So there’s room 201, 202, 203… Why am I even going this way? I’m on the fourth
floor. Man, if that old man hadn’t stopped me to babble about my melanin, maybe my mind
wouldn’t be such a mess right now. Nothing like running into a bigot on the day I move into
my dorm. I’m just glad I don’t have to see him again. Time to go back to that broom closet of
an elevator.
Hmmm. I wonder if my dad’s on his way back from the car. I really hope he’s not
talking to anyone or getting into an argument. Where’s Arthur? I need to stop worrying
about everything.
Finally, the fourth floor. Let’s see… 410… 406…Ahh here we are, 402. Home, sweet
home.
“Oh goodness, I didn’t realize that anyone came in. Hi, I’m Jim. You must be Arthur.”
“Yeah, but you can call me Arty; that’s what my friends call me. Nice to meet you. I
take it this is my bed up here.”
“Yeah. I thought you might like to be top.”
“How considerate of you. You have no idea.” Wow. Let me just unpack my stuff
before things get even weirder.
Is that a pride flag he just pulled out? “Cool uhh… flag. Are you…?” What are you
doing, Jim? You don’t just brazenly ask people that question. Geez; now he probably hates
me.
“My twin brother died in the Pulse shooting; I have this flag mostly to honor him, but
I’m also bisexual. He and I used to have a bunk bed just like this.” Well at least I got that out
of the way now. I just pray he doesn’t ask me if that means I’m straight or gay.
“Oh, Arthur, I’m sorry for your loss; I didn’t know…” Saved by the knock, thank goodness!
“That must be my dad. Hey dad, what took you so long to get here? This is my roommate,
Arthur.”
Not this man again. “Oh, I’ve already had the pleasure of meeting him.” And now the
attack ensues. There are the typical racial slurs from before… No. Way! Did this man really
just pull a confederate flag from his back pocket? This is lowkey hilarious: the ignorance,
the flag, th-.
Did my dad really just say that? “Dad…”
Okay. That’s the last straw! “I could deal with the racism, but do not, for a second,
think that I’m okay with you saying that more people should’ve been killed in the Pulse
shooting! And its LGBT, thank you very much. Also, I’m not gay, but guess what? I just so
happen to find your son attractive…”
Arty thinks I’m attractive?
… Well I shouldn’t have said that. Now I’ve not only awakened the beast, but also
notified Jim. Great job, Arty! “Look. That flag is above my bed because I believe that people
are being senselessly oppressed, hurt, or even killed because of who they are attracted to;
my brother died because he stood for that flag. I have that flag because I am tolerant and
open-minded. I have that flag because I believe in peace, unity, and equality. Your little
southern cloth stands for nothing but hatred, separation, ignorance, bigotry, and white
supremacy. I’ll be damned if I ever stood for such detestable ideals; my allegiance is with
those that don’t spend their lives looking for what makes them different from one another.
THAT is why I have that flag!”
Man, that was beautiful. And to think this man said I’m attractive and he happens to
also be my roommate! I can’t wait to tell him th- “Dad! Don’t talk to Arty that way! You have
no right to attack people because of their appearance or sexuality. You need to stop. …
Dad… I-I’m…”
I got sort of lost while reading this but I understand the overall message so goof job on highlighting racism and sexualtiy. I agree everyone should be treated equal no matter their appearance or sexual preference
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DeleteI like how your story all came together to highlight a point, while creating a meaningful writing! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThe dialog made this great piece even better as you could easily imagine in your head the quick back and forth conversation that is going on. Coupled with the fact that you get to see into the head of both the roommates makes this a great piece. Nice Job!
ReplyDeleteThis was so amazing! I agree with you totally about equality between everyone in society. You highlighted important and deep parts and this was just such an inspiring piece. Thank you for sharing this!
ReplyDeleteI agree with the overall message of this piece! But as I was reading I got a little confused when the characters switched talking and who was thinking what. But the imagery was great! Good job! -Kameryn S
ReplyDeleteI will have to agree with this piece no matter where you're coming from we have to promote equality
ReplyDeleteFlags often have a predisposed connotation but I really like how you used the pride flag to symbolize equality, great work!
ReplyDeleteThe notion of equality for all despite traditional beliefs of instilled prejudice is amazing. Beautiful piece!
ReplyDeleteThis is really beautiful, i loved how you showed the main idea of the piece, and you didnt leave anyone out. great job. -Lyndsey Ortega
ReplyDeleteThis is a really well written piece! I love how you showed the importance of acceptance and this difficult father son relationship in seek of acceptance. Overall, great piece!
ReplyDelete-Gabbie B.
I like the overall moral of the story and I liked how everything built up to get to the point of why people should support the pride flag and I like how you acknowledge the fact that you do not have to be gay to support the flag, you can just believe in equality.
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Your piece is really well written! I really like that you emphasized how important equality is. Nice Job!- Sophia Cordura
ReplyDeleteAt first this piece had my mind in a knot but you tied everything together very well! Your message is very appropriate and awe-inspiring. This was beautifully written, great job !
ReplyDeleteThis is so relatable. Amazing job! I really enjoyed reading this piece. -Lisa Ryu
ReplyDeleteGreat job in incorporated something you're truly passionate about in your blog. I also liked the message you've put out there.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was amazing. I love how you spoke on a topic that people tend to push away and you made almost came out to the father at the end. Very good job!
ReplyDeleteThis piece of yours was very well-written to the point where reading it was just wonderful! Your writing style was just unique in general!
ReplyDeleteI love pieces with dialogue because it makes stories just a little bit more personal. I loved this piece and how smoothly it got to the point.
ReplyDeleteEquality for all is so important, so I loved how you tied that message into this piece! Great job!-Lauren J.
ReplyDeleteI love this piece mainly because I love the highlight on prejudice. It's very important to highlight that these issues still exist and are thriving in America today. Your piece was well written, I liked that you wrote something meaningful an relevant.
ReplyDelete-sereenah soare
The message of this piece is very eye opening. Your piece did a great job highlighting was is important
ReplyDelete-Benjamin Chong
Wow this provides an extremely strong message that everyone needs to hear! Good job Tyler!
ReplyDeleteWow this is piece is really relevant to the era we are living in and I love the references you included, they really helped put this fictional piece in a real world. Very well written work!
ReplyDeleteYour piece was great!!! I liked his explication as to why he has the pride flag. The ending was unexpected but I brought so much more meaning to the story. You did a great job!!
ReplyDeleteThis was just amazing ! I love how you incorporated both sides of the story so we get the full picture. This was a great piece I loved it!
ReplyDeleteI was kind of confused with the dialogue at first but i got the main idea and the theme of your story was inspiring. Bringing such real issues to this blog was great and equality, or lack of it, is a major part of today's society. Great story.
ReplyDeleteThe overall message of this piece is great. You did a good job with this one!
ReplyDeleteThat was amazing, it did not only talk about what is wrong with how people perceive the LBTQ community but also what is wrong with America as a whole.-Martina Panganiban
ReplyDeletethis was really eye opening, i'm so glad i got the chance to read this, great job!
ReplyDeleteI like the themes of pride and equality in the piece, as we all must learn to accept people one way or another, or we will lose what we believe in. Nice job!
ReplyDeletewhile this piece was slightly confusing to follow I commend how you highlighted the importance to fight against prejudice and strive for equality
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job putting the whole thing together. I really felt the most important part was highlighting the part of acceptance of others. The message of your piece spoke nothing but the absolute truth.
ReplyDelete-Tristan Perez
this piece was written very well and i agree with the message of always promoting equality, good job !
ReplyDelete-Brie d.
Wow. This piece has such a powerful message in it; we should all treat each other with respect no matter the nuances that differentiate us. I love how you had the switching perspectives of the guys. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for positive feedback. I utilized the switching perspectives in order to enhance the drama and significance of the plot. Thank you again!
DeleteI love how you wrote from the perspectives of both characters, but chose to leave the dad's dialogue out of it. It takes power away from ignorance, and I think that's the whole point in these situations really. Great job Tyler!
ReplyDeleteThank you for the positive feedback! I purposely left out the dad's dialogue in order to take away power from the people that intend to harm my community. Love and acceptance is all we need!
DeleteThe flags made a great story and to show the difference of them was perfect! You wrote a beautiful story about the world now days. Great Job!!! :)
ReplyDeleteThe piece came together very beautifully at the end. I love the way you addressed sexuality and racism! Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI really loved how you brought out the importance of acceptance of people such a beautiful job
ReplyDelete- Melanie Salazar
I like the idea of equality, acceptance, and being open-minded. This was a great example of that. Good work!
ReplyDeleteI love the message you were promoting through this piece of acceptance and equality, great job!
ReplyDeleteI love the message you were promoting through this piece of acceptance and equality, great job!
ReplyDeleteI love that you emphasize the importance of equality and the unfortunate discrimination that marginalized groups of people face everyday in the piece. Great work!
ReplyDeleteit really liked how the story all came together to highlight the message and its importance. really great job!
ReplyDeleteI feel this piece was very relevant considering Americas current state , I definitely agree with the message of your piece and I truly wish more people would be more accepting of others , beautifully written!
ReplyDelete-Narelle Stewart
The conversation between the two characters and the dad emphasized the importance of the story because it shaped how I viewed the story. I completely agree that equality lacks in our society and ignorance does nothing to help promote equality. Therefore, we should all be accepting rather than judgmental and prejudice towards people of different race or sexual orientation. Good piece!
ReplyDeleteThe slightly dark tone of the piece evokes thoughts of the readers, making the piece one with layers. The labeling of misdeeds in the society is definitely the focus of the piece.
ReplyDeleteThe message of equality in your piece is great and you did a good job alternating between dialogue and the speakers' thoughts.
ReplyDeleteNice to see someone writing about equality, especially during a time when people actually need to accept others' differences and just live with the fact that people are different from others.
ReplyDelete- Francis Talla
I just spent around 45 min typing out an extensive reply (since doing English is such a great way to procrastinate on everything else), and then promptly deleted it on accident by pressing "sign out" instead of "publish," to much consternation and -redacted-. Perhaps this is God/Shiva/Allah/Ishtar/Quetzalcoatl/Apollo/FSM's way of telling me to try being more concise.
ReplyDeleteAnyways, I was trying to be my usual devil's advocate self and started rambling about whatever came to my mind while reading this piece; here were the 3 key things I brought up:
1. We should try to better be convincing people or our ideas, rather than just trying to see how many gentile heathens we can offend. (statement)
2. How should we balance free speech (even bigoted, offensive speech) and our universal paradigm for tolerance (non-idea wise) and equality?
3. Is confederate flag-waving really a proxy for bigotry/racism?
I'll bring my arguments on these up on my own nonexistent leisure time, or if anyone gets triggered enough (not likely).
But regardless of my mindless ramblings, this is quite an interesting - colorful, if I may say - blog entry: although it's located on a blog where we're forced to read and comment on against our wills and probably no one will come back to argue in the comments (nor do I recommend this - there are better things to do; e.g. argue on Twitter), I sure hope this fosters more discussion on such topics. Thanks, and great work!
O most august God/Shiva/Allah/Ishtar/Quetzalcoatl/Apollo/FSM, your method of making me shut up has worked marvelously. Thanks.
The ending to this was beautiful and I loved reading how the story was told through thoughts. Great Job!
ReplyDelete-Keala Naipo
i love the overall message of equality among all! i completely agree with you and this piece 100% depicts that! great job
ReplyDeleteThis piece is the definition of the world today, from the racial and sexual slurs mentioned to the flags being a symbol of each of the characters in the piece
ReplyDeleteI like the overall message you conveyed in this piece! It was enjoyable to read and easy to follow.
ReplyDelete-Blanca Landeros
This is a very controversial piece with an amazing message behind it dealing with equality! Amazing job!
ReplyDelete-Jeyovana Griffith
Thank you so much for the comment Kailah! Acceptance and tolerance is the most important above all!
ReplyDeleteVery compelling!! Your dialogue truly helped me to connect with piece on a totally different level than something like a statistical article or closed study, those of which don't truly represent the matter as organically as it deserves to be.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I agree with you! Great piece with an even better message behind it. -karina l.
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