write on to light a fire under the reader's heart when they read it. and my interest was piqued throughout. Good job.
ReplyDeletegreat piece on a topic never really touched on
ReplyDeletei really enjoyed this piece, your message is powerful and feminism is such an interesting topic.
ReplyDeleteWith you would have written more! Your passion for the topic was evident throughout
ReplyDeleteDang. You really put it all out there and did NOT highlight the cliche facts about feminism. You modified it and made it appeal to our age group,especially dealing with Dresscode. I think you supported your argument firmly and made other people more aware of Feminism. You did an amazing job.:)
ReplyDeleteThere is something to be said of someone that can write about such a controversial topic and be okay with the feedback they might get back. You did a really good job! and a topic like this DEFINITELY needs to be talked about more.
ReplyDeleteyou described your story very well great job!
ReplyDeleteThis was a very nice article. I enjoyed readying about this. this really says a lot in this.
ReplyDelete-garrett lachase
really liked the topic of your story
ReplyDeletegood job! i like how you speak your mind in such detail. - hunter guidubaldi
ReplyDeletegreat job i loved it and i agree with you keep up the great work
ReplyDelete-Diamend De Silva
This is really sad but true. I myself have thought such thoughts and now I regret it. Women are just as equal as men and deserve the same rights. Awesome message girl!
ReplyDelete-Jordan Battle