“RUN AWAY!” Enzo said, “RUN AS FAST AS YOU CAN, THEY’RE COMING!”
So that’s what I did. I ran. I ran like I've never run before. But I could no longer hear the screams of my friends around me. I could no longer feel the burning sensation in my legs and lungs. All I could hear was my own self breathing shakily and all I could see was the grass in front of me. It was as if I had entered an illusive reality. All of a sudden that sense of reality was nothing more than a dream as I abruptly came back to my senses. The night before was the first of November, my friends and I had just gotten back from a night out at the drive-in.
The night was not ideal as a cold mist was coming in and it was hard to see the movie. My friends and I hadn’t thought to bring a jacket because it had been hot earlier that day, it was kind of strange how cold it was all of the sudden.
The movie was about some supernatural beings. This was the first time anyone’s ever really seen or heard about these types of beings aside from the horrifying rumors passed down from former employees at the Protection Agency. To most people, going to see this movie was a means of “opening a door” to an evil spiritual realm, so the turnout was small and mainly consisted of teens that wanted to be scared. The odd thing about the movie was that these “beings” were painted as the protagonists of the film, running in fear of the humans, but I guess that was to be expected from a fictional horror movie. We got home later that night and that’s one of the last things I remember. The next thing I knew, I was waking up and my whole life had changed.
That night I had a nightmare. I had seen the world in a way I had never seen before, I had attained knowledge beyond my own wits. There was utter chaos around me and nobody, other than myself seemed to notice. BANG! I heard this loud noise like an explosion that startled me as I woke up. BANG! There it was again. BANG! I felt as if my head was going to explode. I fumbled down the stairs to see my parents peacefully eating breakfast and discussing a breakthrough in their case at the Protection Agency where they worked.
“You guys don’t hear that?!” I said as the deafening noise rang in my ears.
“Hear what Denzel?” My mom said.
“That noise!” I said, covering my ears in pain.
“I don’t hear anything son. Are you feeling okay? You look a little sick” Said my dad.
I closed my eyes to clear my mind and tune the banging out, doing my best to hear all the noises around me. I noticed the instrumental music playing on the radio and rushed to shut it off feeling an instant sense of relief.
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That next week was one of the strangest in my life, although there was no chaos, it felt as if the way I had seen the world in my dreams was becoming my new reality.
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That weekend Denzel and his friends met up at the park. Denzel had a dark skin tone with sharp features. He had short dark hair and dark brown eyes, a slimmer build, and a bright smile. He was an optimist. Enzo was the jock of the group. He was a tall guy with a strong build. He had olive-toned skin and dark hair with eyes like honey. Kayanna, his girlfriend, was a pro athlete and the best on her track team. With her dark bouncy coils, tawny brown skin, and encapsulating smile, she instantly had Enzo wrapped around her finger. Milo was a child prodigy, his IQ exceeded everyone in their school. He had green deep-set eyes, pale faded skin, and brown shoulder-length hair.
They were sitting at one of the picnic tables while Denzel was telling them about the strange incidents that he had been experiencing.
“You’ve been hearing things too?!” Kayanna exclaimed. “I’ve been hearing excruciatingly loud noises all week. I was telling Enzo about them but he hadn’t heard anything.”
“Yeah, I haven’t been hearing things, but I’ve been seeing things that other people say aren’t there. I don’t know if they’re real or not, but it sure as hell seems like it.” Enzo said.
Milo looked pale and was sweating and shaking. He had been silent throughout their entire conversation which was quite unlike him.
“Are you okay?” Denzel asked him.
He sat there silently, blankly staring into the distance.
“Dude,” Enzo said, lightly shoving Milo’s shoulder.
Milo looked up, shaking even more with his eyes bloodshot.
“It’s spinning.” He said, “It never stops spinning!”
“I think I’m going to be sick!” He cried as he ran to the bathroom.
They all looked at each other worried as Enzo got up hurriedly to go check on Milo.
“Milo!” Enzo called out as he was running to the restroom.
“Milo buddy, are you okay?” He said to him as he watched him hover over a toilet.
“No, I’m not.” He said shakily.
“What’s going on? What did you mean when you said something was spinning?”
“The world.” He said, “The world never stops spinning.”
“And it’s hot, like a summer day in July. Don’t you feel dizzy and hot?” He asked Enzo. “No man, it's cold. 53 degrees to be exact. And I don't feel like anything is spinning.”
“I don’t know what it is, but ever since the morning after the drive-in I’ve never felt the same. It’s almost like I can feel the earth spinning on its axis. And I know I should feel cold but I don’t. It’s always hot and humid as if it were summertime. And I’m constantly feeling motion sick. What’s happening to us?” Milo said.
“I don’t know, I’m sorry I wish I could tell you.” said Enzo as he helped Milo up.
Leaving the restroom, they headed back to the picnic table. But just then Enzo saw 3 men in uniform approaching them.
“Do you see those men too?” Enzo asked nervously.
“Yeah man, I see them too.” Milo said scardly.
Enzo saw a dark shadow hovering over these men, and he got the sense that they needed to run as far away from these people as possible.
“RUN AWAY!” Enzo said, “RUN AS FAST AS YOU CAN, THEY’RE COMING!”
Denzel and Kayanna jumped up and the four of them ran as fast they could. This was no use as the men shot darts into each of them, and within seconds they were all out.
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I woke up to find myself restrained to a lab chair. I looked up and saw blinding white lights, similar to ones you’d see in an operating room. White walls surrounding me. To my left I saw Kayanna and Milo, I then looked to my right and saw Enzo. They too were restrained to these lab-like chairs.
Where were we? And why were we here? I asked myself.
Then it occurred to me where I was and everything started to make sense. I knew that I needed to wake up my friends and that we needed to get as far away from here as possible.
Hi Brianna! I love your story! I think it is very imaginative and well written. I loved the descriptions of the character and the flow of the story. I like how it began with a flashback and at one pointed shifted to a third person POV. Great Job! :)
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This is an excellent, suspenseful little story! Within the first few moments, you manage to draw the reader in with an interesting hook, and then PARALLEL that same hook later in the story - a downright ingenious move! Your story also manages to keep the reader engaged with the tale, ramping up suspense as the characters slowly realize that something is wrong. If I had to give a piece of criticism, however, I would recommend tweaking some of the wording; it sometimes sounds a bit choppy. Other than that - and a few minor grammatical errors - it's a brilliant piece that I'd love to see more of! - Ethan Lamas
ReplyDeleteI really loved this story! I like how each of the characters sort of began to piece together what was going on, with each of them experiencing a different "symptom" Also the idea of being sensitive enough to sense the rotation of the earth itself was unique, made me feel nauseous just reading it lol. Very good job :D -Giana Nunez
ReplyDeleteThis story was great and and I loved how you paralleled the line at the beginning of the story and again towards the end. I also really liked the twist at the end.
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