INT. BATHROOM - NIGHT
SAVANNAH, a young 15-16 year old beautiful African-American
girl wearing big hoop earrings and a blue sparkling dress stands in front of a
mirror putting on makeup while staring at her reflection.
SAVANNAH Ok Savannah. You can do this. You can go through
with this. I know you can. You like David now. You don't want Justin anymore.
You must break up with him. Yeah you gotta do it girl. No matter what happens
you gotta do it. But what if I can't? What if I can't do it? Oh gosh. I have
to. Oh no I can't. What will others say? What will my friends think? We have
been together for almost a year. Everyone in the school loves us. We're like
the number one couple. It doesn't matter. It doesn't matter. I have to break up
with him.
INT. BATHROOM - NIGHT
JUSTIN, a young 15-16 year old handsome African-American boy
wearing a black tuxedo looks in to the mirror when washing his hands.
JUSTIN I have to do this. I knew Jessica before Savannah and
before I ever moved to Anaheim. I'm now back. I'm back to my previous life that
I always wanted back. I'm back at Etiwanda in Fontana. My hometown. My high
school. Everyone's so nice in welcoming me back. I'm back on the football team
and I'm playing varsity. I would have never made it with being back here. There
is no need for me to continue this relationship with Savannah. I just can't. I
can't do it anymore. It was pretty nice for our friends at Savanna High to
throw us a party congratulating us on our one year anniversary together but I
don't think I can continue to be with her now. That I have everything I wanted.
I have to break up with her.
INT. CAR - NIGHT
DAVID, a white 15-16 year old boy wearing a dress shirt
drives while holding Savannah's hand. She stares out the window.
INT. SCHOOL HALLWAY - NIGHT
Justin walks out the boy’s bathroom. Waiting for him is
JESSICA, a young 15-16 year old Mexican girl wearing a red and pink skirt.
JESSICA Wow you took a while.
JUSTIN Yeah sorry.
EXT. SCHOOL PARKING LOT - NIGHT
Savannah and David get out of the car and walk towards the
school's entrance.
INT. SCHOOL HALLWAY - NIGHT
David opens the glass door for Savannah and she walks
through. He goes in after her and the door closes behind them. They see Jessica
and Justin and walk towards them.
JUSTIN Well you guys have a good time.
JESSICA Yeah do what you have to.
David and Jessica walk towards the gym door, open it and
walk through.
JUSTIN Well hey Savannah. How was your ride?
SAVANNAH It was good. How was yours all the way from
Fontana?
JUSTIN It was alright.
SAVANNAH You ready to walk in?
JUSTIN Oh yeah. Yeah. Let’s go.
Justin and Savannah walk towards the gym door, open it and
walk inside the gym.
INT. GYM - NIGHT (CONTINIOUS ACTION)
Suddenly, the lights come on and the music starts playing.
People stare at Savannah and Justin walking down the center of the gym floor.
Numerous tables covered in white cloth are on both sides of the gym filled with
glasses and plates of food. FRANK, a young 15-16 year old white and Mexican boy
stands wearing a gray suit on the other side of the gym on a platform.
FRANK Welcome the man and woman of the evening. Justin
Wilson and Savannah Hudson.
Everyone claps.
FRANK We are here tonight to celebrate a great achievement.
They have been together for one year and have stuck through thick and thin. It
was a miracle that brought them together and it would take another one to break
them apart.
They stare sorrowful at one another.
FRANK Let’s give a toast to them. To Justin and Savannah.
People raise their glasses.
FRANK Any words from the couple that they would like to say
tonight?
JUSTIN Yeah.
Justin and Savannah walk up to the platform and takes the
mic.
JUSTIN Thank you. Thank you so much guys for doing this for
us. My friends at Etiwanda and our friends at Savanna to come together and
throw a great party for us. That wonderful but you didn't have to. I mean we're
only in high school. And that we're not the most important people in the
school. And..
Everyone starts murmuring.
FRANK What do you mean Justin?
JUSTIN Uhh. I just don't feel like I..
He looks at the crowd, then at David, Jessica, and finally Savannah's
eyes. She has a worried look on her face. Justin then walks off the platform
and stands in the center of the gym.
JUSTIN I can't do it. I just can't. The truth is I came here
today planning to break up with Savannah.
Everyone is shocked and gasps.
JUSTIN I know. I know. Once I moved back to Fontana this
year, I felt I was back home. I was back in the place where I belonged. I had
everything I needed again. I didn't need to make new friends. I had my old life
back. I didn't need to fit in. I was back with my family. I had it all. I had
my old girlfriend back too. When I first moved to Anaheim and went to Savanna
High last year for mom's work, I hated it. I had to change myself. I had to be
the new person in school. But now I realize why I came to Savanna High in the
first place. I now know why I had to move. I had to get out of my comfort zone.
I had to adapt and meet new people. I had to make new friends. But most of all
I had to meet Savannah.
Savannah smiles.
JUSTIN I don't know why I was distracted, why I was being
stupid, why I forgetting about the precious thing I already had. Savannah, she
is my one and only. She is the apple of my eye. My lovely bae and my beautiful
girl. She is the girl I have being wanting and waiting all my life for. The
girl that God designed specifically for me. She is my hope, my passion and my
aspirations. She pushes me to become a better person, a better me each and
every day. She's beautiful, smart, and funny. She is everything anyone could
every want and I'm glad to have her in my life. She loves me and I love her
with all of my heart and will never ever leave her again for anyone or anything
in this world or the next.
Savannah runs down the platform towards Justin and hugs him.
SAVANNAH I love you.
JUSTIN I love you too.
Everyone claps and Jessica and David walks out of the gym.
Slow music plays and Justin and Savannah dance with each other. Justin's phone
rings. He takes it out of his pocket.
JUSTIN It’s my mom. I have to answer it.
He answers it and puts the phone to his ear.
JUSTIN Hey Mom.
MOM Hey Justin. You at school. You safe.
JUSTIN Yeah. Yeah. I'm ok.
MOM Ok good. Are you sitting down right now?
JUSTIN No. Why?
MOM Well I got some good news. My job is heading back to
Anaheim so that means we can move back.
JUSTIN Oh my gosh. That's good news. Oh man. Thank God. Oh
I'll call you back.
MOM Ok bye.
JUSTIN Bye.
He puts his phone back in his pocket.
SAVANNAH What is it?
JUSTIN I'm coming back to Anaheim.
SAVANNAH What you mean?
JUSTIN My mom's work is moving back to Anaheim which means
we're moving back here.
SAVANNAH Wow. That’s amazing. That's great. I'm so glad I
have you back.
JUSTIN Me too. Me too.
FADE OUT:
I liked how to was in dialogue form and how the names are ones we can relate to. Although I'm not going to lie but I got a little bit confused and I did not understand the moral of the story.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed how in such little lines you can grasp the type of person Justin and Savannah are. I am glad that it ended off happily instead of tragically. Good job Kevin!
ReplyDeleteWe needed more bloodshed in your story!!! Just Kidding. Nice story about breaking out of your comfort zone.
ReplyDeletePretty impressive job Kevin;to write an entire dialogue with emotions and vivid feeling isn't easy. Great job I was really interested to see how it all ended.
ReplyDelete-Nahome Woldearegay
This short play is adorable and sweet. I appreciate the straightforward approach that you took. There is no tragedy or plot twists or excessive embellishment - it is just a simple story of enduring love. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece.
ReplyDeleteI liked the story in itself overall I enjoyed reading it, nice job Kevin
ReplyDeleteJESSICA Wow you took a while.
ReplyDeleteJUSTIN Yeah sorry.
These lines really stuck with me throughout the entire piece Kevin. The simplicity of Justin's statement, the absolute desperation it conveys through its terseness, and the uncomfortable atmosphere it emphasizes really draw the reader into Justin's mind. The brevity and simplicity of the main characters' emotions, coupled with the inclusion of race as a defining characteristic for even the most minor of characters, says something about the shallow state of love today. Or perhaps, the state of adolescent love since the dawn of time. Truly insightful.
-Christopher Trevino
I really liked the way you used dialogue, it's very refreshing. I enjoyed the ending and especially how you presented the characters.
ReplyDelete-Jeremiah Eugenio
I enjoyed the detail and format that really brought out the significance in the piece.
ReplyDeleteThis was cute, I was happy the ending left everyone content, it sweet and I enjoyed reading it, Good job!!
ReplyDeleteDarn, Kevin! That was a sorta rough story, but overall, it's a very reflective and mature perspective of how we should treat one-another.
ReplyDeleteDarn, Kevin! That was a sorta rough story, but overall, it's a very reflective and mature perspective of how we should treat one-another.
ReplyDelete-B Lim