Nevaeh abruptly awoke to the sound of her manager, Rachel calling her to wake up and
get ready for the busy day that awaited her. She was the type of person that was always prompt and never overslept, but for some odd reason, today was an exception. After Rachel tried several attempts to wake up Nevaeh, she finally arose from her bed and headed over to her luxurious bathroom to start her early morning. From the other room Rachel said urgently, “Nevaeh you know today is a huge day for you, we have to prepare for your album launch party tonight and I hope you didn’t forget about the radio interview we have scheduled today.” Nevaeh rolled her eyes in annoyance, she was tired of hearing her manager constantly nagging her about what she needed to do but she knew Rachel had her best interest at heart. “Rach you’re starting to sound like a broken record,” Nevaeh complained with an irritated tone. Rachel sighed as Nevaeh stepped out of the bathroom still in her pajamas, now with a full face of makeup on and her naturally curly hair decorated with butterfly clips. She sat on her california king bed as her manager handed her items of clothing one by one so that she could decide on an outfit for her big day. Nevaeh had finally decided on two outfits, one for the radio interview she would be attending, and one for her album launch party later that evening. As the two young women made their way out of the door, they were met with a sleek, black SUV that was parked in the long narrow driveway of the mansion. After a long car ride through LA traffic, Nevaeh and Rachel opened the car door only to be met with a crowd full of screaming fans and paparazzi, Nevaeh stopped briefly to greet her fans, take photos and sign autographs. Eventually, Nevaeh and her team made it safely into the lobby of the building where they were guided into what looked like the radio room where the interview would be held. The people in the radio room welcomed Nevaeh and her team with warm smiles as they introduced themselves one by one, briefly after greetings they began the interview which consisted of Neveah answering questions
about her debut album, plans for a potential tour, and experience with her newfound stardom.
After the interview, they were headed to the venue where the album launch party would be held
to discuss decorations, the guest list, and overall preparations for the event. Nevaeh finally
headed back home to rest before her busy day would resume once again for a huge celebration
later on. She was beyond excited about finally launching her album after all of the blood sweat
and tears that she put into her craft, she could not wait for everyone to hear the long awaited
project. Before she knew it, it was 5:00 pm which meant she had to start getting ready for the
album launch party so that she could be there before the party started at 7:00 pm. With an hour
and a half left to spare, Nevaeh left her house to meet Rachel and the rest of her management
team at the venue where guests would start to arrive. She entered the nearly empty venue at
6:15 pm, giving her and the staff enough time to make sure the finishing touches were in place
for the party. “Hey Rach what time is it?” Nevaeh asked, as Rachel checked her phone for the
time, it was 6:57 pm and guests started to line up in front of the venue where a bouncer stood at
the door to make sure the people let into the event were on the guest list. As they began to file
into the large room, Nevaeh greeted everyone with open arms and a wide smile, she was so
happy to see all of the familiar faces.The guests spent their time mingling with one another,
taking photos at the photo booth and helping themselves to refreshments until it was almost
time for Nevaeh’s debut album to be released to the public. Nevaeh made her way to the stage
with a microphone in hand, “Hello everyone, I would like to thank you all for coming and I’m so
thankful for every single one of you.” The crowd erupted into a fit of applause as Nevaeh
continued her speech, “As of now, my debut album will launch in exactly two minutes and I
cannot be more excited yet nervous for you all to hear what I have been working on these past
few months, so without further adieu, I would like to officially announce the launch of my new
album, ‘Dream’.” Everyone in the audience cheered for Nevaeh as she made her way off the
stage and into the crowd of people. Everyone seemed to enjoy themselves while Nevaeh’s
music blasted throughout the whole venue, Nevaeh went around chatting with friends both old
and new and all of her family members, she was so thankful for all of the special people in her
life. The party eventually came to an end and Nevaeh made her way back home, still in awe of
her magical night. She layed on her bed closing her eyes and reflecting on her life, she couldn’t
believe it was real, it almost felt like a dream that she had no intention of waking up from. The
sound of an alarm clock blared in her ear as she awoke groggily from her sleep, she began to
realize the room she was in was not a large master bedroom but a small room that contained a
twin sized bed with posters all over the wall and several instruments in the corner of the room.
In a tired, raspy voice she said softly, “I knew it was too good to be true.” It was only a dream.
The dialogue feels realistic and I like the twist at the end! Good job!-Katryna Kerth
ReplyDeleteYour highly descriptive words and good use of imagery made the dream almost seem all too real. Nice.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how engaging this piece was, and I found myself very invested in what was about to happen. You did a great job in making your piece feel so realistic. Great job with your descriptions and imagery, as well as the big shock at the end. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteYour descriptive imagery and dialogue both provided for a strong emotional attachment between the reader and your characters. You pulled off a very difficult writing style. :)
ReplyDelete- Andrew Kim
Overall, a cute story that feels like it jumped off the page of a teen fiction book. I like how you made sure to implement the instruments in her room to show that it really is her dream to make music.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this piece! I loved the detail you put in making the dream feel so real for Nevaeh and the reader! Great work!
ReplyDelete-Samantha Tabula
Great story telling that kept me interested in what was going to happen after each sentence and helped me envision the scene - christian o
ReplyDeleteWOW! Talk about a twist ending! I really like the dialog! Very realistic!
ReplyDeleteThere were so many details, so the dream felt very immersive as if it wasn't even a dream at all! The mansion, interview, and party could easily be pictured in my mind, so good job! :D
ReplyDeleteThis was so well written! I love how you didn't over-glamorize the celebrity lifestyle. I definitely didn't expect that ending! -Destiny Okonkwo
ReplyDeleteI really liked the plot twist in the end, I thought the whole thing was real! Nonetheless, your use of imagery made it feel as if I was there with Nevaeh, and all the emotions that she was feeling made the story even better. Over all, you did such a good job and I love it.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how descriptive your story was, the imagery truly made me feel as a reader as if I could see the story itself! All the details you included in your story made it fun and exciting to read and the ending really was a surprising twist, but that is what good writing is all about. Great job, Monica!
ReplyDeleteThis piece felt realistic because of the imagery and the dialogue used. The ending caught me off guard and thats what really made me enjoy it.
ReplyDeleteNice story! Your story easily described the life of a celebrity which caught my attention! It was interesting to follow the flow of the story!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this story! Your use of imagery made the story very fantastic. I also very much like the story idea and the fact that none of it had actually happened was great. Amazing Job Monica!
ReplyDelete- Adalynn Schafer
I really loved how descriptive you were and how realistic you made it seem, which made the ending a total shock. Overall, I really liked the story and your characters. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI loved how descriptive your story was and how realistic it seemed, which made the ending more shocking. Overall I loved your story and your characters. Great job!
ReplyDelete-Alexis Rosenzweig
Your imagery and dialouge used throughout the piece was phenomenal. The twist ending was great! - Jeovany Ventura
ReplyDeleteThis story captured my attention from the very beginning, I wasn't until the very end that I realized how the title fit into the story. Every small detail tied everything together to give the story such a realistic feel that one could hardly doubt that it wasn't just another day in the life of Nevaeh. This was a great story!
ReplyDeleteMonica, this piece was amazing. Your use of diction throughout the piece's entirety was perfect, and the use of real life examples that people could relate to, such as LA traffic, was perfect as well. Awesome Job! -Trenton Robles
ReplyDeleteFrom start to finish, this was a intriguing piece. It was definitely something the reader can see in their mind, especially when it mentions things that we know or see often. It was written to sound extremely realistic, making the end so much more interesting. Excellent work!
ReplyDeleteThe irony of the title, being how dreams are usually these huge important things and placing their importance as "only" dreams shows the perspective you're coming from. Alongside the imagery, like the oddly familiar california king sized bed, I enjoyed this piece.
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