Princess of
the night
I’ve gotten her a special flower and I hope she likes it, I
can’t help but love her more every day. I’m on my way to our secret place, the
tree house we grew up in, I decorated it especially for tonight.
I see her, oh how beautiful she is, they have her in an ombre
blue gown tonight. She smiles at me as we run toward each other. “I’ve missed
you.” she whispers with her arms wrapped around my neck. “I have a plan, I know
what to do.” I tell her. “Jamie don’t, you can’t trust them.” “It’ll be okay.”
We spend the little time we have together, talking about
what’s been going on in each of our lives. We stare at the stars, at each
other, knowing we won’t see the other for another year. I bring her favorite
foods and we read some of her favorite books. The life she breathes into me is
too much, I can see it in her eyes, the pain of being with them.
When they took her from me we were twelve, I was such a fool,
but how could I have known? These were things we only knew from fairy tales. I
dragged her deep into the forest one night, we weren’t allowed to go there past
eight, our parents forbade us, but I had gotten her to go along with it. I made her a crown of flowers she was my
princess, my best friend. That’s when they saw her, found interest in her and
took her as if she was a mere flower they could pull from a garden and claim.
Its 11:49 I have only ten minutes with her, why did time pass
so quickly? This day seemed the shortest lived of all days in the year. But it
was time yet again to part with her. They appeared in a mist and I knew what I
had to do, one of them came up to me and handed me the box, and inside I found
a delectable dessert, which looked so fine in elegance that it appeared to be
plastic, so beautiful but an eerie feel clung to it. I had to do this for her,
and so I bit into the dessert and a warm sensation fulfilled my body but it
felt completely wrong. She stared at me
wide eyed, “What have you done? You’ve eaten food of the fae! This is my burden
not yours, I’d never want you to feel the longing I’ve felt these five years!”
“I will take your place, you can live a life now.” “A Life without you is not
worth living!” “It cannot be undone, do you understand? I love you and I’ve
seen the pain it’s caused you, you will forget me, they’ve promised me that.”
The tears fell from her eyes. The ground turned barren and she placed the
flower upon a cactus that appeared there, something that did not belong in the
middle of the forest. “What you have done
has pierced me like the thorns of a cactus but your love is here,” she said as
she looked at the flower.
I brushed the flower lightly and told her “you will remember
me only in this way, that every year this flower will bloom at midnight on one
day and you will be drawn here by sheer sense, but that is It, understand that
I did this for you, I love you, you are and will always remain my princess of
the night.”
Wait a second...so someone took her and allowed her to see her friend one day a year for the rest of her life?
ReplyDeleteI commented a explanation trevor hope it helps and yes you got it aha
Deletethis was soo good.....phenomenal! I loved how there was a plot twist and he ate the food of fae! I felt the cactus was a bit random in such a forest but whatever floats your writers boat! :D
ReplyDeleteOMG! That ending was unexpected!! It was sad but it was an "aww" sort of moment that he would give up his life to make her happy. I really love your writing style, I could see this as a book :)
ReplyDeleteI love the story very cute! It reminded me a lot of high school musical 3 when Troy and Gabriela were in the Tree House and Gabriela was the "Princess of the Night" lol :] Great creativity Nadia! :]
ReplyDeleteVery nice story the ending was great unexpected but good :)
ReplyDeletethis was a good story and was able to give the feel of love and emotion, although i dont get what is food of fae?? or the 5 years the story's unexpected ending and pretty cute what the guy said at the end.
ReplyDeleteOkay so this story was so great. I was confused reading it but not in a bad way. Almost like it was an experience I havn't been apart of, but the beauty and sadness of the moment still encapturedme. Have you seen/read "Tuck Everlasting"? Well anyways your story left me with the same feelings of sadness yet hope.
ReplyDeleteI have read tuck everlasting it was the type of book where you hate the ending but love it at the same time, thank you so much it makes me happy to know that it had some affect on you (:
DeleteOh my goodness.......oh...oh i can't even...this was so BEAUTIFUL! and heartbreaking and too many emotions rolled in a big fat emotional sandwich. Seriously I want to read the rest of the novel.I'm not even messing around, send me a manuscript when you finish it! Oh and I want it signed... before it becomes like the next "Twilight" or "Mortal Instruments". ;)
ReplyDeleteThis was so great and sad, the sacrifice made for one you love is sad but necessary sometimes.
ReplyDeleteAt first I was confused but then it got soo good! Such great imagination! Great job!
ReplyDeleteI kind of made it purposely confusing im sorry and to be honest it was part of a bigger story I had to shorten it, but I felt that everything that had happened was something they didn't want to quite comprehend , there life was confusing and like her being kidnapped by fairies when she was younger for her beauty, it all happened so fast, P.S if someone eats food given by the fae they surrender themselves to them, you become a person without will and a slave.
ReplyDeletethe cactus in the forest symbolizes the fact that how out of place there life seemed to be how they were forced to be a part of that world. btw .......I found out about a flower that only grew at midnight once a year... its called " princess of the night." ;p
ReplyDeletei was to a bit confused at first with the dessert part and who took her away from him.. this is one of the first stories ive read that had to do with love and romance which im a huge fan for! good job
ReplyDeleteThis was a really good, emotional story! I really liked it!
ReplyDeleteI love the title you gave your work. It's amazing how you were able to refer to it at the end and make your story revolve around the title's meaning. :)
ReplyDeleteP.S.: you should write prequel, it'll be great!
ooohh danggggg, okay tie in the title and the end though! aha does this fall under paranormal romance? They are soo addicting, I couldn't help but get the feeling that this isn't actually what it seems, but is really like a mentally ill man who kidnapped a girl, was arrested, and then escaped and kidnapped her again and in his mind she is actually his princess of the night and he is her rescuer...or maybe i watch too many crime shows, but maybe eh? thank you for sharing:)
ReplyDeleteWooOOooooooOOow, your imagination is amazing! Everything connected and fell together from beginning to end, really appreciate your flash fiction, it was short but still painted a whole picture.
ReplyDeleteOH my goodness I love it. I felt like diving in and reading it, it was just like picking up a book at a store and falling into the story! I only wish there could be more to read, find out more about the characters and the story. It was beautifully written
ReplyDeleteNadia! I've always loved your imagination! The imagery and dialect you used really made the story so powerful, I could just imagine it all in my head! You're an amazing writer and never fail to amaze my mind! Amazing job!
ReplyDeleteWell, t'was cool there was a fantasy/supernatural edge to it. Reminds me of a fairytale, where the guy saves his damsel in distress.
ReplyDeleteAmazing! Your imagination is very unique. I was drawn to the story all the way until the end. I love how you tied in the title of the work to the concluding sentence. I feel like this short little story could be a novel. It made me want to keep reading!
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I'm honestly not one who is not into romantic works like this, but your imagination and writing style really captured me, and actually made me want to keep reading!!
ReplyDeleteThis story you created was beautiful and full great of imagination. I hope you could continue writing stories like this one because it is one of my favorites I have read on the blog so far!
ReplyDeleteAww I felt like I was watching a Disney movie
ReplyDeletethis reminds me of a old ancient Chinese story where there was this beautiful girl and she died. but the god's knew of her love for this man she was with and took pity on her. so for one night out of the whole year, birds would come and make a bridge from heaven all the way down to earth so that her and her love could be together but only for that one night.
ReplyDeleteanyways, I really liked your story. made me sad but the good kind of sad. great job!
This was incredibly good :) I'm a sucker for fantasy romances and this was just fantastic. It reminded me of City of Ashes.
ReplyDeleteI remembered you telling me how you like stories like dark and fairytales and stuff and yup, this has to be my fave. ;) hahaha so precious, Nadia, I loved it!
ReplyDeleteVery amazing story..great imagination! haven't seen one of these yet..good job!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this. The imagination is very imaginative; if only there was more.
ReplyDeleteits sleek , interesting, and not to sound girly but its kind of heart warming. the references and settings in the forest are cute you can say and overall its a wounder filled story.
ReplyDeleteLove the fantasy vibe added, at first it started out like a simple love story but then you added "the food of the fae" quickly shifting the story into a fantasy/supernatural world. Really great, I wanted to keep reading!
ReplyDeleteLove the story Nadia :) very nice imagery and just the plot in general, classic "laying myself down for you" story makes all the warm fuzzy feelings grow haha
ReplyDeleteWOW This was amazing! I was really into the story. You really have a good gift for writing! this was great..Loved it!
ReplyDeleteI Loved It!!!!!! When I started reading your short story I couldn't take my eyes away from the screen. Your imagination is so amazing and impressive! Keep up the good work
ReplyDeleteThat was a really interesting story! You grabbed my imagination with the instant curiosity of why the character could only see her once a year. The development of the story was smooth as well as the symbolism from the flower to represent love.
ReplyDeleteAhhh! How freaking cute! I imagined it all in my head and it kept me excited and giddy the entire time! The love that flows through the piece is contagious and I think it was beautifully written :)
ReplyDeleteThis reminded me alot of Romeo & Juliet. I like how you weren't too literal, you kept it short, and you gave enough info for the audience to understand the gist of the story. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI loved the ending of the story and your imagination is amazing.
ReplyDeleteI was kind of confused when I was reading this, but all the explanations helped. That was such a cute story. Even though it was sad because they couldn't be together, it was so cute that he would give up his life for her. You have such a great imagination. This sounds like it could possibly be a book someday.
ReplyDeleteThis was such a good little story, it was really cute
ReplyDeleteSuch great imagination! I loved that you made the beginning unclear, then at the end tied it all together! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great story. I enjoyed it from beginning to end.
ReplyDeleteI remember from the 2nd socratic seminar, you said you loved stories about faeries, so I'm really glad you brought that to your story! It was so cute Nadia, great job :)
ReplyDeleteAm I just reading a New York best time seller. I think so. This was amazing you had all wrapped up and wanting for more. You made me think and feel. And stir my emotions which is what very few writters are actually able to do and you simply did that well. Keep on writing and never stop you don't know how much potential you have in you from your vivid detail and ability to connect with your readers is a trait unique with you. Continue to grow in your abilities since at this point you can be unstoppable. Awesome.
ReplyDeleteI loved the way you started your story, great job!(:
ReplyDeleteAh! That was so good. I totally didn't expect the plot twist and the imagery was so detailed!
ReplyDeleteThis was great, the way you were able to grab my imagination And make me think about what else would happen. It is awesome you were able to do that.
ReplyDeleteThat story has a lot of imagination and detail that it is amazing! Nice Job
ReplyDeleteWhat did he doooo! This would be a cool novel if you continue off of it
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