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Wednesday, April 6, 2016

The Woman in White--Damian


          Sun-bleached skin, light complexion, large rear - almost everything you could ask for in a woman. I remember the first day I laid my eyes on her. The sun glistened on my skin, sweat rolled down the side of my cheek, and all I can remember was being mesmerized by her beauty. Before approaching her, I took a step back to admire the entirety of her beauty - every single one of her features. Her curvatures, the way her body glistened in the light, even the subtle hum of her voice turned me on. From that moment on, I knew I wanted her and only her. I dreamt of her every single night. Each day I became more and more infatuated with the idea of her and I together. I could almost feel her smooth skin rubbing up against mine. I longed to run my hands up against her body. I felt the urge to shower her constantly with admiration and lavish things. I needed to show her off to the world and make everyone envious of her everlasting beauty. Then one day my dream came true. Our love for each other had finally come to fruition, and our love ultimately prevailed.
            I still remember our first date together; the day we went to the mountains with our good friend, Alan Viernes, also known as Mister Friday. While a majority of the experience involved Mister Friday attempting to whisk me away from my love, to my reluctance, every moment with my white lady travelling up and down the mountain was greeted with absolute bliss. I still remember the way she looked that day; her beautiful white skin clashing against the rays of the sun, and her gray eyes glistened with the beauty that only she possessed. Her skin was fairer and glowed brighter than the freshly fallen snow itself. Her beautiful humming kept me hypnotized; every second that passed with her, I couldn’t help but fall more in love. This was a different type of love, the kind of love that was extremely rare (ask my friend Adam Burgos about his own struggles in his blog submission entitled “The Time I Got Curved” on Mrs. Cogswell’s blog) and even harder to keep. From this day forward, I knew that in order to keep our relationship going and stable, I had to treat her with the utmost respect and love that most married couples needed.
Over the next several months I lavished her with countless gifts. From new makeup, to new speakers, and even with a wardrobe upgrade. On our one and a half year anniversary, I took her to Griffith Park to see the beautiful stars, but she was still more beautiful than every twinkle and glimmer. Over the past two years, she’s been a huge part of my life and I would have it no other way. She’s helped me through the best times and the worst. This is an ode to the most beautiful, classiest, smartest woman in white, my 2013 Scion FRS.

           

61 comments:

  1. If I could type the laughing, crying emoji, I would. This piece definitely has a great plot twist at the end. I was not expecting that AT ALL. I was sitting here, reading, and felt like I was invading on some private love story, and then bamb. Boy was I wrong. Nice job!

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  2. If I could type the laughing, crying emoji, I would. This piece definitely has a great plot twist at the end. I was not expecting that AT ALL. I was sitting here, reading, and felt like I was invading on some private love story, and then bamb. Boy was I wrong. Nice job!

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  3. This is honestly so cute! I love the details and I could feel the emotion in this, it is super sweet and well written. It's a great insight into a perspective of love and relationships.

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  4. I can see her now, purring as you slowly turn her on. The way she shivers to life when you touch her. Great job! Loved it man I was really surprised at the end but then it made so much more sense. (I hope those new speakers included a sub and if you haven't already get a good catback exhaust to really make her purrr) -Luke R.

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  5. Loved how entertaining this piece was! Great job!
    -Marissa Putrick

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  6. The details you use in this just makes her sound so enchanting. It is very well written with the right amount of emotion. Simple and sweet.

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  7. Ah, the woman who has saved many a man walking home. I have had the pleasure of meeting and being inside the woman in white, and she definitely leaves a lasting impression. There's a movie adaptation of this story coming out, and it's said to rival Fifty Shades.

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  8. I'm so dead!! I was like well damn who knew Damian was falling so hard for his girl. You had me fooled to a point where I almost feel like I should be offended. That was an amazing read with an even better ending!!v Honestly my all time favorite for these blog posts. Great job!!

    -Reymie Morris

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  9. While reading this I pictured the perfect woman, i think that itself speaks for itself on how well your choice of words was.

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  10. At first I felt like I had walked in on a romantic moment or something... The emotions and vivid descriptions you used really adds to the effect. The end was definitely something I was not expecting, I was literally laughing like a seal. Nice work.
    -Oyinda Akinnusi

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  11. This was so adorable; I literally want to cry. I can feel the affectionate connection that the speaker holds with the woman in white; it is truly enchanting. The diction you utilized was a great support to this intimate relationship. Good Job!

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  12. I loved this :). Your descriptive writing and comparisons did a very good job at masking the fact that you weren't actually talking about a woman which made the ending very surprising. Great job!

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  13. I was starting to feel like I needed my parent's permission to read this piece, thank god for that ending tho.

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  14. I thought it was going to be some fifty shades of grey type story and had me interested. but the plot twist gave a huge let down. but I was laughing so nice "love story" HAhAh

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  15. I loved the detail and intimate description that you used in this piece. It added to the romantic mood and emotion, only to twist it all around in the end. Very clever and super cute, I enjoyed every part of it. Awesome Job! - Aileen Munoz

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  16. Yes!!!!!!!!! I love the ending. Great job with such vivid imagery and personification. I truly feta this was just another love story between PEOPLE, but the twist of it being a car was so unexpectedly perfect. I laughed so hard. Well written.

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  17. I liked all the vivid details it really made me think that you were talking about a girl you were in love with. I definitely was not expecting that ending, it was a good plot twist. Nice job!
    -Kathlyn Juarez

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  18. I love all of the imagery used and I felt like I was the third wheel stepping into your love story, but the way you described her, or so I thought it was a her, was so elegant and sweet. Then I read the last line and was never expecting that plot twist! Very funny ending to an otherwise serious and romantic piece! Good job!
    -Chloe Hopkins

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  19. I'm noticing a fascination with her skin. I appreciate the allusion to Adam's piece.
    Thank you for your submission

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  20. LOL! You had me intrigued about who this girl was and then I got to to the end and almost died laughing. Your use of imagery and attention to detail was great! Good job!
    -karyna g

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  21. This was such a great piece! I liked the descriptions and how it mocks relationships demonstrating that a relationship with an object could be just as vivid and affectionate as one with an actual person.

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  22. I am truly a sucker for romance stories and this was so cute and funny at the same time it was incredible so great job on expressing it so well! Every word choice made the piece what it truly was and gave me a true sense of what was going on.
    -Meghan Ustrell

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  23. Ohh gosh, what did I just read!?! In all honesty, this has got to be the cutest love story I've read in a long time. Your vivid description of this perfect being in your eyes made me want to keep reading to find out who this mystery woman was....and then I got to the end. Job well done!
    -Pavia Omolewa

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  24. this piece kept me hooked! So much imagery.

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  25. I thought wow, this is such a great guy I wonder who his girlfriend is. I feel played but good job. You really caught my emotions.

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  26. That was a really nice story

    Darrell Mcdowell

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  27. The detail applied to this piece was beyond lovely. Great twist to the end.

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  28. The imagery all throughout took me into your connection and I felt the emotions you were feeling, great job!
    -Sienna Carbajal

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  29. This was so great. I started reading it and was like "ohhhh" but you totally surprised me. Totally loved how you mentioned how your 'woman' had helped you get through so much, it added a nice level to the piece.

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  30. This was such a great story! It was very entertaining and I enjoyed reading it very much!

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  31. The first line about her "huge rear" had me rolling. Not gonna lie, the writing was so descriptive and had such a seductive tone, I was a little turned on (sorry Solano). But anyway, super great plot twist, and nice flow throughout!

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  32. I was really confused as to why you described her as basically just really super white and it turning out to be a car made a lot more sense and made it hilarious.

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  33. oh my gosh, once i finished it i decided to reread the passage and the "large rear" part in line one had me dying. good job damian. i like your car too, especially the miniature version you have inside of it as well

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  34. I really liked how you went into detail when describing the girl and good job on using imagery.
    -Celeste Martinez

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  35. Wow that was some real good imagery and detail! I'm pretty shocked that I was fooled all the way to the end, but I love a good plot twist, I really thought you were talking about a girl lol, good job! - Allyssa F.

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  36. At first I was shocked this was even allowed to be posted, it made me feel uncomfortable. But then when I finished reading it I couldn't stop laughing! Great job with all the Imagery. Very well written piece!

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  37. This is the first blog in a while that I've read in it's entirety. I was so shocked to see that the extensive analysis and description of your car. Although in hindsight, perhaps I shouldn't have been so shocked... after all, you did say light complexion and curves in the same sentence.

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  38. LOL I definitely enjoyed the plot twist. It was very unexpected. Nice use of imagery and detail to make the audience think you were writing about something completely different.

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  39. This is the best thing EVER!!!!!! I was so weirded out by this at first, but it turned out so great and hilarious! Great job!

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  40. i love the effort and detail you put into this to make us believe you were talking about a girl, and the plot twist was so unexpected. one of the funniest posts I've read lol!

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  41. Interesting story, I really how you describe her. This is off topic but I drive FRS too :)

    -Sirikanya Boonyanant

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  42. Rachel spoiled the surprise for me because she told me about it before the blog submissions were published. But either way it was great and I loved the sensuality of it. It causes the reader to become uncomfortable as if they're intruding on private moment. That level of reader discomfort leads to the perfect atmosphere for a good plot twist.

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  43. I think a gift of a true writer is to be able to clearly idealize their inner thoughts and you did so with this piece

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  44. Very well written down to every detail cutest love story good job

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  45. Hilarious description of your 'love'! Imagery is very vivid and the description that you give the car shows that you really do love it. Great Job Damian!

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  46. I was laughing the whole time such a great piece you made my night -Bobby

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  47. Ya you can tell this is a guy thing the way you wrote it. It was entertaining, funny, and sweet and you really have a good style. Nice work

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  48. Great attention to detail, I could really feel the love you have for your car.

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  49. This piece definitely had a great plot twist at the end of it loved it good job.
    -Ashley Lowman

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  50. I love your use of imagery and how it misled the audience to think it was about a girl, when in the end it was about your car! Super funny, and very lighthearted, great job!

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  51. "She thought the view was pretty, but I thought she was prettier." That's basically how your trip to the Griffith was!
    Jeez, I walk past your car every morning at school and I literally take time to admire it. I guess it does deserve a blog post. I think you did a wonderful, very comical, and oddly romantic job at giving your car such a elegant persona. You and your lady car deserve great recognition, good job!
    - Sam Nugroho

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  52. Wow. The beginning actually had me believing that this was a girl, and i just sat here thinking he must really love her using all of these beautiful details, but i mean at least the love is still there but for your car? :D

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  53. Very interning! Great use of detail which enhanced the imagery.

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  54. Great job on your imagery nd description of everything

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  55. When I saw your title and then your name I knew it was going to be about your car. Very good use of imagery and attention to detail!

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  56. Very sweet and intimate, your detailed use of diction helped to create the image of the woman!

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  57. I remember you describing your blog while we were at In-N-Out, and I'm glad that you were able to successfully shock your audience with that twist!

    -B Lim

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  58. The imagery through the whole piece was really well done. What a twist. keep up the good work :D

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  59. Very awesome piece! I love my car to death so this amused me to no end haha! I love my "bae!"

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  60. great detail. found this piece humorous as you talk about your good friends Alan and Adam aka mister friday and the dude that sadly got curved

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  61. This was very nice to read and I stayed entertained till the end of the story. I liked reading this.Good job

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