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Wednesday, November 6, 2019

A Welcomed Surprise--Josh



My older cousin, and I have always been very close. We practically did everything
together for as long as I can remember. She was there when I was born and I was there for her High School graduation from Montclair High School. I even managed to give her the nickname “Yang” when I was very young that we all still use when talking with her. Yang was a huge part of everyone's lives and is known for being super relaxed and would do anything, one time she even hitchhiked all the way back from her college in Monterey Bay to our house in Fontana.
Yang was the first to go to college in the new generation of our family and it was a surprise when she told us she dropped out. We all thought she was wasting her ability and throwing away her chances at life, but then she told us her new plan, to become a United States Sailor. She had decided college wasn’t right for her and instead wanted to join the US Navy. This was an even bigger surprise than her sudden drop out, because if you ever met her you’d never think of her as the “Military” type. She is the least serious person in the entire family and literally can’t go five minutes without making some sort of joke. However the Navy was her new goal and nothing was going to stop her from achieving that goal. 

What followed for the next year was Yang doing the most exercise I had ever seen her do. She started eating clean immediately, working out everyday, running everyday and immediately changed her attitude and demeanor towards everything. We were all so incredibly
proud of her for how she was handling her new life. Nearing the end of December of 2018 she told us that she would ship out at the end of March in 2019. Navy bootcamp is about 2 months long so we wouldn’t be able to see her again until about June. 

When March of 2019 finally came about we held a huge goodbye party for her at our Aunt’s house. All of our Uncles and Aunts from mm Mom’s side had come to have fun and see her off. We had all kinds of foods and drinks and it was just a very good time, it almost made you forget what we were celebrating. That party was also the only time I had seen our other cousin Rachael be so drunk that I had to help her walk to the car where her brother was waiting to drive her home. As the end of the night came around Yang had given a small speech along the lines of “Thank you guys so much for everything you’ve done for me, thank you for always supporting me and I love you all.” that line alone was able to put all the Aunts into a crying mess, and I won’t lie it was getting to me alittle bit too. At the very end of the night borderline morning we had said our goodbyes and good lucks and went back home. That would be the last time I’d seen her for awhile. 

As time went on we had received a few letters from her and our parents told us there was a problem at the Navy boot camp and Yang would have to stay their for another month while they sorted things out. This was a huge let down to me as I was really hoping that we could spend the summer together again. However, our parents also told us we needed to clean the house as my Mom’s friend needed a place to stay for a week while they fumigated her house. I didn’t think much of it at the time while I was cleaning or preparing the house but something about the way they said it had made me feel like they were lying but either way I didn’t really care.

The day for my Mom’s friend to come to the house finally rolled around. My dad had pulled me aside and asked for my help to bring in all her bags. As we began walking past my Mom I saw her phone had her camera open and I thought to myself “That's kinda weird” as my dad opened the door I saw our other cousin, yang’s sister first at the end of the walkway and I was really confused. Then as you could probably guess by now, Yang stepped out from behind my Mom’s car and it was the best surprise I had ever gotten in a long time. She was standing there in her Uniform just waiting for us, and after seeing her it was the only time I had ever cussed in front of my Mom because I was so excited to see her there. It felt like I hadn’t seen her in years and I was so happy to finally see her again. 

She stayed with us for a week before having to leave again to go to her job training. She is currently deployed on the USS Abraham Lincoln, as a fighter jet mechanic. She has been gone for about 3 almost 4 months now and her deployment should be ending soon. I’m hoping my parents try and surprise us again with her Homecoming.

17 comments:

  1. The way you were able to flow the story along with your personal connection to the situation tied in the piece quite nicely. I enjoyed reading the wave of emotions you experienced and I myself felt these emotions as well while reading. Your engagement with the reader made the story easy to follow and personal to each individual. Great job!

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  2. I loved the way the story flowed and how you expressed your emotion. It was really easy to relate with the sadness you felt, and the confusion as it led up to your cousin surprising you at home. This was an amazing piece, congratulations. -Trenton Robles

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  3. Your piece was very powerful and you conveyed the feeling and emotions well. This was a very touching piece and the way you flowed the story made it intriguing and kept me interested. Great job.

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  4. A great piece of literature, the way you described your childhood with all the different elements of the Chicano culture was something that I can relate to and was truly inspirational. My favorite part out of your story was your memory of the Carne Asada tacos.

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  5. As dearly as I have love for my family I was able to connect with this piece and it made me love so much than I already had. The emotions that it flowed throughout the piece made it very intriguing. - Alexander Pereyra

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  6. Reading this reminds me that people are surprising, in good ways. Also, you conveyed your emotions so well that I forgot this was a shorter piece as I was reading. Thank you for writing this, and it was well-written. ~Marisa J

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  7. I love how you could easily set the story up to relate and connect to the situation and being able to use thoughts and emotions to make a very touching piece

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  8. I see a lot of reunion videos of military families online and they make me happy, sometimes I cry, but reading this gives me the same heartwarming feelings. The description of you and Yang's time together really drawed me in. I really liked the last two paragraphs for two reasons: 1) you cussed in front of your mom and 2) I picture this huge smile across your face when you see Yang.

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  9. I enjoyed this piece. I liked how I could sense your own emotion as I read your words. They were your words, not you trying to steal another's words or story and make it your own. Good authentic piece! - Ethan M.
    P.S. I hope they surprise you again as well :P

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  10. Amazing job pulling this piece together. Your writing style is very comfortable, allowing the reader to be able to sympathize and connect with you very easily. This allows your piece to be very personal with the reader and it is a great story to share with us. I'm glad that you have a strong relationship with your cousin and am very happy that you were able to see her again, which proves the effectiveness of your writing. Good job!

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  11. I like the happy ending of the story to recover from the presiding tone of loneliness when Yang is gone. It's almost as if she's the representation of the family's joy, as indicated by her goofy personality. Good job executing that.

    -Jacob Azurin

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  12. While reading your story, I was able to somewhat experience the emotions that you felt during these times. Your narrative not only captivated me, but it was also able to pull me all the way into the story you told and it was a pleeasant experience. Wonderful job.

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  13. this was a really cute story, it made me tear up a bit i love seeing and hearing about two people uniting

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  14. Your story is very captivating and comfortable.
    dejanae

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  15. I enjoyed this piece and it brought so many memories for me while reading.
    -dejanae

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  16. I like how the story ended on a positive note. I really like your style of writing.
    -dejanae

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  17. This piece is very cute and positive, The piece altough doesnt relate to me can make me feel emotions through the way you detailed how you felt and how it effected you. It is a well written piece with nice flow

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