Well there was a flower that blossomed. Not sure where or how but it did and with it thornes
rose. Even so, people come to it due to the beauty it holds, like a Rose. Still the flower is not
sure why the thorns are there, to keep people away on purpose maybe? It didn’t ask for the
thornes to exist yet...they do. Many people come to wonder at its beauty, a beautiful fragrance
of a heart that spreads care and understanding to others around it. It has petals that blossom
out like a hug but no one dare get too close? Or is the flower not allowing them, keeping its
thorns atop? There is always one person who breaks and cuts down said thorns to cherish that
beautiful flower that others just adored from afar. After awhile that one person-believing they
have taken all of the thorns away-prick themselves on another causing the grip on the flower to
loosen just the slightest from surprise. Thinking nothing of it they pass it on as a mere accident,
continuing to tare the thorns down they grip the flower once more. They run into more thorns.
The flower doesn’t understand why the thorns still exist, it wants them gone, forever. At this
point the person's grip completely lossens letting the flower go from the sting it scared onto
them. “Why?” the flower thinks to itself. “Why am I like this, have these thorns? Why do they let
me go so easily after holding on for so long?” the flower can’t figure out who to blame. Well, is
there really anyone to blame? After sometime the person returns to the flower but doesn’t pick it
up like before, their touch hesitant as their fingers twitch back each time they reach out. Too
afraid...afraid of what exactly? Afraid of being pricked yet again by another unwanted thorn? Or
making the commitment of suffering or helping the scared flower lose its painful thorns? Selfish
reasons? The flower was suffering on its own with these unwanted confusing sharp spikes.
Does the person need to find a pretty flower without thorns to satisfy them until they are ‘strong’
enough, ‘mature’ enough to handle the BEAUTIFUL flowers thorns? The flower can’t help but
think. “Why, why do I exist. Just for show, to make others feel better about themselves with no
room left to make myself feel...good or have someone make me feel good, special,
loved...happy but not temporary happiness but eternal..?” the flowers thoughts cut deep,
feelings it wasn't even aware of. “If I didn’t exist I wouldn’t be hurt everytime I become ‘happy’ or
‘secure’. I wouldn’t have to suffer in exchange for someone else’s well being...every time...but
no! I can’t think like that. Those are selfish thoughts, you pathetic drama queen. ...But then
again, if I didn’t exist I wouldn’t prick people. Cause the person I grew to trust, love and care
completely about pain, sadness, worry, or heartache.” Its thoughts tumbled.
“Why do I exist exactly...?”
Instead of a thorn this time the person unconsciously ripped off a petal...a gorgeous petal.
“Why do I exist exactly...?”
Instead of a thorn this time the person unconsciously ripped off a petal...a gorgeous petal.
I enjoyed the figurative language you used in your piece, especially " It has petals that blossom out like a hug" . Good work !!
ReplyDeleteA truly interesting read. The metaphor of the rose is executed so well that its parallelism to real life is clear and coherent. Furthermore the meaning behind the whole situation is absolutely well expressed and relevant to many in the modern day. Overall it was a pleasurable read.
ReplyDeleteYour use of figurative language and imagery couldn't get me to stop reading! I especially liked when you talked about the unwanted thorns, as everyone seems to have their own thorns they don't want to deal with, but make the flower beautiful and unique. I think questioning why our "thorns" exist is really one of the great questions in life we never get an exact answer to. I feel that is a motivation for us to live and discover the aspects of these thorns within our lives. Thank you for sharing :)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading this piece because it was very unique. The rose metaphor was well executed and gave the story more depth. Also, the message of the story was very good as well. Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the creative language and mood of your piece, it was wonderfully written and very interesting. The rose metaphor was written so well, it was very captivating while reading. Great work!!!
ReplyDeleteGreat use of personification with the flower and it's petals and thorns, to convey a deeper message that I think really connects to quite literally anyone reading. This was very good and caused me to reflect and relate to both the helpless flower and the innocent bystander observing and holding the flower. I enjoyed this read! I think stories like this are important to get us to question our own realities!
ReplyDeleteAmazing work! I was hooked until the very end! I loved the imagery and the personification of a rose. It was a completely different perspective, but a truly enjoyable piece.
ReplyDeleteI really like the figurative language of this piece! The personification of the flower works well and correlates the message I believe this piece is trying to send. Good job!
ReplyDeleteRuth, I very much enjoyed your use of figurative language in this piece. It was very well written. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this piece of writing! The use of figurative language, especially the personification and tying it in with the flower and its containments, drew me in more and more. The more I read, the more I understood the flower and the person observing it. Overall, great work! Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteGarret Janikowski
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I agree with you that beauty takes pain. It takes a lot of time, effort, and money to obtain beauty and I truly reflected that within your amazing piece. Thanks for your perspective.
ReplyDeleteI've always liked flowers, and this piece made me like them even more. The personification and humanization of the flower really helped me relate to it, great job :)
ReplyDeleteI love the figurative language! Beautifully written piece!! - Sofia Rosales
ReplyDeleteThis was such a great read! I love how you are able to tell such a beautiful piece with the amount of figurative language and imagery. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI loved your usage of figurative language and details throughout the piece which made it so vivid and easy to visualize the flower. It was short and yet powerful! Great Job!
ReplyDeleteHmmm. This piece has charater, it's own way of being read, like a conversation, or when someone sits you down to tell you of a story that retains relevance. I'm really loving this months reads, this yet another great piece!
ReplyDelete-Michael Pursley
This piece was so interesting to read! The personification of the flower was done well and its easy to relate to the flowers feelings of disappointment that it feels after hurting those that adore it. Your use of imagination and figurative meanings made it so interesting I loved it!
ReplyDeleteI totally agree with you that there is beauty in pain just as there is pain in beauty. It requires a great deal of investment, exertion, and self-fulfilled promises to get to where you really want to go and I really felt that inside your stunning piece. Makes me wonder how many people think of pain as beauty, an abstract idea. I enjoy the all the figurative language too!
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