Bad Isn’t Always Bad
I am 3 years
old. I have 2 older brothers sitting around me and my 1-year-old sister in my
lap. I am watching Television but feel
empty. I look around the room and wonder where my mom and dad are. I do not see
them anywhere. I begin to call for them but as I do my older brother tells me
to be quiet and that they would be home soon. I sit and it feels like forever
when finally a lady in green walks in and behind them my crying mother and
father. I see policemen and my mom tells me to hide. I run with my little
sister into my room and hide where only a little child would, under the bed. It
is a minute or so when I see the shoes of the lady in green she bends down,
looks at my little sister and then takes her. I am crying. I am scared. I run.
The woman in green leaves the room and when she does I look out the window. I
am looking for safety but all I see is my mom and dad in a cop car. Tears rush down my face as I start yelling.
MOM. MOM. She cant hear me and suddenly I feel darkness. A man comes into the
room and tells me its time to go. I walk with him and he puts me in the car and
tells me he is going to find somewhere nice for me to stay. I worry about my
brothers and sister and will I be with them? It is two years later and I cannot
remember what happened between then and now. But I live with one brother and
one sister. My older brother is separated and I have a new younger sister that
I do not live with. I have dreams or nightmares about what has happened to me
and I worry. We fast forward and I am in 8th grade. I wonder where
my parents are as every day I am asked about my family and I know not whether
to call them mom or dad or stepparents or foster parents. I still replay that
day in my head and still have dreams. Fast forward once more to junior year. I
am curious and want to know where my mom and dad are. I am on face book and I
am searching. I find her (my mom) and I message her. Big mistake. She messages
back this; “You look so much like your father…it disgusts me.” That was the last time I talked to her, I
immediately deleted her and moved on. I am now a senior with a dad on his
deathbed from drugs and a mom on drugs. But I now have a real father and a real
mother. And I am OK with it. I am still me. I am still strong. I am still
successful. I am ME.
My favorite story, amazing how strong you have been and stayed.
ReplyDeleteyeah its really amazing story.
DeleteWe all have a story to tell and a testimony to speak! You told your story and spoke your testimony. I remember you discussing this with me and it moved me because we all face challenges everyday but this specific challenge didn't break you . Reading your piece really just opened my mind even more especially because you experienced this so young. You have over come your obstacles and challenges and have became a strong, humble, and beautiful individual through this past situation and I love it !
ReplyDeleteI am so very glad that you liked my personal narrative I realize now that a story like mine can help someone. I was reluctant to write my story considering that it doesn't sound the way an AP student would write but i was told the only stories ever liked were the ones written the way the writer sounds. So Thank you For humbling me and being so kind.
DeleteSpeak Autumn!
DeleteReading this made me realize that everyone has a story that no one else knows. It is amazing that you've gone through so much and yet I always see a smile on your face. It is admirable that you have remained so strong and you have overcome so much to be where you are today. I loved this piece and the simple word choice made it so that I truly felt like you were telling this face to face. :)
ReplyDeletethat was an amazing story and i'm glad you shared it with everyone, i'm glad you've been so strong and cheerful to everyone you've met. Your laughter and courage is contagious, especially for one of the first writers, you have amazing courage and your narrative was fantastic! I hope you meet more people that bring positivity to your life! Amazing girl!
ReplyDeleteI am amazed at how you were able to overcome a challenge that happened to you at such a young age and still found happiness. This is such a beautiful piece I love how you told your story.
ReplyDeleteWe all have struggles, and we all have bad times. But the ones we face internally can be worst of all. Your strength--your amazing lifelong strength--is something that every one of us can learn from. No matter how much we feel it, we are never truly alone. This is a wonderful, incredibly moving story and I encourage you to keep telling it for as long as you live. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI want to Thank you for that encouragement and i am very glad that you liked my piece. I am actually planning to write a book so i hope people will be inspired. Thank you.
DeleteLoved the story. The beginning was mysterious and made me want to keep reading. I like how you managed to move on in the end of the story. This story proves that no matter the struggle, you must try to carry on.
ReplyDeleteI'm in awe of the way you can post your story, not everyone has that could of courage to show their deepest scars. I always say scars makes you who you are and I hope you never stop showing people who you really are.
ReplyDeleteThis was very moving. I'm glad that you were able to find happiness and strength even though you experienced this at a very young age. This was an amazing story. Nice Job.
ReplyDeleteReading this story almost made me cry, but it showed me how incredibly strong you are. I am amazed how you overcame such an obstacle and how you still have a smile on your face to this day. You have really moved me and inspired me through your story and its absolutely amazing. Incredible.
ReplyDeleteAt first, I thought you were just telling a fictional story. Around the part that you say you still worry and have dreams, I realized that you were telling your own life story. It was very poignantly put and flowed well. Thank you for sharing this, I wish you all the best.
ReplyDeleteVery touching story. Really sad to having to go through that, amazing story
ReplyDeleteI admire your courage for sharing. It was intense picturing myself in your shoes, the thoughts that you had as well as the feeling of being lost and fear. The simple diction makes it feel so genuine, as if you weren't bothering to make it sound fancy, just pure sharing of experience. Your work inspires and reminds people that the "bad" and "hopeless" will eventually be replaced by the "good" and "hopeful" or play a role in bringing either to their lives.
ReplyDeleteThe title of this piece is just another affirmation of how strong you are. The fact that you can keep a positive outlook on life despite struggles you've overcome is the definition of strength. The repetition of the "I am" statements at the end has to be my favorite part.
ReplyDeleteI am so relived that you liked the title! i didn't know what to put it as and when i finally came up with it i was worried! so Thank you!
DeleteThis is amazing, especially that you are courageous enough to tell your story. Thank you for sharing and definitely inspiring me. Instead of focusing on all the negatives you manage to go on.
ReplyDeleteWow, Makayla! To be honest, I thought this was a piece of fiction, but as I read on, I immediately knew it wasn't just something your imagination gave birth to—it was real, true, concrete. I love the simplicity you wrote it in; there was no elegance, no fabrication to the matter. It was as though you were telling the reader, "This is the truth. And there is no veiling it."
ReplyDeleteI applaud you for your work and for your strength. It takes a lot of courage to grow through all of that, but it takes even more courage to share it with the world.
At first I thought it was about a fiction girl who has a tough childhood. However, the more I read, the more I started to realize that it was nonfiction and it was about you. I am really sorry that you had to go like that.
ReplyDeleteWOW! I really really like this story. i was touched reading this. Thanks for sharing it with everyone and I'm very glad in the end your stronger and well. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job I really like your story and how you went though all that I am really sorry about what happened to you but I am very glad that you are strong and well :)
ReplyDeleteThe thing that distinguishes your story is the fact that it's yours. I highly applaud you for sharing such words with us, it's not always easy expressing personal thoughts and feelings with such a wide community. Your words obtain power. They obtain truth. They obtain such boldness due to the fact in which they are yours.
ReplyDeleteThe way your piece flows and connects together kept me reading and wondering what was going to happen next. Aside from that, it is nice to see that you are stronger than ever and can now openly express that and maybe inspire others to follow. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI'm utterely sorry for what happened to you. No one at any age would know how to deal with such a horrible scene, but it touched me. You, My friend, have a heart of gold. I know for a fact I would never have the strength to deal with it the way you did. This, is an inspiration to me. Im happy now that you have a loving mother and father. Best wishes(:
ReplyDelete- Bernadine
very inspirational, your story touched me. You are a very strong person and i am glad that you can overcome all that. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThe entire piece does a great job getting emotion from the reader. The reader really gets a sense of how the speaker handled the situation well and made the best of it.
ReplyDeleteEverybody has struggles in their life, because life isn't easy even though we wish it could be. Your story touched my heart and I can't imagine on how you handled yourself from the past years. Though you stayed strong which is hard for some people to do. Thank you for sharing this, I'm really impressed by your courage on explaining and expressing your life to everyone. It really made me think about my life and the people in it. I wish you the best in the years to come.
ReplyDeleteVery intense. The blunt diction and grammatical choices emphasize the fear and pain the girl feels impressively.
ReplyDeleteI'm going to be completely honest, once my eyes left the screen I felt tears beginning to puddle in my eyes. I visioned every sentence and felt every emotion. You're right, you are strong. You proved that by sharing. You're right, you are successful. Your writing demonstrated it. Great job, Makayla!
ReplyDeleteMakayla, I just want to say that you are such a strong individual because not only did you have to experience this at such a young age, but you were also taken away from your parents. After reading this, I was in complete utter disbelief because I had no idea you went through something so emotional at the time. I love how you wrote your story because I felt as if I were in your shoes because of the way you wrote this from your childhood point of view. I could also visualize the descriptions you provided throughout your story in my head and it makes me think of what would I do if I was put in this position. I am so sorry for you having to go through this, but I'm so glad to see you are happy with where you stand now and that's truly all that matters. I hope you remain the happiest you could be because you are a beautiful person inside and out. Major props to you for putting something so personal online, Makayla. (:
ReplyDeleteMakayla, this personal narrative was so breathtaking. You had me hooked throughout the story. I"m sorry that, that you had to go through struggles in life. I admire that you posted something personal on here. Loved the " I am still strong. I am still successful. I am still ME." part. Overall very astounding. :)
ReplyDeleteYou are very strong to go through what you have been through, i am very touched by this story, amazing work!!
ReplyDeleteThis inspired me in so many ways. One way is to always be strong. Good job , I enjoyed how you put so much detail into it ,and I'm glad you over came this.
ReplyDeleteThis story is great. It shows us insight on a different perspective most of us don't know about. This shows of a story people can overcome and it doesn't matter what has happened, but what you can do.
ReplyDeleteYou really brought out the emotion through the peice which is great, and when I read this my mouth would not close and I couldnt stop reading, I read this just about a thousand times and couldnt get tired of reading it
ReplyDeleteI like this story it is very relatable to what the modern teen may feel! these struggles are a great way to appeal to your reader I know it appealed to me! anyways good job !!!!!!
ReplyDeleteMakayla,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing this piece, you have a lot of courage as to tell us your story. I cannot imagine how hard it must have been for you and I truly sympathize with you. This piece showed me how much strength humanity possess and I want to commend you on a well thought out entry. I hope life treats you well and keep writing, you convey such deep emotions in your writing, which is truly advantageous.
this was a beautiful story I loved that u did all that for others and you had to experience and go through all that emotional stress and I loved the way you wrote the story I felt like I was there right next to you watching
ReplyDeleteReally sad and touching story ,just imaging someone having to go through that .good job !!! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is such a touching story, I'm tearing up. This was such a personal piece, and you are such a strong person to be sharing this. I love your ending, "And I am OK with it. I am still me. I am still strong. I am still successful. I am ME." I love how you incorporated what age you were, and how you manage to still be okay. This is amazing. I love it.
ReplyDeleteThe way you summed up your life story in a paragraph so gracefully is inspiring. You layed out a traumatizing and painful story and still came back from it with strength (something not everyone can do). I commend you for putting this up on our class blog and sharing it with everyone, not for sympathy but as a way for you too grow.
ReplyDeleteThis was so good and honestly my favorite
ReplyDeleteI had goosebumps through reading this. My eyes zoomed past this wanting to read more and more. This peace is deep and heartfelt. Amazing! You are strong. I could visualize the girl in my head as the story kept going and I only viewed her as becoming more independent before I read the end.
ReplyDeleteReading this entry had dug a hole in my heart and left it empty, I cannot imagine the struggle you must have had to go through during that time. I give you the utmost highest respect for being able to share something so personal online for the world to see.
ReplyDeleteMakayla, Your story is very touching. We all go through our personal struggles and things that we cannot control. Everything happens in our lives for a reason. And by the end of that personal Narrative I saw a woman that has risen from her struggles and is successful. You will go far in life and will be able to use your testimony one day to help others.
ReplyDeleteI feel it was a touching story and made it sad how she had to go through that struggle and still kept the positive attitude
ReplyDeleteI love the repetition of starting the sentences with "I." It brought a sense of childhood innocence to the piece. I got a real sense of numbness throughout which added to the introspective tone. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis story was outstanding!!!!! I almost felt like crying. Great job!!!
ReplyDeleteYour piece is great! I truly loved how it was very simply written but was still able to evoke such strong emotion. Awesome job on sharing such a personal experience and being so strong through it all!
ReplyDeletethat was truly beautiful. by the time I was finished reading, I was in tears and I was so heartbroken but to hear that everything turned out ok was amazing! Great work!
ReplyDeleteI admire your bravery in telling your story. Your words were powerful and filled with such emotion. Your piece reminded me that people often have hidden struggles. Thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteI was reading this out loud to myself and my voice started choking up. There is so much emotion put into this piece. This piece made me feel so many things : heartache, melancholy, fortunate. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThis was such a great piece! I admire how brave u were in this piece this was well written and I liked the ending also it had a positive attitude in it! Well done!
ReplyDeleteMakayla, this is such an amazing piece. You are such a strong and confident young lady for sharing this with all of us. My eyes were filled with tears when I finished reading this. I'm very heartbroken that you had to go through that. I am truly proud that even though that happened, you maintain to be a very strong, humble, and radiant person that keeps a smile on every single day. Keep your head held high and have faith in everything you do. :)
ReplyDeleteI first thought this was a fictonal piece and then I took a glance at the other comments. This vivid work of art is inspirational and heartfelt. I don't have an experience similar to yous but with your story, you can outreach to others. This is a blessing.
ReplyDeleteYour story is very heart-felt and I can't explain on how I feel about the struggles that the speaker went through.
ReplyDeleteI respect you for telling your story because not many people are brave enough to. This reminded me that even though things can get really bad they can also become really good.
ReplyDeleteamazed by you sharing that experience very emotional and inspirational at the end
ReplyDeletesimple, strong, emotional. great piece!
ReplyDeleteYour story was beautiful with the repetition of the word I every sentence. Your story was beautiful, heartbreaking, and emotional. I am glad you have grown up to be a bright and potential woman.
ReplyDeleteThish is the best story because the girl who suffer many problems but stil brave, strong..and this is the main point.
ReplyDeletethis one is the best story because the girl who suffer msny problems but she still brave , strong..and this is the best point
ReplyDeleteVery good story! I like how you stayed positive and kept moving forward after all of that.
ReplyDeleteI can really feel what you felt by your writing. Maybe not the whole thing, but definitely a piece. I felt your fear and sadness. I'm glad you're happy now and I'm thankful you could share a piece of yourself like this. It must of taken a lot of courage. Definitely a great piece.
ReplyDeleteYour story captivated me from the moment I started reading. It is very intense and I admire you bravery for sharing your story.
ReplyDeleteMakayla, this was such an amazing testimony ad it's amazing to see how far you've come. I think by sharing this you showed all of us that whatever happens in life is only going to help us for the better and shape us as a person. - Eileen
ReplyDeleteYou are such a strong individual. The description of such events greatly portray the events and evoke emotion out of the reader. Very touching.
ReplyDeleteI feel much empathy towards this story. Though I am not a foster child myself, i had an older brother who died of cancer when he was 6 and a adopted brother in the military so i can see how much family can change our lives, for the good or the bad. I was so inspired while reading and admire your courage. You are very strong and I am glad to hear that you now have a good and loving family. This just shows that all have a story, and no one should be afraid to tell it. Thank you for sharing this incredible and amazing story.
ReplyDeleteThis is truly so inspirational and I can't imagine how much courage it took for you to telling us for your story. As I read, it was so touching because everybody hides their own struggles and by this narrative, we know that we aren't the only one. It is truly beautiful. I honestly have no words for this. It's just so GREAT! Thank you so much for sharing this. This is one of my favorites
ReplyDeleteThis is honestly one of my favorites because it's very mysterious in the beginning and towards the End it's a little relieving but still slightly sad. You're very brave for uploading this.
ReplyDeleteperfect, it made me tear up a little because it was so touching!
ReplyDeleteI couldn't stop reading as it was from a three year olds perspective and moved on to how you got older, it really caught my attention. it must have been hard for you and this story was very touching. I really liked this piece
ReplyDelete-jaedon adan
The beginning of the story sounds like a horror movie waiting to happen. Being separated from your family at such a young age must have been very difficult. It was a relief how at the end you were able to continue with your life even stronger than you were before. It shows that no matter what happens you can still come out on top or at least a better person. Very compelling story.
ReplyDeleteWow. This was something else. I didm't expect this to be a true story but then it began making sense. I admire how brave you're being and I know how much it took to write something like this. It really made me think about my parents and my family. Keep doing you and don't ever let anyone tell you otherwise.
ReplyDeleteThis made me want to cry. I rarely get hit that hard with emotion and this hit me real hard. I think you did a great job and I envy how headstrong you are.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! Glad that everything turned out good and you have become a stronger person.
ReplyDeleteYour piece was very moving and inspirational. I admire your bravery in telling your story. I also like that your piece reminds us that our literature doesn't have to be long to move someone but of good quality and your piece was good quality.
ReplyDeletethe was really good. it made me want to keep reading. I like the way the plot was set up and how hey approached the writing. -Garrett Lachase
ReplyDeleteYou really utilized the strategy of psycho analysis on yourself to provide an engaging read that let the reader feel like they were experiencing your story with you.
ReplyDeleteI liked how this story felt so personal and unique because you used the present and active tense; I could get a glimpse of the story through your perspective and feelings. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI loved how open and honest this post was.I could almost see and feel everything being described.
ReplyDeleteReally intense story. The way you wrote it really connects the reader to the story.
ReplyDeleteYour story shows just how strong you've already grown as a person. Thank you for sharing your experience. It reminds me that everyone has a story. Yours made me contemplate on life and just how diverse we all are.
ReplyDeleteThat was a good and sad story everything was perfect awesome job!
ReplyDeleteThis piece actually ripped my heart out, I can't be able to imagine such the devastation of going through that. The way the birth mother said that actually made me quite angry, silly, I know. If this story is actually your true story, so much respect goes out to you. I love the way you're so strong after it all. I can really not stress it enough, but the fact you know you are you and the past does not define you in anyway really gets me in that 'wow' mood. My mouth was open reading all of this. xx
ReplyDeleteReading the title, reading your story and going back to the title really put into perspective how much you've grown as a person and the fact that you've come out of this trial and still can be positive and not put up a facade is incredible, thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteTalk about a harsh upcoming. But you stay positive and keep above the dark abyss of allowing the world to make you bitter. Stay yourself and don't let anyone take that from you.
ReplyDeleteWOW! the first few beginning sentence's caught my attention! This personal narrative by you was truly amazing, it would be a great book! I loved it (: And I'm glad you are OK
ReplyDeletethis story is so far my favorite one. good job
ReplyDeleteVery Interesting.
ReplyDeleteThis is a touching story, thank you for sharing this. AMAZING WORK!!!
ReplyDeleteA really powerful piece and the story overall is very interesting for me. But the grammars do need some improvements for it could be somewhat awkward to read.
ReplyDeleteWow. This piece definitely kept me wanting to read more. It was very emotional, thanks for sharing. Great job!
ReplyDeleteMakayla, thank you for sharing your story with us. This was heartbreaking. I could feel the pain through your words. I really admire your ability to move on and live your life with positivity. You are so strong and brave!
ReplyDeleteThis was a very powerful piece. This was an amazing story. I really enjoyed the powerful words that came with the story's plot.
ReplyDeleteVery simple but in a good way. Very nice job writing and telling your story.
ReplyDelete-Anthony Absher
I am speechless. First, I would like to give you props because it must have taken a lot of courage to tell this story because it couldn't have been easy for you. Second, I loved the way you told your story; the detail and emotion behind your words really touched me; especially because you talked about how you keep your head held high despite what has happened in your past. Thank you for sharing this with us
ReplyDeleteI really admire you for having the courage to share your story. I was brought to tears while reading it because you my dear is such a strong person that I don't know who I would have grown up to be. I'm glad that you grew up wonderfully despite the hardships you had faced as an adolescent. I hope more happiness is brought upon you in the future.
ReplyDeleteWhile reading your story I began to think about what a great movie this would be, only to find out that it was already a movie. It is your movie, the one where you have the power to create a beautiful ending regardless of the beginning and I see a great ending, you already have the pieces for it and you are on your way there. Thank you for sharing a beautiful and touching story that has yet to be finished (: yaaaas deja blue !!
ReplyDeleteBEAUTIFUL! I am now standing and clapping because this is one of the most sad and uplifting things I have ever read. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteWow! Good story I really enjoyed reading This it mad me want to cry.
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