Have
you ever wondered or even thought of going back to the past and try fixing your
mistakes? We all have that one time in our lives where we just wished it didn’t
happened. No matter what it is faults, embarrassments, accidents, and things we
have said and actions et cetera. Well maybe those things happened for a reason.
Think about it. Let me ask you this. Whats your definition of love? Have you
ever experienced love? Love could mean so many different things from many
people. Was it for real love at first sight? Because if you do love someone so much even if
you’re mad at them you can’t really hold a grudge to stay angry at that person.
It could be anyone honestly, your parents, family members, best friends,
girlfriends and boyfriends. Nevertheless what you’re dealing with at the moment
you can’t stay away from a difficult situation. If you’re just going to run
away from them it won’t help. If you’re not going to face it, nothing can be
free and done. Now, Time is gold it flies by so fast anything could change. As
this school year ends I’m kind of sad it is to be honest and I’ve met so many
amazing people this year they all mean so much to me. They’ve made this year
full of laughter and smiles. I also can’t wait for summer because I have high
expectations. Relaxing to California weather is always nice. So treasure the
moments where everything is enjoyable, because why not, no one’s stopping you.
“Do you” noting really lasts forever.
Lots of things are temporary. Every year is a new chapter of our lives. Friends
could come and go, bringing someone back in your life, and or even loosing
someone. And every closed door another one always opens. The things we have done today will reflect
tomorrows. Now you’re probably reading this asking “what’s the purpose?” People
go through so much to get what they want. They’ll do possibly everything to get
what they need. I think we should all be satisfied of what we have so far. We
should all be grateful for the things we have around us right now. You want something? Set a goal for it. And
challenge yourself to become better. If
you’re battling with life, thinking everything is bad, you’re not feeling good
emotionally and physically. That fine because no life is perfect. Everybody
goes through tough times we’ll learn from other people and our errors. Don’t
over think about things too much because everything will be alright you’ll be
okay. As an individual we have to stay strong, trust me you’re not the only one
around the world with seven billion people living who’s been through unbearable
circumstances. Live life to its fullest, be happy and good luck to your future
self! J
This piece is literally the definition of amazing. I like how much detail you go in when you are describing love and you are completely right what you do today reflects on tomorrow .Great Job
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ReplyDeleteThis was beautiful. It's also something that more people need to remember from time to time. You did a wonderful job writing about a topic that seems ordinary but is anything but. Great job!
ReplyDeleteGood advice, how like how you started off with the questioning of love.
ReplyDeleteGood advice, things are rarely as bad as we think, and there is always someone who has it worse. We should live as if there is no tomorrow and yet make plans for our future.
ReplyDeleteI like your title for this piece because it allows for the reader to have his/her own interpretation of what the actual contents this submission contains. Interesting concepts to be discussing at such an early age. Stay curious :)
ReplyDeleteVery well written piece, and on such an inspiring/interesting topic. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat advice!! I always wish I could go back and undo something embarrassing or hurtful but life does happen and we move on. Your piece is truly amazing because you reassure your readers that everything will be okay, and that is something I really needed to hear right now. Great job on your writing.
ReplyDeleteFrancesca, this piece was so moving, motivating, but also gives us a new perspective and teaches us a lesson or two. Amazing! Keep it up girl! :)
ReplyDeleteI really liked reading this piece because I can relate to almost everything you said. The advice you have for others to remain strong no matter what the circumstances are gives me that feeling of empowerment because reading this piece alone sounded philosophical and its something that I totally agree with you 10000%. Good job!
ReplyDelete- Tino
I love how you make your work so easily connected to by the readers. I think your way of using modern ideas and examples to help get the overall abstract idea of acceptance and no regrets is a great technique. I felt really spoken to by your work and I commend you for it! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is literally the sweetest thing I've ever read! Lol! It's such a positive piece and I feel like everything you said was truly heartfelt! I agree and feel that we should be grateful for what we have! Great Job!
ReplyDelete-Lauren Waitman
Wow, I like your optimism of life, coming from a freshman that is beginning their high school years. Time does fly by really really fast, you won't even know where those years went. Amazing job, I liked how you organized and wrote your piece. Very good.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece, you explained your opinion in a way that everyone can relate to.
ReplyDeleteGreat advice starting the the questioning of love.
ReplyDeleteThe detail was amazing, this was great advice
ReplyDeleteKeeping this in mind could probably help so many people.
ReplyDeleteit has a beautiful message and you sum it up all so well i really loved and enjoyed reading your piece love keep it up.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this, I feel like you did a good job hooking all of the readers. Especially with your title. Great job Francesca :)
ReplyDeleteThis was so great! It gives such a great reminder and message to everyone. Amazing job!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your piece because you didn't stick to one general topic, but rather flowed from one idea to another as the came to you. You have a great mindset and positive outlook on life, and you've developed this only as a freshmen. It took me very long to develop a similar mindset, that I'm still working on. I enjoyed the several messages in your work, particularly where you are talking about being grateful for what we already have. Great job!
ReplyDeleteVery good story! I liked how you left the title for us to decide how the story was going to be. Your use of vocabulary really made it interesting to read.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Delaney and how the title was good bc of how you can interpret it over all it is a good story and really good details
ReplyDeleteAwh! I really like your creative title Francesca! I loved how I can see the optimism throughout your piece. It motivates me to enjoy life and make the best of it! Great job. (:
ReplyDeleteI agree with you. There are some times that I wish that I can go back and just fix my mistakes and make me feel more better about my past. But we sometimes that failure will happen and we learn and we are more successful. Nice job!!
ReplyDeleteLoved your story. It had a great message we should all take to mind. Keep up the good work :)
ReplyDeleteGreat topic I enjoyed every paragraph and wanting me to continue reading good job (:
ReplyDelete-Ian Mendoza
This story was awesome, I loved your message! Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteJordan Battle
Thank you for the advice, I really like your perspective on the end of the year!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was great!! the message shared was amazing loved it great job!! ~Isabella Torres
ReplyDeleteI loved your story it was great advice
ReplyDelete-Diamend De Silva
The word choice and describing is excellent. Overall, great job.
ReplyDelete- Jerico M. G. Franco
Very inspiring message everyone regrets things and wants to go back and fix it but you always have to remember everything happens for a reason. great job though (:
ReplyDeleteThis is very motivational and I think at a time like this, where this school year is coming to an end among other things, this is exactly what people need to hear right now. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteThis story has a very good message make me keep reading very interesting great job!
ReplyDeleteI really got lost in this story, in a good way. It just made me think and every aspect was so true. You did great in organizing it and it sounded really natural.
ReplyDeleteI love this piece! very relate-able on many levels and I like how title is up for anyone to interpret. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis piece was great and very moving.Good job!
ReplyDeleteI think this was a very good story and you had us title it our self self. Great Job !
ReplyDeleteYour story had a great message! i can totally relate to the message your trying to put out there!!!!
ReplyDeleteNicely written! The flow of the sentences was really great and easy to read, almost as if getting advice from a friend. Good job!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I want to say that I appreciate hoe honest and encouraging this message is. The thoughts are so beautiful that if they were portrayed with a structure and flow would be marvelous. I applaud you for taking not only the time but effort as can be seen to embrace your vulnerability and use it as a tool for power. Beautiful piece that can transcend to a grand audience. -Natalie Cruz
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I want to say that I appreciate hoe honest and encouraging this message is. The thoughts are so beautiful that if they were portrayed with a structure and flow would be marvelous. I applaud you for taking not only the time but effort as can be seen to embrace your vulnerability and use it as a tool for power. Beautiful piece that can transcend to a grand audience. -Natalie Cruz
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I have to tell you I appreciate how honest and encouraging this is. Truly such beautiful thoughts that if they were portrayed with a structure would be marvelous. I applaud you not for only taking the time but effort as can be seen to embrace your vulnerability and use it as a tool of power. Loved this piece, errors occurred here and there but overall didn't distract me form the reading. -Natalie Cruz
ReplyDeleteYes, I do wish I can go to the past and fix all my mistakes even the tiny ones. I can't though because mistakes are what makes us human and we need to own up to them to make us better individuals. I think your message is well needed for people to hear or read. It helped me to relax today because I've been stressing out. When in reality there's no reason to hold a grudge on a bad day everyone gets one. Wonderful piece and message! Amazing job!
ReplyDeleteThis was really nice. I could definitely relate. I think most everyone could relate to this. You basically told the audience to be optimistic and do what you love. I thought that was really cool.
ReplyDeleteJust what I needed to hear, thanks.
ReplyDeleteAlthough you didnt stick to a topic your ideas were clear. The open interpretation left to the reader was a great touch.
ReplyDeleteThis mind set or way to think is very underestimated or not appreciated. Just by keeping a positive attitude, you can brighten every ones day around you. Always be positive and know that you aren't alone. The message you wrote about is very true and should be held close, because it has the power to save lives and accomplish the impossible.
ReplyDeleteIf I could compress all of the useful advice I have for high school into one writing piece, it would be this. I think it's easy to remember these things, but a little challenging to apply them. I completely agree with you, appreciation is a value that will make a world of difference in your life. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI loved this piece and your detail was amazing. Good read.
ReplyDeleteI loved this because of how positive you were. You give advice but you are also showing you do not know everything because you still question life. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis felt a bit like a stream of consciousness piece; it was interesting. I applaud your courage in sharing such personal ideas and your deft ability to cover such a broad range of topics.
ReplyDeleteYou put so much detail into this story, great job!
ReplyDeletegreat piece keep up the good work and i also agree.
ReplyDeleteFrancesca, I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was a very motivating and uplifting experience. I like how you directly question the reader, it makes it feel as if you're giving us a little pep talk. Great job!
ReplyDeleteAwesome job! What a great piece for all of us to read as we approach many ends to many things. Your calls to action inspired me and made me feel excited to not only start a new life, but to also finish strong with this one. Way to end this year with something we all need to hear!
ReplyDeleteI'll keep your ideas in mind very well done
ReplyDeleteI like your story. It makes perfect sense because any type of tragedy could happen at any minute and if your life ends then you want people to miss you and not just fell bad because your gone, but because they enjoyed your company
ReplyDelete-Corbin Cagle
this is a great look on life and I agree that people should enjoy the better moments in life instead of focusing so much on what they cant change. good job.
ReplyDeletegood piece, I enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDelete-garrett lachase
Wow I love this piece because it's a great message to us and this helps others. I love the details to the piece and how you hooked us to keep on reading. Great job!!!
ReplyDeleteIf i had to title your piece I would title it "The Wonderful Lessons of LIfe." I am amazed that you being so young truly understand the value of the words that you said. Man freshmen are immature and don't fully grasp concepts but in this case you do. You provided your readers with so much great advice that is absolutely amazing. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteThis story has a greeaaattt message and very motivational :)
ReplyDeleteThis has a greeaaattt message to it and it is very motivational :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that as a freshman you are noticeably empathetic, caring, and you sound like you have a very positive attitude about life, keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteWow, I really enjoy reading this. It's really amazing to see your head up at such a young age. I really do love this piece.
ReplyDeletewhat a greta way to look at things. ifeel like i always tell people the same thing but can never follow it myself.
ReplyDeleteThis was really heartwarming and empowering especially to all the seniors graduating and venturing off to college. Nice use of rhetorical questions. They got me thinking about life, love and relationship. Thank you for sharing your work.
ReplyDeleteThis was a really great outlook on life as a whole! I totally agree that we should always be grateful and never take what we have for granted. Very well written.
ReplyDeleteFrancesca, I enjoyed this because it was like a message, it made me think. good job:)
ReplyDeletethis was a great piece very detailed and had me tuck to the screen the whole time
ReplyDeleteVery inspiring piece to everyone. In your senior year you'll be reading books about some topics you brought up...just saying
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