First off, I want to commend you on writing such a thrilling piece! The creative use of perspective in this story was definitely the highlight. Just as I was getting used to the second perspective format, I realized midway through that the italicized words were in fact another person speaking, and it caught me off guard (in a good way). I also loved the final reveal at the end when it switches to first person. It truly conveyed that creepy sense of being stalked and observed. On another note, the way you described the smiling man reminded me of the "Mandela Catalogue," which is a horror web video series that presents itself in the form of informative public service announcements. The creatures in the show are human in appearance but they have an unsettling and uncanny aura, such as the inhuman smile that the "person" in your story had. I was really immersed with your story to the point that I could feel my heart pumping in my chest, but it wasn't unpleasant like I tend to find with horror movies. This has definitely inspired me to pick up some horror or thriller novels instead, because they seem much more enjoyable.
I really liked how you took advantage of a lot of imagery and intensity in some situations! The word diction is perfect and it created a good atmosphere while reading :)
The 2nd person POV is something I have never seen done in stories that I have read and as a first time this was such a sick experience! It was so very immersive and reading it aloud really put me into my imagination. The diction was very strong and because of that I envisioned myself directly in the book, great job.
First off, I want to commend you on writing such a thrilling piece! The creative use of perspective in this story was definitely the highlight. Just as I was getting used to the second perspective format, I realized midway through that the italicized words were in fact another person speaking, and it caught me off guard (in a good way). I also loved the final reveal at the end when it switches to first person. It truly conveyed that creepy sense of being stalked and observed. On another note, the way you described the smiling man reminded me of the "Mandela Catalogue," which is a horror web video series that presents itself in the form of informative public service announcements. The creatures in the show are human in appearance but they have an unsettling and uncanny aura, such as the inhuman smile that the "person" in your story had. I was really immersed with your story to the point that I could feel my heart pumping in my chest, but it wasn't unpleasant like I tend to find with horror movies. This has definitely inspired me to pick up some horror or thriller novels instead, because they seem much more enjoyable.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you took advantage of a lot of imagery and intensity in some situations! The word diction is perfect and it created a good atmosphere while reading :)
ReplyDeleteThe 2nd person POV is something I have never seen done in stories that I have read and as a first time this was such a sick experience! It was so very immersive and reading it aloud really put me into my imagination. The diction was very strong and because of that I envisioned myself directly in the book, great job.
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