“BEEP,BEEP,BEEP”. As I hit the snooze button I look at my alarm and it says 19 of
October 2030 6:15 AM. Barely making it out of bed, I reluctantly wake up half asleep and did my usual morning routine, you know, brushing my teeth, taking a shower, cleaning my bed, skipping breakfast and driving to school. On my way to school I noticed that the weather today was as beautiful as possible, a nice cool breeze swept through the town letting us forget about the hot desert sun. My school is of average size with multiple buildings built 4 stories tall, the buildings are as close together as possible and wherever I walk there is no lack of shade to bask into. I arrived at school just in time for my zero period class; god why did I take this class it forces me to wake up early. Tired I try to catch a quick nap but this seemed impossible. Like every time I dipped my head to the sleeping position, I am rudely woken up by three crashing cords, repeating itself over and over again. For someone who has sensitive hearing, this caused unbearable pain and I was ecstatic when my saving grace arrived, the bell. Running out of the classroom, I dash to my first real class of the day. The teacher here is what you expect out of school, a lesson that takes the whole period with proper and adequate explanation on all topics he discusses. Nothing much happens but the constant ringing of the clashing cords from earlier is stuck in my head. My next period or as I like to call it my sleeping period, was normal as usual,
the teacher got lost in his lesson and stuck in explanation. In preparation to take full advantage of
the time, I laid my head down I prepare to take a nice nap but something weird occurs, every
time I close my eyes my name would be called; it feels like someone is whispering my name to
my ear becoming more frantic by the second but every time I looked around I see nobody called
me. It must be my imagination but it was successful in making me more restless, I can't fall
asleep. After many futile attempts, I give up and listen to him very carefully, trying to catch up
on the notes I missed. After this class, I arrive at the 3rd period class with glee. The teacher is
very relaxed and usually has an empty lesson. As such nothing unusual happens just the
occasional typing on the computer. However, during the class, every fifth person’s face started to
go black. This gave me quite the scare but I attribute this to a lack of sleep. Terrified, I go to the
4th period class, a mandatory physical education course taken by students of all grades. It also
seems like my hallucinations are getting worse as now every third person's face is blacked out
which yet again is terrifying . What's even worse is that today is the weekly mile run. As an unfit
person such as myself, I hate this as I believe it is a waste of time and energy. Due to fear and
lack of sleep I got a personal record of 9 mins on the mile. After PE is my favorite time of the
day, lunch. Trying to act like nothing is happening, just rush to my seat next to the field and sit
down to eat my delicious nonexistent food. That reminds me I forgot to make lunch. Depressed I
wait for the bell to ring in 20 minutes. As I walk to the 5th period an earthquake starts from
nowhere. It looked like the set of the movie 2012 out here. Frightened I run to the open field near
next to where I sit for lunch to stay safe. While running I keep stumbling as every step I took I
lost my footing. All of a sudden I trip on a rock and fell to the ground hard, it felt as if someone
punched me in the gut. Then my world goes to black and I wake up in bed, finding that my
roommate has been trying to wake me up. It seems that my alarm has been going off constantly
and my roommate has been shaking my bed, constantly yelling my name to wake up, and just
recently punched me in the gut as a last ditch attempt to wake me up. He says, “Wake up sleepy
head we are almost late and you still need to drive us to school.” As I turn my head towards my
alarm, it says 19 of October 2030 6:45 AM.
The beginnings of the prompt was a perfect representation of my morning as well because I hate waking up early for zero period everyday. And the ending was very unexpected because I thought it would've been the next day, but it wasn't. -shrey
ReplyDeleteThis short story was really great as its all something everyone can relate to as we all don't like waking up to do our responsibilities and how much we wish we can lay in bed or relax all day -Donavhen Palos
ReplyDeleteI like how this story keeps you on your toes. When you thing one stereotype is going to happen, it doesn't. I really enjoyed it. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI weirdly can relate to almost everything in this story. Great use of imagery and details, it made the story so realistic and relatable. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis story really utilizes imagery and diction when you describe your settings. I feel like I was there surrounded by the buildings and nice weather that offsets the extreme heat. This piece was very entertaining. Good Job Zhong!
ReplyDeleteI love the connection and perspective your short story has to your audience, I felt myself relating to the struggles of waking up in the mornings having to face the day. Your use of diction added a layer to your piece that made it enjoyable to ready. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI love how this sets up the story to be somewhat of a regular school day like ours but it continues to be more and more twisted as reflected by the time period in which this story takes place. The ending was also an excellent way to leave the readers wondering what happened. -Chase W.
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